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Re: Mazrath
Ok, a few things before I'll let this go:
*describe his weapon and armor in detail -- appearance, special properties, etc...if it's "rune armor", surely it's more than just black steel *explain the symbol of Talazar *the pic is great, however it's small. Add a little description along with it so we know CLEARLY what this guy looks like *Explain what a Talazarian actually is; if you create a new race, I need to know what they are like. If you do this either above under "Race" or in your bio, whatever. It just needs to be there. *I have a hard time believing an army of demons as being a "noble race". *Other than some major grammar faux-pas in your bio, it's pretty good, and that's a rare compliment from me. ^_~ *Add a few more strengths. As a general rule, it's good to balance the number of strengths w/ weaknesses. K, fix those up and let me know when you've finished.
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Re: Mazrath
OK thanks, i was in a bit of a hurry and was never going to expect it to be approved. This was just a trial version.
Alright later tonight i will go back and fix it as best i can ![]()
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