Valkyhn

Valkyhn (Val-kin)

Name: Valkyhn
Age: 21 (Human Years)
Race: Okami (Wolf Demon/Werewolf)
Sex: Male
Hair: Dark Brown. Partly covers eyes and goes down to neck.
Eyes: One Green. The other… Green
Weight: 145 pounds
Height: 5ft 7in tall

Weapons: Claws, teeth, etc. Also, (when in human form) A very long sword (blade wise) named Katankagayaki (Blade of Radiance).

Armor: None.

Strengths: Very smart, very cunning. Has the ability to manipulate people. But, it only works with those weak of mind. Very athletic. Has high agility and endurance. Able to think quickly on all four feet. Power of persuasion (only works on those with corrupt hearts and/or weak of mind)

Weaknesses: Relies heavily on speed. Isn’t really strong. Anger issues. Cannot take jokes or burns about his family.

Skills/Magic: Able to transform into human at will (Werewolf). Has many strategies used against many types of opponents. No magic, unless you counting shape-shifting.

Appearance: (When wolf) Dark blue fur. (Human) Valkyhn wears a plain, black shortsleeve T-shirt and blue jeans. He ahs a loose belt, so to be able to fit his sword and sheath into it, but not to loose where ti would move around or fall out. His pants have many cuts, holes, and patches. They are also very faded around his knees. he wears normal tennis shoes and low-cut socks. He also sometimes wears a Houston Astros baseball cap.

Personality: Valkyhn is very easygoing. he makes friends easily and can be very helpful when they are going through situations. He si the type of guy who anyone, girl or boy, can talk to. he has made many friends in the 3 years since he left the Ookami. Valkyhn is also very smart and very funny. he can put a smile on anyone's face even when they are angry or sad adn make everyone forget about their troubles.

Bio: Valkyhn was once an Ookami God. He has no parents. Well, he had parents but he does not know who they were. When Valkyhn was born, he was born a normal human… or so his parents thought. He had received a blood trait that only appears every hundred years. (For the math-challenged, it last appeared in 1885.) The blood trait was, well, being a werewolf. Every full moon, he changed into a wolf. No matter what time of day, where he was, what season, etc. etc. All the while, his parents never knew. Then, one night, a man mysteriously appeared on their doorstep, asking about Valkyhn and his blood trait. (Oh, I forgot to mention that, at the time, his name was not Valkyhn but Timothy) Not knowing who he was, the parents threatened to call the cops and the man left. But, one week later, they realized that Timothy (Valkyhn) had changed shape. He was a wolf. The next night, the mysterious man showed up again and explained to the family about the blood trait that he had inherited. He also explained that, as a ritual, he was not allowed to live with his real parents and must come live with him. At first the parents argued, but eventually let him go. But, before he went, the parents asked him if they would ever see him again. The man said no.
Two days later, the parents were found dead in their house. The police called it suicide, but it wasn’t suicide. It was murder.
As the years went on, Timothy grew up with the other Ookami gods. He was adopted by an Ookami couple and lived with them for eighteen years. He was taught the ways of the Ookami and their customs. His mentor, Valkyhn, trained him in the art of fighting. Timothy was very skilled both in wolf form and human. He was taught how to control his transforming so he could transform whenever he wanted. When he was about fourteen years old, his mentor was killed by a rogue Ookami. Out of respect for him, Timothy changed his name to Valkyhn.
When he was eighteen years old, he was finally told the truth in a ritual that all Ookami must go through. He was told about his real parents and that how he had been adopted. Although, the one thing that he was not told, was how the man who took him that night was the one who killed his parents and was also the rogue Ookami, for no one knew this. That same night, Valkyhn had been filled with emotions. One of them was betrayal. Following this emotion, he ran away from his home, searching for his true parents. Alas, he will never know that his parents were dead and that his search will be for naught. Or will he? For the rogue Ookami watches him. He follows Valkyhn on all of his adventures and his continued search for his parents.
And so the story goes on…

Hello? Won't anyone reply? I need to know if this will be approved! Please tell me!

Apologies for the long wait, but we happen to have lives to lead as well.

1) Make the Appearance more detailed. A lot more detailed.

2) Do the same for the Personality.

3) Ther personal comments are amusing on the first read through, but there's really no purpose for them. Would you mind taking them out? Also, remember that the Bio is supposed to be a piece of fiction about your character's background, not a word-for-word account of how you'd explain it to someone in person.

The first two are more important than the third. I'll check back once you've made some changes.

Okay, I'm sorry about the bio, but can I keep it the way it is, and change it with my next character? Pwease? Also, i lengthened the appearance and personality. If you think I should take out the republican, tell me, but I think that what party he is is part of his personality. I also took out the comments, although i really didn't want to. if i missed one, tell em and I'll take it out. So, other than that, I think I'm done. Please check again.

Oh, also, thank you very much for taking your time to improve my character and look over it.

Change it with your next character? Would you mind explaining what you mean?

Still, I said the first two were more important, so it should be alright. I don't think putting in the "republican" bit would work so well, though - things like that have different meanings in different parts of the world. You'd be better off explaining what you mean by "republican".

Oh, I'll change the republican. I keep forgetting this is worldwide ><'
Anyway, what I meant was that I won't write the Bio with my next character like I did with this one, like I originally planned too.
But, if you want me to change it on this one too, I guess...

Hm...well, now the "republican" problem is out of the way, I can't see any reason to hold you back - but I'll hold you to writing your next Bio in a different style.

*approves*

*Jumps up and squeals like a giddy schoolgirl* Yah! Thank You! Now, I can finally....... go to school! Wooho- wait! School!? Aww man!!!

*Stops jumping and walks off, head down*
*Sniffles*