Seither Hawkins

Name: Seither Hawkins

Age: 18

Race: Genetically altered human

Sex: Male

Hair: Dirty Blonde hair, more brown then blonde

Eyes: Silver

Weight: 110 lbs

Height: 5 feet 7 inches

Weapon: Two twin gunblades, made of a steel/silver mix
Armor: Kelvar enforced clothing (For those who don't know, it can stop a small caliber bullet and some cuts, and all scratches from rocks, sticks, nails, ect.)

Strengths: Main is stealth, chance of getting caught is 1 in 17. Secondary ability is speed, runs 2 paces faster then the average runner. 20/10 vision and the ability to see clearly at night without use of technology. Able to sense person's alignment (friend or foe).

Weakness: Can lose temper and is genetically weak to gold. Also has a fairly large apettite.

Skills/Magic: Lock picking successful 7 out of 15 times on average lock, 9 out of 10 on easy, and 1 out of 50 on hard.

Appearance: Slim build, slightly muscler, dirty blonde hair curves at the end of bangs, always looks windswept. Carries a side field pack, which is a light tan, the slings over shoulder. Wears mainly white Kelvar enforced clothing, sometimes tan. White shoes, size 8. Skin is slightly tanned.

Personality: Fun loving and carefree, always has a smile on his face, mechiveious, never backs down from a challenge, serious fighter.

Biography: Born in a small and now no longer existant kingdom called Orika, he was seperated from his family at birth by the military, genetically enhanced, and trained to be an elite stealth warrior. He managed to escape during The Wars, two years ago, and has been wondering the world ever since, taking work wherever he can find it. His only morals are that he never lets someone else die unless he can't stop it, but he will do anything and everything required to do the job he is hired to do. He doesn't fear death, and has a natural air of trust around him. Treats friends with kindness and care, but treats his enemies with nothing but rude nuetralism unless angered. Shows no mercy to his enemies, but has been known to hesitate when stuck between saving a life and completing his job.

Special Info: During battles, he often listens to his mp3 player, as his sight is normally enough to get him through a battle.

Um...okay...

1) Explain what a gunblade is.

2) Lose the string of odds and just say how good he is at everything. For instance, he's good at sneaking around and can run faster than most people. I'd also suggest either losing the friend/foe thing, or explaining it.

3) Give the guy a weakness that matters in combat. How many people around here are dum enough to lug lumps of gold around?

4) I don't mind the lock-picking skills, even if it is moderately useless, but I say again - lose the string of odds. This isn't a maths class, nor is it a computer game.

5) Actually write out Seither's Personailty, please. One-liners don't cut it around here. And before you try it, neither do two-liners.

6) Expand the Bio a lot. Tell us how the military enhanced him, what hese "Wars" were, how he escaped, what he's done since - everything like that.

Got all that? Good.