Theron - the silent hunter

Name: Theron Silkon

Age: 23

Race: Human

Sex: male

hair: none

Eyes: brown

Weight: 60kg

Height: 5ft 7

Weapon: Twin swords- Motorx and Iwatales. Single-handed swords that he weilds at the same time.

Strengths: Fast and agile - the swords leave some mean cuts.

Weaknesses: If you hit him strongly enough, he will go flying. No magic skills.

Skills: Has no magic.
He can use the air particles around him to detect where his foe's next attack will comes from. Obviously, this is useless against magical attacks.
His swords are tempered to be un-shatterable (if that's even a real word) and sharp enough to cut through concrete, without leaving a visible gap.
He is light on his feet adn can run up walls and perform other such feats.

Appearance:
A man who does not wear any kind of shirt/tunic/etc. He is thin but fairly well-muscled. His is not ugly, nor handsome, just plain. he has pale skin, and his arms reach down to his waist.
He wears loose fitting pants and sandals. His swords are strapped to his back by two sheathes. His hair is shaved off, leaving his head smooth. he has black rings around his eyes.

Personality: Mysterious. He tends to try and just get his job done. He does not enjoy being in crowds for long periods of time. In private, he tends to his wounds, and at other times he is excercising.

Biography:
Silent and deadly, Theron travels the world. Both his past and his goals are unclear, he seeks to simply defeat those who step in his way. No-one truly understands him. Sometimes he deals a simple defeat, other times he slaughters.

He was born a mute and has never uttered a word. Whether he chooses not to or can not, is unclear.

His legs are stronger then his arms, but neither should be under-estimated.
A typical excercise routine for him usually presses him to the extremes. He will run through meadows, climb the smoothest cliffs, lift the heaviest rocks and swim upstream. Due to never wearing anything on his upper-body, his body is tempered by the weather conditions, meaning he has ample defenses to heat and cold. He seems to be aware of the fact that he cannot use magic, so he makes up for it by attempting to gain muscle over magic. He believes that if he becomes stronger, he will have the advantage over magic-users.

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Name: Smash

Age: ?

Race: Unknown

Sex: Male

hair: none

eyes: Red

Weight: 40kg

Height: 5ft

Weapon: None

Strengths: Is able to perform some seemingly random moves.

Weakness: Low attack power. hates water.

Skills/Magic:
Flamebreath: Breathes fire. Simple. Fire-based
Rolling Destruction: Curls up into a ball, spikes emerge from his back, and he rolls at top-speed at the enemy - can be used to dash over water and through the air. Earth based.
Endless Doom: His hands and feet turn into spikes and he cart-wheels at the enemy. This can also be used to traverse walls, ceilings and slippery surfaces. Sadly, he can only cart-wheel in one direction.
Spasm: A move in which he transforms into a Shadowy ball of black. He bounces around before launching himself at the foe. he is easiest to hit when he flies at you.

Appearance:
He is a black, ball-like creature. He has legs as long as his arms (his legs make up half his body-height) and feet and hands that are chubby. He has a tail which juts up from behind him and then bends back down. It is short and not used for much. His mouth is large and has four fangs in it, whilst his eyes are angry and red.

Personality: Very fun-loving. He hates people who don't know how to relax. Often makes a bad joke. Rarely makes a good one.

Biography: At the edge of the galaxy, where a single planet was shunned by star-light, a creature, with red eyes and pointed fangs lived.

Eventually, this planet came within range of the Dome itself. When the creature sensed the presence of others, it built itself a single-seater UFO, and took off. Landing on the first planet it came to, the odd creature waved good-bye to the sad and lonely planet that had once been its home. Turning only once to watch as the planet, no longer having any inhabitants, slowly drifted away from existence.

No-one is quite sure why he came, but he's here, and he's here to stay. He is an odd creature, presumably the last (or first) of his kind. Though nobody questions him about his origins, as they do not truly know his natural instincts.

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Oh, and if you're reading this, check out Doknoxa too in my sig! PLEEASE!!!

Bigger Torkoal, are you trying to have two chars approved at the same time?

I'll deal with Theron alone for now.

1) Would you mind expanding the Strengths a bit? It's rather short and vague right now.

2) Really expand the Weaknesses. There's virtually nothing there. "Weak defences" is also too vague.

3) All of the stuff you've put under Skills really should go down in Strengths as well. And perhaps you could alter the first one so that Theron can hear it coming rather than "use the air particles"? For a guy with no magic, that's very suggestive of magical ability. Oh, and remove the slice-through-concret-with-no-gap part for the swords. I'm fine with being un-shatterable - perhaps you mean unbreakable? - but they'd need to be thinner than tin foil to leave no visible gap.

4) I want you to make the Appearance more detailed, please. Plus, you may want to put "He doesn't wear tops/shirts/etc" rather than "A topless man" - that suggests a pair of legs and nothing else to me.

5) Expand the Personality. A lot. This section is important.

6) Same as 5 with the Biography.