My first charicter!?!?!?

Name:Vancha

Age:58

Race:Vampire

Sex:Male

Hair:Red/Spikey

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Weight:182 pounds/13 stone

Height:6ft

Wepons:2 long thin swords are carried on either side of his legs,he often keep shuirikens with him for last resorts.
Aumorosent wear any,belives it isnt a proper fight when you have extra protection

Strengths:More accurate with shuirikens than his swords.

Weaknesses:Fire and Water,yet being trained with swords,he dosent come out that well in a sword fight.

Magic/Skills:None

Apperance:black lether boots,black trousers,red top and back coat(cuts in clothes from previos battles)

Personality:he is a nice,laid back person but when you mess with him,he is trapped in eternal rage until he finishes what he started.

Biography:Vancha was born in the civilisation of the Vampires somewhere in the forest of Nera,He grew mainly with his parents until he decided he wanted to explore the outside world,he had 2 brothers aged 12 and 17,Vancha left at Age 20,during his childhood with his brother's,he played and got into fights with his fellow family.he did not have any pets since the Vamires wanted they're civiliasation a secret they did not keep pets of any sort,he among most vampires belived of a vampire god that would keep them safe when danger was about.
When he left at age 20 he travelled by foot,walking for days and sleeping at night(Vampires are not what they are told to be,the can walk through daylight and eat garlic although they need a small amount of blood to last)
He cannot kill,Only severly injur his foe,he wants to keep his victims for another fight another day.
Vancha is not easy going as animals and humans have learnt from past experiances,he dislikes insult's made to him or about him or his Race and he dosent like loosing his swords,Vancha has trained for years with the swords he weilds,he dose not want to loose them.He is specialy fond with peacful area's like the countrysie or the desert.he can treat others with respect or he can treat others really badly.
His dream is that he would one day return to the clan as a master sword weilder and be proud of himself and all Vampires alike.
He has been expecting death for sometime,evry fight he got into he expected himself to die,he dose not fear death,Only prevents it.

NICE ONE VINNIE!!! but dont you think a vampire should be older??? maybe almost 100? because if he's had many fights and is expeirianced, thats the age you would expect him to be.just saying, thats all.

Not accepted just yet, I'd like you to add a combat-related weakness and maybe run the bio though a spellchecker. In battles, I'd prefer it if you didn't use things such as 'thru' etc.

Like HyruleHero said, an experienced vampire should probably be older, but I don't see that as a major problem.

i have edited my post(sorry for double posting like this)

Originally Posted by vinnie0107

i have edited my post(sorry for double posting like this)

I thought double posting was two of your own posts in a row. But, I'm still kinda like a newb so I might be wrong.

Okay, that's good enough. Accepted.

I suggest that you type up battle posts in MS word.