Nik Luen

Name: Nik Luen

Age: 5026 but she doesn't know that

Race: Harpy

Sex: female

Hair: brown and curly

Eyes: blue

Weight: 150 pounds

Height: 6' 4"

Weapon:

--==Huular Knife==--
poisonous knife, 10" long, the poison paralysis very slowly and can kill with in hours

--==Bastero Sword==--
The sword she had back before she became a Harpy, made by Notsil the Smithy, it is a one of a kind weighing less than half that of other swords Notsil had made of the same size, he achieved this by by using a very rare light weight steel, it has no other special properties. it is a European type broadsword with an actual gold hilt the blade it's self is 44" long and is gold on the sharp parts.

--==finger nails==--
always sharp at the tips, they are as strong as steal and are hard to break, and if they are broken she can grow a new one in seconds it causes very little pain if any.

Strengths:
Her brand of Harpy can control air make, typhoons, or just have a gentle breeze. she can see in inferred when she wants.

Weakness:
if water touches her skin it burns like acid. if even one of her feathers is missing she is unable to fly, after about an hour any cut feathers grow back, but she will be vulnerable for the whole hour.

Skills/Magic:
she can fly. she has the power to transport things light years in distance but after she uses it she must eat a bit of grotin, a plant, and wait 15 minutes for her to be able to use it again, Grotin can only be found in dark dank caves, on any planet. she can control O2 (oxygen) and she can use it as a weapon consentrating it like a needle and open skin.

Appearance:


Personality:
very easy going, doesn't like to fight, but will tear you up if you make her mad enough, she likes all manner of people/creatures. even as a Forgian she was happy and never got into fights, when she became a Harpy people taunted her and shunned her so she became more angry, so she kept more to herself on alien uninhabbitable worlds.

Biography:
Nik has been alive for many years, she stopped counting her age thousands of years ago. before she was a harpy she lived as a Forgian, a race of land based mammalians, there was an earthquake one day and opened up a fissure in the ground, which she fell into it had radio-active matter in it and it transformed her body and her genes, it also gave her long lasting life, but it also made her forget everything about her family and her life before the earthquake, though she would like to know more about it she can do nothing about it the information has no doubt been destroyed many thousands of years ago but now she spends her time looking for some sort of a family.
When she was a Forgian she was a happy kid. she was only a forgian for 14 years and she can't remember any of it so it is sort of unimportant to her life now.

Originally Posted by candc32

Name: Nik Luen

Strange name, especially for a chick. =P

Age: unknown

Even if she doesn't know her age, you MUST provide one. 'Unknown' translates to me as 'I don't give a damn because I whipped this character together in five minutes, now approve it, damn it!"

Race: Harpy

Watch out for KFC, is all I can say.

Sex: female

Woo!

Hair: brown and curly

Weird, but okay. x3

Eyes: blue

At least you didn't colour your words. =D

Weight: 150 pounds

Light as a feather, huh?

Height: 6' 4"

Meh, not the tallest I've ever heard of.

Weapon:

--==Huular Knife==--
poisonous knife, 10" long, the poison paralysis very quickly can kill with in hours

A ten-inch knife? Since a foot is 12 inches (Yes, I know my imperial despite being raised with metric) that means this 'knife' is so long it's be better classed as a shortsword, don't you think? Also, the toxin on the blade is too powerful. A single hit, and the character is quickly redused to a rag doll. Increase the time for the toxin to take effect... by alot.

--==Bastero Sword==--
The sword she had back before she became a Harpy, made by Notsil the Smithy, it is a one of a kind weighing less than half that of other swords Notsil had made of the same size. it is a European broadsword with an actual gold hilt the blade it's self is 44" long and is gold on the sharp parts

How did he get it to half the weight? Is it hollow inside, or did he use some arcane magic?

--==finger nails==--
always sharp at the tips, they are as strong as steal and are hard to break.

A little bit more detail here please. Like, are they a certain colour? If they break, would they hurt her or incapasitate her in battle?

Strengths:
Her brand of Harpy can control air make typhoons, or just have a gentle breeze. she can see in inferred when she wants.

Most types of Harpy can do that anyway. Also, this is about HER PERSONAL strenghts. Like, she may be able to do some things better then other harpys, for instance.

Weakness:
if water touches her skin it burns like acid

More weaknesses... a lot more.

Skills/Magic:
she can fly. she has the power to transport things light years in distance but after she uses it she must eat a bit of grotin, a plant, and wait 15 minutes for her to be able to use it again

Elaborate on this teleportation ability, also, what about that wind stuff you mentioned earlier? Moreover, is this Grotin rare? If so, where does it grow?

Appearance:

U-G-L-Y, you ain't got no alibi, you ugly! x3

Personality:
very easy going, doesn't like to fight, but will tear you up if you make her mad enough, she likes all manner of people/creatures

Yeah, all the personality of a tumbtack right now. Please, expand.

Biography:
Nik has been alive for many years, she stopped counting her age thousands of years ago. before she was a harpy she lived as a forgian, a race of land based mammalians, there was an earthquake one day and opened up a fissure in the ground, which she fell into it had radio-active matter in it and it transformed her body and her genes, it also gave her long lasting life, but it also made her forget everything about her family and her life before the earthquake, though she would like to know more about it she can do nothing about it the information has no doubt been destroyed many thousands of years ago but now she spends her time looking for some sort of family.

Please seperate the biography into proper paragraphs of three (3) to five (5) sentances each. Also, please elaborate on her life before and after the sudden (and possibly painful) transformation.

Fix all of this, and I'll give her another look.

it is finished comrade.

Yeah, okay. I think this is good enough.

~*Approved*~