Tayuki Mokimo

ZeldaZealot · #1 (**permalink**) [ ] 08-27-2009, 12:20 AM

Name: Tayuki Mokimo

Age: 20

Race: Lycanthrope(aka Werewolf)

Sex: Male

Hair: Sandy Blond

Eyes: Yellowish-Golden.

Weight: Depends on which form he is in.

Human Form: 170lb

Lycan Form: 200lb

Wolf Form: 130lb

Height: Would also change depending on which of his forms he is in.

Human Form : 5ft 4in

Lycan Form 7ft 1in

Wolf Form : 3 ft 2in (length is 4 ft and 5in from nose to tip of tail, the tail itself is just over 1 ft.)

Weapon: Luna's Light - A katana made out of a solidified form of the soft light of the moon. It was left behind by the Moon Goddess Luna to help the Lycans if they were ever in a dire situation, the last time it was wielded was in the First War, the knowledge of its power were lost as more and more generations pass by.

The handle is 11in long and the blade is 27in long, it is slightly curved, and weighs as much as a feather. It is unbreakable and never dulls(in the amount of light it gives or blade edge). Luna's Light is able to shape shift, limited only by the weilders own imagination, into any weapon or piece of armor or even a fusion of the two, but only up to 7 times a day. If forced to shape shift an 8th time it will last for 10 seconds before shattering, and will reform back within its sheath after 24 hours.

Strengths: Tayuki is twice as strong as the average human(which are able to lift about thier own weight, so Tayuki will be able to lift about 300 pounds in Human Form and about 800, bonus as a Lycan included, in Lycan Form). He is also twice as fast in terms of speed(so about 30mph in human form, 50mph in Lycan form, and 60-70mph in Wolf Form) and reflexes but not in agility. Tayuki has Faster Regeneration(explained more in the next paragraph). He also has the heighten sense of smell and hearing of a wolf. Tayuki has two other Forms that he can morph into.

Moon Phase Regeneration: The moon phases also affects how fast Tayuki can regenerate. If his limb was cut off around the full moon, then it would regrow in about 1 hour, if the same wound happened around the new moon it would take about 8 days to regrow(taking into account the moon becoming a quarter moon). If Tayuki lost 2 limbs or was cut horizontally in half at the waist, he will lost conscious in about 3 minutes, but will still survive on his own. If 3 limbs were cut off off, Tayuki will die if he does not get immediate help. If Tayuki was cut in half vertically, or if his head/all 4 limbs were cut off, he will die.

Transformation: There are 3 forms that Lycans can take, the first one is their True Form, also called the Lycan Form. This form is used daily when they are alone or dealing with others of their kind, it is also used to fight in as it doubles their strength, it takes about 30 minutes to morph into. The second form is the Wolf Form, this form is primarily used for traveling rural areas because of its speed and endurance for doing so, it takes about 5 minutes to morph into. The third form is their Human Form, it is primarily used for traveling urban areas, and dealing with humans, as humans aren't supposed to be aware that Lycans exists. It takes about 15 minutes to morph into, any clothes worn in their human forms disappear when they morph into either of the two other forms, and reappear when they morph back into their human forms.

Weakness: Tayuki, like most Lycans, fear weapons made out of silver, as any wounds made by it would cause him to heal at the same rate as a normal human, and Wolfsbane(aka Aconitum), which causes Lycans that breath some of it in to slowly paralyz, but there is something that is even more terrifing to him, the Undead(Kinetimortophobia FTW). He is also aware that he has no idea how to use Luna's Light. As Tayukis instincts have awoken, he is in constant battle against them/it within his own mind/actions.

Skills: Tayuki is a good violin player which allows him to entertain people for money. Tayuki is also a good tracker mostly due to his heighten senses. He has also tought himself how to pick simple locks when the question of how hard is it to pick a lock came to his mind.

Appearance(Human Form): Sandy blond hair that is combed backwards in a wavy pattern keeps the hair out of his eyes, small emerald-green crescent shaped tattoos on both of his temples, and a small thin beard that follows his chin towards his throat, are his most notable features about his face. His body doesn't even look slightly ripped, but nor is it overladen with fat. His skin is palely white due to lack of sunlight.

His clothes looked slightly travel worn, a red jacket with a missing pocket over a sky blue t-shirt, black jeans that are starting to tear apart at the knees, and grey tennis shoes, not a single piece of clothing has any symbols or numbers on them.

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Personality: Tayuki has a hard time relaxing around strangers, he would rather stay off to the side observing any conservations that are within hearing then joining them, when he is forced to join them he will be somewhat nice but gets straight to the point and tends to talk in 3rd person. He likes to think that he thinks with a logical mind, but there are times when his logic is really illogical. In battle his whole focus is zoned onto his opponent(s) that he ignores his surroundings. Tayuki is duty bound to any oaths that he takes, once he takes one he will do almost anything within his power to keep it til the oath is completed. If he has free time he is usually spending it reading some form of book, or plays the violin.

Biography: Tayuki has always lived within main town of The Pack, The Pack is a community that contains all of the worlds Lycans, with the exception of the occasional lone wolf. Tayuki is the younger son, out of 2, of The Pack Leader. And as such won't be expected to assume the role of Pack Leader, and pretty much had a laid-back kind of life.

Then came Tayuki's 20th birthday and his Hunt. The Hunt happens to all Lycans on their 20th birthday, it is really just the awakening of their strong primal instincts, including the instinct to find their Life Mate and take them back home. Searching all of the main town yielded no positive results, so he gathered a few supplies and set off to find his Life Mate.

After a week of traveling, he was ambushed by Vampires. Vampires have always hated Lycanthropes for Lycans had the Moon Goddess gift: Luna's Light; An mysterious artifact that the Goddess left behind for the Lycans to use if they were in dire need, it was almost immediately used in the First and last war against Vampires, which ended a thousand years ago.

Overhearing that their plan was to pretend to trade him, the Pack Leader son, for Luna's Light and then slaughter the Pack Leader and her sons so the Lycans would be in great disarray as the Vampires start another war to exterminate the Lycans, who would have no hope to win the war without Luna's Light, Tayuki made his own plans to interfere.

Tayuki's plan was largely an success if extremely lucky, having saved his mother and brother, as well as managing to keep Luna's Light away from the Vampires, He unfortunately failed to make it back to The Pack main town, before the Vampires laid siege to it, do to the fact that he acted as bait to keep the Vampires from chasing his mother and brother.

Realizing that the Vampires will hunt for him as long as he still has Luna's Light, with no way to sneak into the safety of town or break the siege on it, and having nothing but the clothes on his back and Luna's Light, which he has no idea how to use. He sets off to find a teacher that can be trusted to teach him how to fight, while keeping the existent of Lycans and Luna's Light a secret. Tayuki was also hoping that he can figure out Luna's Light powers so he can use it to end this new war before it is too late, while fighting his instinct to run off and find his Life Mate.

*whew* wow, its finially done. this will be my first character I ever made, I hope it is good enough. I keep thinking that he might need another weakness, but if so, my mind goes blank.

Shrub · #2 (**permalink**) [ ] 10-09-2009, 11:24 PM

Sorry this has taken so long to get to. Let's get started, shall we?

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Strengths: More Strength, Speed, and Faster Healing then any average human, able to observe his surroundings during critical situations. Heighten sense of smell and hearing, which also makes him a good tracker. Has two other Forms he can morph into.

I need to know how strong this is. Can you create a frame of reference, please? How fast does this character move? Does this extend to his reflexes and agility, as well? How heightened is his sense of smell? Can he detect traces of things like a dog? Can he smell the cheese in the fridge, even though the fridge is closed? Same for hearing. Can he hear a person breathing? Can he hear a cat walking across a clean floor from three rooms away through solid oak walls?

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Moon Phase Strength and Speed: The phases of the moon determines how much strength and speed Tayuki has, around the full moon he has ten times the amount that above average men who focus on those for life has, but around the new moon, he is only as strong as one of these men.

Again, I would like a point of reference for this, in the same way as I've said above.

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Moon Phase Healing: The moon phases also affects how fast Tayuki can heal, if his limb was cut off around the full moon, then it would regrow in about 30 minutes, if the same wound happened around the new moon it would take about 5 days to regrow.

Healing is the ability to close wounds and recover from sickness and poison. This looks to me like regeneration, the ability to regrow lost limbs. Could you clarify this, please? What severity of wounds can this save him from?

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Transformation: There are 3 forms that Lycans can take, the first one is their True Form, their Lycan Form, and looks like the half human half wolf that is told about it stories, this form is used daily when they are alone or dealing with others of their kind, it is also used to fight in as it doubles their strength, speed, it takes about 30 minutes to morph into. The second form is the Wolf Form, looks like the average wolf but the fur is the same color as the hair on their human form, it is primarily used for traveling rural areas and for its endurance for doing so,, their heighten senses are also doubled while in this form, it takes about 5 minutes to morph into . The third form is their Human Form, it is primarily used for traveling urban areas, and dealing with humans, as humans aren't supposed to be aware that Lycans exists, it takes about 15 minutes to morph into, any clothes worn in their human forms disappear when they morph into either of the two other forms, and reappear when they morph back into their human forms.

While this is mostly fine, I need to know about these doublings. Do these stack with the effects of the moon on the character? If they do, does this mean that during the full moon, that your character is 20 times as strong as any human?

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Weakness: Silver, any wound inflicted by this precious element must heals at a normal human rate.
Wolfsbane(aka Aconitum), while a Lycans healing is able to negate its normal poisonous effect, it affects them in a different way by slowly paralyzing them.

While silver may not be completely uncommon in the EH, I don't think these weaknesses really compensate for the character's overwhelming strengths. I'd like to see you expand on this section, and add something else here. We'll talk more on this later. Perhaps since your bio says that he still doesn't know how to use Luna's Light you should also list that as a weakness, limit his use of the blade.

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Appearance: Sandy blond hair that is combed backwards in a wavy pattern keeps the hair out of his yellowish golden eyes, eyes that seemed to look like they have been searching for something for a long time. His clothes looked slightly travel worn and frankly plain, a grey jacket over a sky blue t-shirt, with black jeans and a black colored belt, green tennis shoes, no symbols or numbers on any piece of clothing, gives you the impression that he was not know how to dress for any occasion. One last closer look reveals that he as small crescent shaped tattoos on both of his temples.

Please pick a tense and stick to it. Present tense is normal for character profiles. This is fairly minimal, and you shouldn't be telling people what they think of the way your character looks. I recommend splitting this into at least two paragraphs: one for his personal appearance, and one for his clothing. I would also like to see separate descriptions for each of his different forms.

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Personality: Tayuki has a hard time relaxing around strangers, he would rather stay off to the side observing any conservations that are within hearing then joining them, when he is forced to join them the people will immediately notice that he is somewhat nice but gets straight to the point and talks in 3rd person.

Again, please don't tell other people what they think of your character. Find an objective way to phrase this, please.

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He likes to think that he thinks with a logical mind, but there are times when his logic is really illogical. In battle his whole focus is zoned onto his opponent(s) that he ignores his surroundings. Tayuki is duty bound to any oaths that he takes, once he takes one he will do almost anything within his power to keep it til the oath is completed.

Fine.

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If he has free time he is usually spending it reading some form of book, or plays the violin.

Although this is interesting to know, but this ability to play the violin is one of the things I'd like to see in his Skills section. He needs one of those, by the way. Please edit one in. I'd like to know about his other skills, as well, since I get the idea that he does have other skills at his disposal.

ZeldaZealot · #3 (**permalink**) [ ] 10-10-2009, 03:58 PM

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