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Old 06-23-2009, 09:26 PM
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Name,Tarok

Age,11

Race,Nightling

Gender,Male

Hair,Black on bottom and red on top.

Eyes,Deep Green

Weight,82 lbs.

Height,4 ft.

Weapon: Dagger of Change. Can change into anything the owner wants. Every change is a bead from his necklace. He also has 25 Kunai knives and shurican each. Basic and gotten in one of his adventures with Azerik Zaraki.

Armor: Cloak of Protection. Protects wearer from physical and non physical attacks.

Strength: Nightime is when his full power is reaveled. The humans say that the Nightlings are creatures of the night. That is one of the few rumors they have right. When the sun sets, he is stronger, faster, and smarter than in the daytime. He would be so fast that the regular human could not see him. Also he could lift three times his body weight. He would also know more spells than in the daytime.

Weakness,Without the Cloak of Protection, he cannot travel in the sunlight. If he tried it, he would not last 5 minutes out in the sun without it. he would be burned beyond recongnition. If you cut his cloak, he would have to get inside a building or in some shade fast or (look above). Since he is 11 years old, he is not very strong. But the Cloak of Protection gives him a little extra strength.

Magic Store. He has a necklace that stores magical power. It has 25 beads. Every bead counts for one spell. It takes about fifteen minutes for one to regenerate. If used in rapid sucsession, they could restore at the same time.

Skills/Magic,He know a few charms, but again, his true power lies in the nightime. Also heals quickly. The attack charms are:

Discharge: Can send out a magic sheild for five yards around.

Immobility: The target is immediatley immobilized for a few seconds. If he wanted it longer, he would have to use another.

Transfiguration: Can change one thing into another for a period of time. The longer the period of time and how big the object is that he is changing takes another bead.

Teleportation: Can be used for him and others to move distances faster than usual. When teleporting it seem to the user that they are going into a black hole.The more people and the farther the distance the more beads it takes.

Portal Making: Used for self only. Can make portal only to places he has seen. Cannot go to places he has heard of,only seen. The longer the traveling distance, the more beads it takes.

Appearence,Usually has a cloak as black as a starless and moonless night shadowing face, but when cloak is off, to a regular human would look like the most handsome boy they have ever seen. It is a racial trait that made him a handsome boy. He has a heart shaped face, his face is completly white. When the cloak is off, he wears beutiful light weight clothes. He wears a necklace with beads of black obsidion with a green emerald pendant in the middle.
Also usually wearing a backpack that is as lightweight as his clothes. Holds all of his magic items, but thanks to Nightling magic, its as light as a feather.

Personality, Is very drawn back with strangers, but as trust grows, He will be more and more open with his feelings. Helps people when they need it. on the outside he looks as tough as a veteren, but on the inside is very much a child.

Bio,As long as he can remember, he has been on the run. He does not know from what, but it is a way of life for him now.(He's on the run from the nightling government.) He was born in a cave with his parents. His mom died when he was three. His dad was caught by the unknown enemy.

He was able to slip away,but he has always dreamt of getting his father back.
both his cloak and dagger had been given to him by his father.He thinks every day, "I might die today,might as well enjoy myself a little." Usually a 11 year old would be thinking," Ugghhh!! Another day at school." So his childhood has been hard, running from the unknown enemy has been a tough challenge for him.

He does not have a home. He does not have a specific destination. He is always looking for someone to help. A Nightling usually sleeps in the day and travels at night, but, thanks to living amongst the humans, he sleeps in their hours. And when he does sleep, he can be woken up by the soft thud of a wolf's paw.He says he does not need friends.

But inside, even though he does not know it himself, he's looking for one.

(First Charector, hope i make it.)
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Old 06-25-2009, 12:01 PM
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Sorry to double post but people that posted after me have benn aproved and I am getting a little impatient.
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Calm down. You've only waited two days. I know some people here who stayed patient for a month before double posting. Plus, you already PMed me about this. It was completely unnecessary. Now to business ...

M'kay, I want you to study some other character profiles. A little homework here before we continue. I want you to study five characters. You can look at mine which you can find in here and Drammor's characters: Tierra Nena, Kylie Wild, Aevukepe, Omentus Anima, and Tarnogh. I'd prefer if you studied a little of both our characters. Variety is the spice of life and you can learn different things by looking at each our characters. Once you have studied five of our characters come and tell me how you could improve your character. By asking you to study these I am by no means asking you to copy us or be as detailed. Each person has their own style of profiling. These are just examples to learn from because it seems you could benefit by seeing what has been done to get you started.
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Old 06-25-2009, 05:12 PM
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I need to list his weaknesses and strengths and Magic and
skills?
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Yeah, that'd be a good place to start. Work on that.
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You didn't edit his strengths or weaknesses. They need more work done on them. They're much to vague and I'm sure you can add more to each section if you really think about it. Oh and next time you can just post in here when you've finished editing. You don't need to PM me each time. It's only a problem when you double post needlessly.
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Old 06-25-2009, 06:58 PM
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Hows this?
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Old 06-28-2009, 11:42 AM
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He needs more combat related weaknesses and a limit to how much magic he can do. Does he have any mana or magical energy store that his magic spells drain when cast?
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Old 06-28-2009, 03:13 PM
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This good?
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You forgot to work out a limit on the magic.
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Thats the 15 beads.
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Oh! Heh, didn't see that. Good, but back to the weaknesses. Since he's an 11-year-old boy, he probably wouldn't be very strong, ne? And I also think you should put some kind of limit on the dagger of change.
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I added five more beads because of the dagger of change power.
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Immobility: The target is immediatley immobilized for a few seconds. If he wanted it longer, he would have to put more energy into it.
So, I'm under the impression that if he wanted to elongate the spell that he would have to use another bead. Am I right? There are a few other spells he has that are similar to this.
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Old 06-29-2009, 12:43 PM
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Yup yup yup.
Also, I love your stories!
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Okay, just edit all those spells to make that more clear, and ...

Oh, thank you very much ^^I'm glad you enjoyed them.
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Old 06-29-2009, 12:59 PM
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Is it alright if I put 30 beads on there because of the spells?
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Hmm, how about 25? I think perhaps you should go out a play a few battles with him before you give him a boost of 30 beads. Is that okay with you?
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ok. Does that mean im approved?
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Hmmm, just about. The only thing left I think is that you should add more details on his appearance for anyone you RP with. It's rather vague, doesn't tell me much about the style of clothes, skin tone, body structure, what kind of necklace he wears, what kind of backpack he carries around, the color of his clothes and cloak. You need more descriptions like these. And also what is it about his face that makes him so handsome? Does his beauty at such a young age sometimes make him look androgynous (looking as if he could be male or female)?
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