Deit

Name-Deit

Age-17

Race-Elf human hybrid

Sex-male

Deit has spiky gray hair. It kindof resembles Kakashi from Naruto.

Deit has dark maroon eyes that glow abnormally and intimidate the victim.

WEight-116lbs

Height-5'8"

Weapon-dual katanas and his mothers short sword that resembles a shank.

Armor-light black tunic with baggy pants protects against only the weakest attacks.

Strengths-Deit is incredibly fast, and wielding non-dulling swords. Deit has much stamina, and only tires after approximately 30 minutes of intense battle. He easily evades all but the quickest attacks. Deit can also intimidate his enemies using his ghostly appearance. In afit of rage, Deit becomes more powerful than before, and his endurance and willpower will go up.

Weakness- If the enemy is able to hold him off for a certain amount of time, then Deit will be defeated. He also has rather light armor that does not protect him as well as if he wore proper armor. Deit is easily controlled by his anger, which causes him to make reckless choices, which often lead to his defeat. He is rather unfriendly, which usually causes him to get mixed up in a battle where he is hugely outnumbered.

Skills-Deit is able to disable enemies quickly by striking at certain nerves. Deit is also capable of making fire or lightning flow through his katanas and cause more damage as well as boosting his speed up about 10%. This magic is very rare and it uses much mana, and Deit can only use about two bursts that last about 1 minute. He can be rather ninjaish, with natural talentss for stealth. He learned this at the orphanage, in which he had to be quiet in able to steal food from his fellows. Deit is also very agile, which he inherited from his elven background.

Appearance- Deit's face is covered with a black veil. He as strange, unearthly, and red glowing eyes, and a rather slender and thin figure. Deit is also very pale. He inherited some elven traits from his mother. He has slightly pointed ears, but does not appear as muscular as other humans of his strength. He has an angled face, which tapers to a point at his chin. His eyes are also angled and catlike. His swords are strapped on his back by a dark red sash. He has longish legs and usually has a bored looking expression. However, when Deit is in battle, his face contorts with a bloody glee and his eyes glaze up to an opaque red. Deit's clothes are mostly black with a few purple stripes going down his sleeves.

Personality- Deit is hot headed but doesn't show his anger but instead takes it out on the victim of the offense. He dislikes delays, which explains his tendency of liking quick battles. Deit has an indifferent nature and does not care for others as much as his deceased mother would have liked. Deit does not have friends currently. He likes to intimidate enemies before attacking them directly, and he also doesn't talk much.

Bio- Deit's parents, because of their vastly differing race, were not compatible, so his father abandoned him and his mother at an early age and his mother died soon after from the grief of the lose of his father, for elves believe that a child is an ultimate vow of love that must not be broken. Deit's father was human while his mother was an elf. His early life was full of abuse. For 10 years he lived in that house of misery. His fellow orphans made fun of him because he had elven origins in his blood. The orphanage's caretakers were also prejudiced against him because he was half elf. At the orphanage, the caretakers provided him the smaller portions of food, which forced him to steal from the other orphans. This helped him develop his supernatural speed and stealth. After slaughtering all the inhabitants of his orphanage and of its town of Eiselgrof using his mothers sword, he ventures into the woods to find his human father to kill him for abandoning his elven mother. In the woods, he meets a group of elves, where he learns to fight more skillfully with a sword, and here he also learns the magic of controlling lightning and fire, as well as obtaining his un breakable katanas. But, Deit(because of his impatience) never finished his training and relies on his natural talent, but he is still a formidable foe, as all elves are. He also seeks vengeance on the world for his early years of misery. Driven by his own anger, he attempts to kill all he meets but for those that may be able to help him on his bloody quest for revenge.

M'kay, I want you to study some other character profiles. A little homework here before we continue. I want you to study five characters. You can look at mine which you can find in here and Drammor's characters: Tierra Nena, Kylie Wild, Aevukepe, Omentus Anima, and Tarnogh. I'd prefer if you studied a little of both our characters. Variety is the spice of life and you can learn different things by looking at each our characters. Once you have studied five of our characters come and tell me how you could improve your character. By asking you to study these I am by no means asking you to copy us or be as detailed. Each person has their own style of profiling. These are just examples to learn from because it seems you could benefit by seeing what has been done to get you started.

I think its a lot better but you should check it to make sure.

Okay, this is better, but there's still some work to do here.

Weakness-Deit does not have much stamina, and tires after approximately 30 min of intense battle. If the enemy is able to hold him off for a long amount of time, then Deit will be defeated.

The thing about this weakness is that it doesn't really seem like a weakness. If Deit doesn't tire after 30 minutes of intense battle, I'd say his stamina is actually really good for his level and age. You even say "a long amount of time." So I think you should edit this to say he does have a lot of stamina and move it to his strengths section.

Also, I think you could have more strengths and weaknesses if you really think about it. That's also where we come to his bio. You need to consider how he got his skills in combat in the first place. You don't mention anything about that, but you need to. Since you don't say how he learned it looks as if he taught himself his own skills. But you also have things to work out that you've left unnoticed. Like killing everyone in his orphanage. Perhaps he has a natural talent for stealth and assassination, which you could add to his strengths and skills. But if he taught himself all he knows, then he's bound to have weaknesses of a somewhat novice fighter. You should also explain where he got his weapons and how he survived after he left the orphanage.

I hope this is good enough *crosses fingers*.

Good, there's only one last thing. For his magic, what kind of limit does he have on the usage of it? Any kind of magical energy or mana that it uses?

I fixed what you told me to, and I hope it will be approved.

Yup. It's good.

*Approved*

So I post my whole character onto the list?