Azerik Zaraki-Soul Reaper

Name: Azerik Zaraki

Race: Lycan/Soul Reaper

Age: True age unknown but appears to be 17.

Gender: Male

Weight: 175lbs

Height: Roughly 6 feet

Appearance: I am about 6 ft tall with a compact muscular frame with shoulders that go out about 3 or 4 inches out, I have middle length light brown hair that hangs over my eyes sometime but is usually swept across my forehead, and oval shaped glasses in front of my grey piercing eyes. I am usually not clean shaven and have a bit of stubble no matter how many time a day I shave. I wear the classic Soul Reaper robes and have the Soul Society Lieutenant badge on my right arm and another badge on my left arm that says "Bite me." (Don't read it aloud it might have unforeseen consequences)

(Temporary Face Picture using FaceMaker. Custom Drawing Coming soon)


(Face picture with eyes of learning power on)


(Lycan eyes)


(Lycan eyesm + Fangs)


Being a Soul Reaper (meaning I have died and have no body) I occupy a temporary body called a Gigai. Because a living body is more limited than my soul form (only visible to people with high reiatsu/magic abilities) There are many things I can't do while in a Gigai. The Gigai I use is custom made to allow use of my Soul Reaper powers.(see strengths and weaknesses for details)


Personality: I am over all a nice person, but often come off, as stand offish and smug. Because of many decades of being relatively alone, I work well on my own, but retain my innate ability to work in a group. Also being the son of the Alpha Male of my old pack, has given me prior experience to being a leader, but I am reluctant to accept this role despite my confidence, and instead advocate a (possibly less capable) leader other than myself, and support them.

Having died previously, and lost all my original family, I will do almost anything to win a fight, in order to stay alive, boasting to others, that no life goes before my own. Although this may often make me seem uncaring, seeing innocent people get hurt (or even killed) is actually something that bothers me immensely. If provoked I will put my own life before another's but I make excuses for this behavior, in order to keep up appearances, since I have said that I will do anything to keep myself alive. Despite all this I have never run away from a fight, even to protect my own or another's life, having promised myself that I wouldn't let myself be killed by anybody. My logic in this area is flawed, but I keep up this pretense regardless.

I'm also a strong advocate of the concept of free will, and have developed bonds of hatred with several deities who work around this concept, controlling people for their own gains.

Finally I never feel more alive then when I'm fighting. The tougher the opponent, the more into the fight I get, and the more manic and powerful my attacks become.

Strengths/Weaknesses: I am an exceptional swordsmen but my all-out tactic leaves many holes in my defense. Although I can more often than not block or dodge simple attacks, I have a hard time avoiding long or mid range magic attacks.

My unarmed combat skills are minimal when I'm in human form so if I am disarmed during a fight I will be vulnerable until I regain my fallen weapon. This changes when I'm in Lycan form since close combat is really the only option. When fighting as a Lycan I often fight with my brain but I have several blind spots behind me and to either side of me. My vision is considerably narrower in Lycan form as I am usually focusing on just one opponent which means I could be overpowered by a large group of enemies (Over 10 I would think).

Being in a temporary body (Gigai) its only natural that I can't do as much as in my soul form. If I use too many of my more high powered attacks, it can have negative affects on my body, causing internal and external injury. The plus side to having a temporary body, is I can ditch it in order to save my life. I will not be able to attack living things when I've left my Gigai, but a replacement is always kept handy in my lab. (See items: Lab Set in the Ninja Summoning Scroll)

Finally I can fight with most types of battle machines such as guns and canons. This however makes it easier to attack me from close up.

I have trouble fighting people with powers simlar to my own, as well as powers that have to do with the elements of Water, and Fire.

Skills/Magic:

My Zanpaktou Shikai-Sumasshuyochi= Earth Smasher


My Zanpaktou Bankai-Sumasshuyochi Gaidoku= Earth Shattering Poison



When Kireza and I either work together, or he is at half power controlling my body my face is covered by this Hollow Mask:



When he has complete control he distorts my body and it becomes a white humanoid wolf wearing a white overcoat. The Traditional Hollow Hole on the body has been exchange for one on his tail.



My Zanpaktou has the ability to manipulate any form of energy, excluding energy that is being used by a person or is being used to power an attack. Because of this ability a lot of my abilities will be the same as or variations of the powers of several other people. I primarily use it to manipulate my own reiatsu but I can use it to manipulate the elements under the most extreme of circumstances.

I am similar to Kenpachi Zaraki, in that when I first came to Soul Society I already had my Zanpaktou. Because of this I never went to the Academy and never learned proper Kidou spells. In spite of this I can use my reiatsu in inventive ways ranging from using it to shield myself from magic, to using it to crush my opponents bodies. Aside from that my Zanpaktou has many attacks that use Kidou based energy.

Attack #1: Fuzei Suraisu= Air Slice-: I focus my reiatsu into the blade of my sword and swing the sword with a large amount of force causing the air in front of my sword to condense. I then fire the condensed air controlling it using my reiatsu at my taregt.- used in Unreleased form, more powerful in Shikai and Bankai. Limitless use but becomes harder to control each time.

Attack #2: Kuro Anaboko Jigen= Black Hole: I create dimensional inconsistencies that can be used to move my attacks from place to place with out losing speed or power- Can be used in Shikai, and becomes more powerful in Bankai. I can create up to 5 black hole while in Shikai stae and up to 10 un Bankai State. However I can only use this power 4 times in a fight regardless of how many black holes I choose to make.

Attack #3: Kawari= Transform: Transforms my Sword into anything I can think of. Use limited by amount of remaining reiatsu. The larger the object I change it into, the more reiastu it takes from my body. (Ex. If I changed it into a clone of myself it would take around half of my reiatsu but if I made it into something twice my size and twice as heavy it would take all of it.)

Attack #4: Kae-Jigen Shunpo= Trans-Dimensional Flashstep: I run so fast I warp between dimension and can leave the in-between at anytime in any place and attack- Bankai only. Limitless use but becomes easier to detect by my enemies as I go.

Attack #5: Kurai Ken Shifuto= Dark Matter Shift: I will the unusable Dark Matter (a substance found in most atmospheres that is largely untouchable and unusable but contains massive amounts of energy) in the air to become usable normal matter
(you know, matter? The stuff that makes everything up), which I force into shape using my reiatsu. The larger the object I make, the more reiastu it takes. (Ex: If I made something as large as say a space ship, the resulting loss of energy would be enough to kill me; but if I made several pieces needed to make a space ship I would use slightly less energy, and complete the space ship by hand.) The more I use it during a fight the closer I get to losing control over my body and the closer Kireza gets to having control. - Bankai + Half awakened Hollow form. 3 uses per fight is my limit.

Attack #6: Getsuga Tensho= Moon Fang Striking the Sky: Ichigo's Kido based attack that fires a blast of his Spirititual Pressure. Where Ichigo's is Blue in Shikai and red and black in Bankai mine is purple in Shikai and purple and black in Bankai-Shikai and Bankai. Limitless use but becomes harder on my body each time.

Attack #7: Getsuga Kangoku Tensho= Moon Fang Striking the Prison in the Sky: I fire multiple Getsuga Tensho attacks which collide and surrounds my enemy in a sphere of my Spiritual Pressure. I slash in multiple places on the sphere then walk away about 5 meters. the Sphere will then dissipate and 10 seconds later all the damage I wrought during the time the sphere was there happens instantaneously-Bankai only. Single use only. Final Attack used as a last resort. Completely drains me of reiatsu. I can still fight for about 2 more posts, before my body stops producing reiatsu, making me incapable of further violence.

Attack #8: Getsunari Tosshin= Howling Moon Rush: I gain the instincts and senses of a werewolf in a human state (increased agility and strength as well). Also when in Bankai, it allows me to see the Dark Matter in the air to make Dark Matter Shift easier to use. While in this form I have a personal aversion to sunlight because of my sharpened vision. My vision becomes narrowed the same as it is in one of my lycan forms. My eyes also change in this form, and my nails become claws, and if I push myself my teeth become fangs.-Used once in a fight but remains in use for the time remaining. I will often slip into this state when fighting seriously, but I don't really notice until after the fight is over.



Attack #9: Kajou Getsuga Tensho= Spiral Moon Fang Striking from the Sky: I create a drill made of spiritual energy and attack from the sky. This attack is really the same as Getsuga Tensho, the only difference is how I apply it. I can either jump into the air to start it, start it after being knocked up into the air, or use my Kae-Jigen Shunpo to warp there.-Shikai possible but best for Bankai. Limits the same as Getsuga Tensho and Kae-Jigen Shunpo.

Attack #10: Shuugasuki= Eyes of Learning: My eyes take on a green hue and the pupils take the shape of a four point star. They allow me to memorize things I have seen right down to the last detail, as well as allow access to common knowledge about people I'm looking at such as their most simple attacks, and their least potent weaknesses. When gaining the knowledge of people I do not see it straight forward in words but in images and thoughts that I have to decipher. One use per fight but stays on until I win or lose. Outside of fighting can be used for memorizing the appearances of people, or memorizing the pages of a book I want to read later.



Kireza shares all of my strengths and weaknesses as well as the abilities of my Zanpaktou. He also possess a rapid Hollow regeneration that heals most superficial wounds instantly but it can only be used up to 4 times in a fight otherwise he risks death. Also when he uses my Zanpaktou the appearance of it changes-it looks as if it is made of liquid darkness-becoming a weapon as corrupt as he is.

Kireza's Shikai


Kireza's Bankai



Having traveled to multiple universes I have had the pleasure of learning several fighting style. One of my favourtie ones was the Naruto Universe techniques. I Cannot use any Jutsu except a purple Rasengan and a Summoning Jutsu that summon two form of Zuraki, a wolf based chimera I made with alchemy. (I'm your regular inter-dimensional traveler.) Zuraki 1. Zuraki 2. The zuraki are mindless creatures that are limited to physical attacks but are very durable when it comes to being attacked my magic. The Rasengan I use is purple because for some unknown reason my chakra (and reiatsu) are purple. I can use it up to 5 times in a fight and only at close range.

I have multiple lycan forms. One, Two, and Final is a a slightly larger normal wolf. Aside from the normal transformations I also have Hidden Form(no picture yet) and Rage Form. Neither form is more powerful but gives different advantages.

Form #1 Allows continued use of humanoid hands and bipedal movement. In this form I focus on slashing with claws or use of my normal weapons. I can use my Zanpaktou to it's full capacity in this form as well.

Form #2 allows limited bipedal movement but has no hands. I can easily slash my opponents with my claws as well as bite them with enough force break bones. Although I cannot wield my Zanpaktou in this form the Kae-Jigen Shunpo ability is still part of my attack list.

Final form is only quadrupedal movement and focuses on biting as opposed to slashing with claws. I can if necessary use my claws to dig into my opponents skin causing minor amounts of damage, but large amounts of pain to distract them. Kae-Jigen Shunpo is also usable in this form.

When in Rage form I simply become the classic werewolf: I.E a mindless killing machine. I'll attack in many ways contorting my body if I have to, using both my front and rear claws as well as my teeth. I cannot use any of my Zanpaktou's abilities in this form, however I gain a new powered called "Dimension Tearing Claw". When I get into an especially enraged state of mind while in this form, my reiatsu is forced into the tips of my claws, allowing them to transcend normal dimensional boundaries, and cut my enemies more easily, and more fatally.

Hidden form is...well hidden. It's more of an aspiration. I will often push my sefl to the limits in the hope of one day achieving this form.

When in any of my lycan forms I have an aversion to sunlight because of my sharpened vision, but the aversion is not life threatening, and is only a personal aversion.

Items:

Aside from my Zanpaktou I constantly carry a backpack that warps space to allow me to carry a large bazooka with a painted Shoop Da Whoop face at the mouth, which fires a large blue laser, a hand held device (roughly the size of a Blackberry) that has maps of multiple dimensions, and a set of Claw Sharpening tools. The map is useless in a fight. The bazooka has one shot then must recharge for two hours. I use the claw sharpening tools for an obvious reason.

I also carry two pouches filled with Kunai and Shuriken from when I spent a few months in the Naruto Universe. I carry 25 Kunai and 25 Shuriken in separate pouches. Along with these projectiles, I keep a set of 2 Ninja Summoning Scrolls.

The first scroll, is a self designed seal, mixing alchemy with chakra control (I can also add my reiatsu to the mix), which allows me to temporarily seal curses, and set up a barrier to keep out unwanted guests. The seal can be adapted to suit the needs of most any kind of curse (whether it be on a person, place, or thing) but the highest time limit is no more than 48 hours, but it the exact energy I input decides whether or not the time limit is lower or higher. The curse sealing can be put into effect by wiping my blood on the seal, then proceeding with this combination of motions: If reiatsu is added then I will focus my reiatsu into my hands first, followed by clapping my hands together in order to start the flow of alchemic energy throughout my body, and finally forming the Ram Handsign in order to focus my Chakra. After I have built up the necessary energy, I place my hands on the cursed object/person/place, and allow the energy stored up to seep into them, and temporarily neutralize the negative energy used to fuel the curse. The barrier that can be put up, can be extended about 2 square miles if necessary, but I usually keep it to around 1/2 a square mile. The barrier is not a physical, but a spiritual barrier, therefore has no visibility, and cannot be touched, by solid matter. Only objects of a magical nature come into physical contact with the barrier, so any other object or being who walks into the barrier will mysteriously find themselves walking in the opposite direction. If a being is within the barrier's range after it has been cast, then they cannot leave with out the caster's consent, and if they try an effect like that of the one used on those trying to enter the barrier occurs.. (Limited to use in the Crossroads)

The second scroll, contains a summoning seal, which sets up a lab area in which I can work. The amount of space the lab takes up varies with my intentions, which are based on the space provided. The materials in the lab are varied, and to catalog them all would take up several pages. (Limited to use in the Crossroads)


And finally I have an iPod that plays what ever song I think about. It can even play songs I've heard others play in a world where technology like MP3 players don't exist.


Character Story

I am a Soul Reaper with an Inner-Hollow. In life I was a Lycan (werewolf). The Lycan thing will be similar to that of the lycans in the Underworld movies. There are multiple generations of Lycans. First Generation are created when bitten by another first Generation Lycan. First Generation transform to wolf forms once and can never revert. Second Generation are born Lycan and their ability to change forms grows as they get older. They are not as wolfish in appearance as first Generation. As generations go farther wolf appearances grow less and change ability grows more. I come from a side generation that inbred with Humans and tried to refrain from changing which resulted in the culmination of the werewolf myth. Normal Lycan generations were killed in a mass genocide.

My family and my human girlfriends named Mia, were killed by a group of mercenaries, who I tried to kill in vengeance. All of my family members were turned into Hollows which proceeded to eat the soul of Mia. For some reason I survived the rampage of my corrupted family members and was sent to Soul Society by a passing Soul Reaper, and discovered when I got there that I had a green handled katana belted to my waist. This was my Zanpaktou.

In the Soul Society I was adopted into the family of 11th Squad Captain Kenpachi Zaraki. I trained as a Soul Reaper on my own time until I reached the rank of Lieutenant in the 12th Squad, and then until I reached the Zanpaktou releases of both Shikai and Bankai.

Kenpachi although my adopted father is more like my brother and treats me often the same as he treats Ichigo Kurosaki...meaning I'm a chew toy. Albeit a chew toy he often reveals affection for. His Lieutenant Yachiru is one of my best friends in Soul Society along with (in my Fan Fiction only) the reinstated Captain of Squad 12 Kisuke Urahara, and Rukia Kuchki. I spend time regularly in multiple dimensions (usually Anime I've watched or Games I've played ) and have built up an impressive collection of souvenirs from each one.


Late in my career as a Soul Reaper, I developed an inner Hollow named Kireza. He was the result of the Lycan half of myself separating from myself when I died. This is also what prevented me from becoming a full Hollow like the rest of my family.


Kireza's personality is very childlike, albeit a child with an extremely violent nature. He loves to fight even more than I do and more often than not disregards his own safety if it makes a fight more "fun".


My Zanpaktou can also talk to impart wisdom. Dialogue from Sumasshuyochi will be in purple text.



For detailed story go to The Anime Crossover Adventure: Azerik's Version.




Personal Theme Song: Animal I have Become-Three Days Grace


Battle Theme Song: Werewolf: The Last Warrior Theme (Metal Version)-Daniel Tidwell





(prepared to edit upon request)

BUMP!!!!


Okay. I've been waiting almost a month now. I've seen newer characters than mine approved in that time and am starting to get a tad impatient....


SO BORED!!!!

Wow, you have been waiting a while. I think it's just because you have so much in this profile that it's intimidating to most of the approvers. But here I am, so let's get to work.

Attack #1: Fuzei Suraisu= Air Slice-: Self-Explanatory- used in Unreleased form more powerful in Shikai and Bankai. Limitless use but becomes harder to control each time.

You say self-explanatory but I don't get exactly what you mean by "air slice". There can be a lot of different mechanics behind air slicing attacks. Explain yours in a little more detail at least so that I can get the picture.

Also you should probably write the underlined part like this: "used in Unreleased form, more powerful in Shikai and Bankai." See the comma? It helps make this more understandable. It took me a few times reading it to understand what you were saying exactly. You should do this in the other attacks too.

Attack #2: Kuro Anaboko Jigen= Black Hole: I create dimensional inconsistencies that can be used to move my attacks from place to place with out losing speed or power- used in Shikai more powerful in Bankai. Up to 5 Black Holes in Shikai and 10 in Bankai. Usage is 4 time per fight.

I don't understand what you mean by "usage is 4 times per fight" (need to add an "s" to "time" in that, by the way) when you state that he can do 5 in Shikai and 10 in Bankai, which is more than 4 (duh). Explain this to me.

Attack #3: Kawari= Transform: Transforms my Sword into anything I want including other Zanpaktou- Bankai only. Limitless use.

This might be too much, because you can easily godmode with it. And what do you mean why "anything"? Any kind of weapon? This, like I said, is a bit too powerful. Perhaps you could be more detailed about it and perhaps tone it down?

Attack #5: Kurai Ken Shifuto= Dark Matter Shift: I will the unusable Dark matter in the air to become usable matter which will do my will but usually happens in a round about way unless I'm specific with it- Bankai + Half awakened Hollow form. 3 uses per fight is my limit.

What exactly do you mean by Dark Matter? I'm a Bleach fan as well, but I'm not familiar with the term of "dark matter". Explain what exactly it is and its uses and limits.

Attack #7: Getsuga Kangoku Tensho= Moon Fang Striking the Prison in the Sky: I fire multiple Getsuga Tensho attacks which collide and surrounds my enemy in a sphere of my Spiritual Pressure. I slash in multiple places on the sphere then walk away about 5 meters. the Sphere will then dissipate and 10 seconds later all the dame I wrought during the time the sphere was there happens instantaneously-Bankai only. Causes me to be weakened afterward.

Attack #8: Getsunari Tosshin= Howling Moon Rush: I gain the instincts and senses of a werewolf in a human state. It also allows me to see the Dark Matter in the air to make Dark Matter Shift easier to use. (Half hollow Awakening)-Bankai only

Attack #9: Kajou Getsuga Tensho= Spiral Moon Fang Striking from the Sky: I create a drill made of spiritual energy and attack from the sky.-Shikai possible but best for Bankai

Are there any limits to how many times these attacks can be used? I would truthfully like there to be. There's got to be a limit to how much he can do with his reiatsu, ne?

Also, about attack #8, if he is given the instincts and senses of a werewolf in human state, then does he have the same tunnel vision (narrow) weakness as he does in his werewolf form? Basically, you should state whether or not he has the same weaknesses.

My Zanpaktou has the ability to control any form of energy excluding energy that is being used by a person or is being used to power an attack.

Explain this in more detail, give me a few examples of what you mean by this?

And all the Kireza abilities in the character story should actually be put up in the skills/magic/items/weapons section you made.

Considering that he has so many attacks, it would be correct to assume he can't use all of them and all of their number limits in one given fight. He wouldn't have enough reiatsu to do that, right? Even if you hadn't thought about this, I think you should list it as one of his weaknesses. This guy is rather powerful already. You need to put limits on him or you'll be in danger of godmoding. So you should say he needs to be very conscious of which attacks and the number of times he uses them or he could end up exhausting all his reiatsu without effectively damaging the enemy, which depending on the situation this could happen if he is not aware.

I also carry a pouched filled with Kunai and Shuriken from when I spent a few months in the Naruto Universe. Cannot use any Jutsu except a purple Rasengan and a Summoning Jutsu that summon two form of Zuraki, a wolf based chimera I made with alchemy.

You should have a set number for how many Kunai and Shuriken he carries on a regular basis. Can't have an unlimited supply.

And I think you should add the Rasengan and Summoning justsu to the listed attacks and describe his limits for each of them. Give me limits and details to prove you can't godmode with these.

Aside from my Zanpaktou I constantly carry a backpack that warps space to allow me to carry a large bazooka with a painted Shoop Da Whoop face at the mouth, which fires a large blue laser, a handheld device (roughly the size of a Blackberry) that has maps of multiple dimensions, and a set of Claw Sharpening tools.

Again, give me his limits on the weapon here. It has to have a limit to its use.

I have multiple lycan forms. One, Two, and Final is a a slightly larger normal wolf. Aside from the normal transformations I also have Hidden Form(no picture yet) and Rage Form. Neither form is more powerful but gives different advantages. Form #1 Allows continued use of humanoid hands and bipedal movement. Form #2 allows limited bipedal movement but has no hands. Final form is only quadrapedal movement and focuses on biting as opposed to slashing with claws.

So besides the three normal transformations, what are the abilities of Hidden Form and Rage Form that make them different from the basic three?

Since #1 form allows the use of humanoid hands, would you say this form is more focused on upper body power such as hitting, slashing with claws, and throwing than #2 and #3? And then #2 would be more of an middle ground between #1 and #3, limited bipedal movement that allows him to slash with claws but also needs to rely on biting? I'm asking this because I feel that if this is true you should add these details in here.

1) Thank you for getting to this thread finally

2) I'll get to work on everything you mentioned. BTW the Air Slice thing was copy and paste from my Fan Fiction Profile in which I didn't include as much detail.

Also the Dark Matter isn't from Bleach its anactual scientific concept.

The editing has been completed so far. If I've still missed something please tell me.

Okay, good, but you forgot to describe what Dark Matter is to me, and changing it into "normal matter" is rather vague too. What kind of matter are we talking about here?

You also forgot to fix up the things I mentioned about all his Lycan forms. Read it again and do that.

Attack #2: Kuro Anaboko Jigen= Black Hole: I create dimensional inconsistencies that can be used to move my attacks from place to place with out losing speed or power- used in Shikai more powerful in Bankai. I can create up to 5 black hole while in Shikai stae and up to 10 un Bankai State. However I can only use this power 4 times in a fight regardless of how many black holes I choose to make.

Again, put a comma after "Shikai" and before "more." And fix the other words in bold.

One is that if someones I can see is doing the Carameldansen dance my soul burn with terrible agony and I am incapacitated.

What is the Carameldansen dance?

While in this form I have an aversion to sunlight and my vision is narrowed the same as it is in one of my lycan forms.

So he has an aversion to sunlight, is that because it harms him in some way?

I scrapped the Carameldansen part it was just a bad joke, and I fixed everything else...I think so anyway.

XD oh, it was a joke. Sorry, sometimes I'm incredibly oblivious.

Attack #5: Kurai Ken Shifuto= Dark Matter Shift: I will the unusable Dark Matter (a substance found in most atmospheres that is laregely untouchable and unusable but contains massive amounts of energy) in the air to become usable normal matter
(you know, matter? The stuff that makes everything up), which I force into shape using my reiatsu. The more I use it during a fight the closer I get to losing control over my body. - Bankai + Half awakened Hollow form. 3 uses per fight is my limit.

I don't think you understood what I was asking for. So after he turns the dark matter into normal matter ... what kind of matter are we talking about here? A rock? Water? A tree sprout?

And you keep forgetting this part about the transformations:

So besides the three normal transformations, what are the abilities of Hidden Form and Rage Form that make them different from the basic three?

Originally Posted by Shrub

XD oh, it was a joke. Sorry, sometimes I'm incredibly oblivious. I don't think you understood what I was asking for. So after he turns the dark matter into normal matter ... what kind of matter are we talking about here? A rock? Water? A tree sprout?

And you keep forgetting this part about the transformations:

I'm talking matter in general. If I wanted the matter to form oxygen it would. If I wanted it to form iron it would. If I wanted it to form copper it would. If I wanted some hydrogen it would become hydrogen. It's like alchemy but taking the incomplete and making it complete.

I kind of blanked on the Rage and Hidden forms...and I don't know what the hidden form does cuz its hidden...I don't have it yet...as far as I know its a myth.

That's rather powerful, but you do have limits on its use so that's good. But I also think that he should be limited by how much mass he is allowed to pull into reality at the same time. So he could "summon" a bunch of smaller massed matter or one large massed matter.

And I was thinking about the three basic werewolf transformation that he would be limited from doing a good portion of his other abilities. Form #1 is more humanoid so I was thinking he could still be able to do a good portion of the other attacks and abilities, but obviously when it comes down to #2 and 3 that he's far more limited in attacks and abilities. And since Rage Form is a mindless beast he hardly has the mental capacity to do any of those attacks. So I want you to go through all his attacks and abilities and decide, depending on the form, which ones he will and will not be capable of.

Oh and I noticed this:

Kireza shares all of my strengths and weaknesses as well as the abilities of my Zanpaktou. He also possess a rapid Hollow regeneration that heals most superficial wounds instantly but it can only be used up to 4 times in a fight otherwise he risks death. Also when he uses my Zanpaktou the appearance of it changes-it looks as if it is made of liquid darkness-becoming a weapon as corrupt as he is.


Kireza's personality is very childlike, albeit a child with an extremely violent nature. He loves to fight even more than I do and more often than not disregards his own safety if it makes a fight more "fun".

I think this belongs in the skills/magic/items section right beneath Kireza's zanpatkou.

Sorry about all this, but your character has a lot of attacks and abilities. He's very high powered. So I have to make sure he has enough limits to prevent godmoding. I'd also like you to keep in mind that once I have approved him, I'll be keeping an eye on you to make sure you don't godmode. If I see you at it, I'll disapprove this character faster than blinking. I don't mean to be rude by saying this, but I just want to give you fair warning. You never know someimes ...

I completely understand don't worry I'm a council member in the Sages of Despair and one of my closest friends is in constant godmode there, so I have to deal with him all the time.

Oh, I see. Good to know, puts me at more ease when I approve this guy. Now the only thing left is that I think you should put this limit on his Dark Matter ability:

That's rather powerful, but you do have limits on its use so that's good. But I also think that he should be limited by how much mass he is allowed to pull into reality at the same time. So he could "summon" a bunch of smaller massed matter or one large massed matter.

And the last comment I have is a suggestion as a writer so it's entirely up to you.

Dialogue from this character will be is red text.


My Zanpaktou can also talk to impart wisdom. Dialogue from Sumasshuyochi will be in purple text.

I advise against using colored text to depict these "voices". In my experience it's more distracting for the reader than helpful. I think there's plenty of other more creative ways to express them without being distracting. For example, since I'm assuming Summasshuyochi can only speak to Azerik, it would be in the form of thought than spoken out loud speech. What I would do is have the normal quotation marks and also italicize them and the words they encompass.

As for Kireza, he's like another personality so I think it would be better expressed to show his speech in the same way as Azerik's. Only when he comes into play, just maybe describe his mannerisms and way of speaking differently than Azerik. Trust me, it leaves a better impression on the readers.

Oh, and I strangely only just noticed, but I like that Kireza is Azerik spelled backwards. Nice touch.

Okay! The final adjustment has been made...hopefully


Thanks for the advice, but i think I'll keep with colored text. The reason for that is it's already become a habit, from my time in the Sages of Despair. I'll think about changing it though....screw it i'm changin it takes less work then constantly changing the text color....sumasshuyoci's text will stay purple though.

Alrighty. That's it. Happy battling ^^

*Approved*

Thank ye kindly Also just checking but now I should copy my character post to the character list thread right?

Hai, that is whatcha do.

M'kay, so for your new gigai addition, I was under the impression from the original Bleach series that Soul Reapers were still able to affect the physical word and living beings. For Hollows could certainly kill and eat the souls of living people as well as the dead. I understand that you may have changed this to set more limits on him. However, I think there can be others to replace that. Normal people who have no experience in magic/magical energies, chakra, chi, ki, etc. or who do not have enough of this built up will be unable to perhaps see, sense, or touch the spirit-like Soul Reaper. But of course, though who do can certainly perceive and perhaps affect the spirits in the same way--thus being able to harm them if "powerful" enough or know just the right magic. What do you think?

In soul form Soul Reapers can affect the living, but I'm fairy sure they can't kill them. And in the case of the living affecting Soul Reapers, few can, and only if their own spiritual energy is above average. Basically 80% of the people in the BA can use magic so they would be classified as people with above average spiritual energy. The real reason I'm using a Gigai is so that my more high powered attacks cause me physical damage, since a living body can't take the strain. Another reason for the Gigai is so NPC's can see me I already included the thing about people with magic being able to see my soul form, soI think we should move on to the revamped items section. Anything against my ninja scrolls?

Sorry it took me so long. Been busy and rather distracted.

The first scroll, is a self designed seal, mixing alchemy with chakra control (I can also add my reiatsu to the mix), which allows me to temporarily seal curses, and set up a barrier to keep out unwanted guests.

Now that I think about it these things need to be explained in more detail. Exactly what kind of curses can it seal and how does that work? I need more of the mechanical details of the processes and what kind of limitations it has. What can it not do when it comes to sealing curses? The same goes for the barrier. What shape is the barrier? How widely can it expand? How much space can it keep others from reaching? Does it just keep others out? Or can objects go through? What can it keep out exactly? For how long? How much strain can it take? I need these kinds of limitations and details considered and I'd like an explanation of what it would look like.

Okay the edites were made and I even took the liberty of mentioning my scrolls are limited to use in the Crossroads subforum.