John Andrews

Well this is my first character

Name: Sergeant Jonathan ‘Johnny’ Andrews

Age: 23

Race: Human

Sex: Male

Hair: Brunette, Short, back and sides

Eyes: Blue

Weight: 14 st

Height: 6ft

Weapon: Sten Mark 2 submachine gun, Cheap and fast submachine gun used by British commandos during World War 2.
Lee Enfield Rifle No. 4 Mk I, A reliable British bolt action rifle used by many British troops in World War 2.
Combat Knife, Standard combat knife a commando’s best friend.

Armor: None

Strengths: Johnny is a trained killer, can kill a person with his bare hands. He is born marksman with any weapon, he has set numerous records in his platoon for marksmanship. He is strong and can lift bit more than his bodyweight and he can run quite fast. He is very social and this helps him make Ally's to help him in combat.

Weakness: Johnny is a proud man, any remarks about him make him angry and he gets sloppy when he is angry thus affecting combat. He is used to normal humans anything new and he doesn’t know how to combat them. He is a human so spells can get him down and also powerful, physical attacks hurt him a lot or knock him out. He is quite sad as he thinks he will never see his wife again.

Skills/Magic: Standard Commando training, which enables him to be silent in battle and blend in his surroundings. He can run quite fast when the comes and can jump high. He is born leader and can lead his Ally's into battle and save their lives.

Appearance: John (as he is also called) is tall and well built over years of training and battle; his clothes khaki colored shirt and khaki combats. His boots are dark brown and well worn. His Sten is carried by a strap around his shoulders so it is hanging down near his waist, the rifle like all other grunts carry it over their shoulders. His face is tough looking and he has a small scar on his left cheek.

Personality: John is quiet in battle by himself or quite loud with other allies, although he does like to tease his opponents. He is, what his superior officers call him, a loose cannon, he is fun loving out of battle and likes to make friend out of his beaten opponents and keep friendly rivalries with them. He is also very down to earth in his thinking. He is religious (Christan) and prays before he goes into battle. he likes to keep in contact with his friends.

Biography: John was born in east Kent near Maidstone and spent most of his childhood playing cricket and football in the local park with his friends. His father fought in the Great War and was one of the lucky ones who survived, so John grew up listening to stories of his dad’s time in France although he did’t explain the horror of it. These stories convinced Johnny to join the army.

John left school when he was 14 and got a job with his father in the steel factories this is where he got strong and got his down to earth look on things. When he was 18 he joined the infantry and accomplished his childhood dream and after 6 weeks training he was a proper soldier.

This was where he met Joy the love of his life; she was the daughter of John’s elderly major so it was wrong for them to fall in love. Despite that they did and John found himself spending his spare weekends with Joy either in the pictures or having picnics. They planned to get married but the war broke out and John was shipped out to France.

John leant this where he was different to his father, his dad hated combat while John loved the thrill of it and the adrenaline. He soon got renowned for his marksmanship and bravery. In the middle of the North Africa campaign he was transferred to the commandos and begun the extreme training.

John was in England again so he met up with Joy and now he was 20 and she 19 they got married secretly. John spent all of his spare time with Joy for two years until his unit was sent to France to help with the invasion. After many successful missions, the mission of his life came up in 1945.

His unit were briefed and were set to capture a German castle were the Nazis were building a weapon. On the night April 1st John’s unit parachuted into Germany and stormed the castle. The mission was a blood bath, high causalities on both sides but John was determined to accomplish the mission. And he fought to where the weapon killed the colonel working it and planed to escape. The machine started working and John was sucked in, after about an hour or so John work up. In front of him was a strange huge building with many people inside and so John went to look.

Please get back to me soon

Alright, this was definitely something new. Petty good work, overall. Just a few issues.

Strengths and weaknesses do not have to exclusively be about battle, you can include more general qualities in them if you want. Same goes for the personality. Feel free to add to them.

You include standard commando training in the skills section. Could you describe in more detail what that includes? The profile should be able to describe the basics of that for someone who doesn't know exactly what standard commando training includes.

In the appearance, you say that his clothes are standard army and khaki coloured, but you don't describe what the clothes actually are. Is it like... baggy army pants and a shirt, for example?

Reading the bio, I get the impression that you're going to use that weapon as a gateway to reach the dome, yeah? If that's the case, then it's all good. Quite a few people have linked the bios of their characters to entering the Dome.

I have edited it but tell me anything else that needs done and I will do it.

Nah, I think that ought to do it.

*approves*

Welcome to the EH. You could always enrol in the Dome to hone your writing skills, but I guess you already knew that. Enjoy your stay.

thanks so much i will go to the dome and train to be a great writer!!!