Kirieo

Name: Kirieo (last name currently unknown)

Age: 19

Race: Wild elf

Sex: Female

Hair: Chestnut colored, falls to waist, ragged and unevenly cut. She tends to keep it hap-hazardly tied back.

Eyes: Faded forest green

Weight: 128lbs

Height: 5’7’’

Weapon: Self-sharpened, cut, and curved fingernails, prefers to call them ‘talons’. They are hardened and darkened from use. She also bites.

Armor: No armor, prefers to wear sewn together furs from notable beasts she’s slain.

Strengths: Has a mental disorder that allows her to take on the behavior of a beast. Called “going feral”, this ability gives her enhanced reaction timing, reflexes, sense of smell, tactability (touch), and hearing. This activates whenever she experiences a strong emotion or is in danger, and she reacts to the situation like an animal would. She gains an abnormal amount of energy when her ‘fight or flight’ reflex is triggered.

Weakness: However, when ‘feral’, she is blind and has poor reasoning, which can be costly. Is also sought out by hunters who wish to 'break' her bestial spirit. If the land she touches is dead (could be caused by fire or drought, anything that kills off living things) her ferality is triggered by intense, sudden fear, causing her to have less rationality than she usually does when feral, and will attack anything on sight; including allies, usually with poor skill and focus.

Skills/Magic: Hates magic, but is skilled in hunting, skinning, and tracking down prey. Can feel movements in the earth through her feet, and is able to turn and move her ears in any direction to pick up sounds. Her crafted fingernails aid her in skinning beasts for clothing or food.

Appearance: Generally a crazed or tired expression on her face, (eyes height, and hair already described) wears stuffed, sewn together animal skins. Around her calves and forearms, the stuffing is thick, for defense and wrapped with red-dyed leather, fastened with rawhide strings. The furs are light tan and shaved to the skins, the fur itself is what she uses to stuff them for warmth and protection. A headband decorated with red and blue owl feathers rests on her forehead.

Personality: Still wild from her childhood, Kirieo is attempting to civilize herself by observing inhabitants of cities. Very beast-like, even when not feral, she is incredibly loyal to those who she calls ‘friend’ and will defend them with her life. She doesn’t immediately trust anyone she meets, and generally has a sixth sense telling her whether or not it’s worth finding out. In civilized areas with building, she feels alien, especially if her feet can’t touch the earth. If the land is dead (could be caused by fire or drought, anything that kills off living things) her ferality is triggered by intense, sudden fear, causing her to have less rationality than she usually does when feral, and will attack anything on sight.

Biography: Kirieo was born and abandoned in Death Mountain. Raised by the Gorons until she was of ten years of age, she ran away to the wilds of the Lost Woods. There, she found a welcoming place amongst the inhabiting beasts. She raised herself with survival skills, and didn’t learn how to behave in civilized society. She stumbled upon Hyrule Castle Town when she was fourteen, observing the townsfolk and imitating civil behaviors she had seen. She was soon adopted by a quaint Hylian couple and their daughter.
A year later, however, her adoptive father went missing. Seeing her mother go into her depressed state upset Kirieo and her sister, and she left town to look for her father. Using the instincts she picked up as a child, she followed a trail she believed would take her to her next lead. She strayed into a cave near the entrance to Lake Hylia and soon realized she was not alone.
A large, unidentified, black beast jumped out at her and sunk its saber-teeth into her defending forearm. After a fight she knew she couldn’t win, she recoiled and ran home, defeated. A chemical in the beasts tooth sickened her for a few days and affected her mentally. Whenever she hunted for food for her newly impoverished, broken family, Kirieo realized she would take on the aspect of the beast, her ‘feral’ ability.

Greetings, and welcome to the Escapist's Haven. ^_^

Now, let's get right down to buisness, shall we? I'm sure you're anxious to see your character approved. (I know I was when I first came. =P) First, and foremost, her personality section is far too short. For this, I really want you to get in her head. How would she react around certain people, or places? Does she trust people she just met, or is she a little weary of people in general? Details, detail, details, please.

For skills, would you care to tell the reader just how she hunts and tracks prey? There's far more then one method, and even then everyone has a unique style.

Appearence also needs some more detail. Show the reader what she looks like through description, don't just tell them.

Finally, add some more weaknesses and strengths. Every weakness should have a strength and vice versa.

Please make the recommended changes, then I'll come back to give her another look. ^_^

Mmk, I edited those fields, I hope they work for you, at least better.

Alright, I can't see anything else wrong. Pretty good for a starting character, so...

~*Approved*~