Samen the Warlock Lord

Name: Samen

Previous name: Aliastious

Species: Warlock( Shape shifter)

Age: unknown

Weight: 225lbs.

Height: 6.4

Weapons: Fire blade of the underdeapths, and a staff of the black oak. the staff of the black oak is a pure black staff with three claws at the end carrying a black solid metal ball. the staff is unbrakable.

Armour: Black cloak, with the red scorpion simble on the back of it. He also has a pure black chest plate with reineforced dragonscale chain male.

Skills/magic: He has the ability to control and create fire. he can also stop objects in mid air. The object cant way over fifty pounds though. he can tellaport from area to area although not in walls or through walls or inanimat objects.( exp cant telaport through a tree branch has to stop in front of it. This could injure him in a battle)

Strenght: He has powerful Long range attacks and his sword and staff are used for when an enemy gets to close for comfort. he s not to good with his sword or staff but he can use them better than alot of people.

weaknesses: Water can stop him instantly. he can not swim, and all his magic takes energyexcept telaportation. He must always meditate after using Large amount of fire or stopping things in the air. he can not stop things on the ground due to the connection between the groun and the object on it.

Bio; He was a young boy when he found an old man who was badely injured. There was a war going on at the time though he hardly new anything about it being a farmer. The old man offered him power if the kid saved his life.

Samen, or Aliastous obliged and was learned by Hemeri. he learned fire and medatation. He also learned how to telaport, and stop things in mid air.After three years of hard work at fifteen he found out that Hemeri was ont of the twelve hunted Sourcers. His parents found out that day that he had been dumping his chores for the tutering of the dark arts. They ordered that he stop at once and he went mad.

Later that night Hemeri killed Samens parents because they wouldnt allow him to tutor there son and brought Samen to the Sourcers. He was named Samen by Hemeri as was the sourcer custom. Hemeri was the lord of the sourcers. That put Samen for heir to the throne for the sourcers. He used a type of mind control to make Samen believe that WOLAL(magic wielders of life and light) killed his parents.

The sourcers acepted him as one of there own and he became the first apprentice of the sourcers. Later that same year an attack from WOLAL brought the sourcers to there deaths, except Samen. he escaped and killed five WOLAL during the process. He used his telaportation and teleported during an explosion to a new land. the explosion threw him off target and sent him to this world of unkown peril. while hear, he caught a native crature of smoke, and flame, from the under deapths of the mountain Kale. The creature was a Volg. this volg was not always with him. the warlock lord layed his dominion quickly over the land. he recruted forces and became enemys with Lothreian. he became determined to rule this land. Although he mostly travels alone.

Expand more detail. The Strengths area you wrote in is more like a Magic/Skills section, so change that and add in some strengths. Tone down his magical abilities, just too powerful, lessen his armor, and add more to the bio. In the bio, we don't use the term ZU, just the world these characters are all in.

Fix-r-up.

hows this/

Run it through a spelling and grammar check, then add more detail to that sword. It's just mentioned, but I don't know much about it. Give it as much detail as your staff has.

Name: Samen

Previous name: Aliastious

Species: Warlock (Shape shifter)

Age: unknown

Weight: 225lbs.

Height: 6.4

Weapons: Fire blade of the under deapths, and a staff of the black oak. The staff of the black oak is a pure black staff with three claws at the end carrying a black solid metal ball. The staff is unbreakable. The fire blade was a blade forged in the fire of the under deapths. It is made of adamantium and is indistructable. The edge is fine tiped but it cant cleve through every thing. The blade also has a rune of a dragon twisting, and turning going up the blade, with fire blowing.

Amour: Black cloak, with the red scorpion simble on the back of it. He also has a pure black chest plate with reinforced dragon scale chain male. The dragon scales are arent fit perfectly together, so a well aimed arrow could pierce the armour.

Skills/magic: He has the ability to control and create fire. He can also stop objects in mid air. The object cant way over fifty pounds though. He can teleport from area to area although not in walls or through walls or inanimate objects. (Accept cant teleport through a tree branch has to stop in front of it. This could injure him in a battle)

Strength: He has powerful Long range attacks and his sword and staff is used for when an enemy gets to close for comfort. He s not to good with his sword or staff but he can use them better than allot of people.

Weaknesses: Water can stop him instantly. He can not swim, and all his magic takes energy except teleportation. He must always meditate after using large amount of fire or stopping things in the air. He can not stop things on the ground due to the connection between the ground and the object on it.

Bio; He was a young boy when he found an old man who was badly injured. There was a war going on at the time though he hardly new anything about it being a farmer. The old man offered him power if the kid saved his life.

Samen, or Aliastous obliged and was learned by Hemeri. He learned fire and meditation. He also learned how to teleport, and stop things in mid air. After three years of hard work at fifteen he found out that Hemeri was one of the twelve hunted Sources. His parents found out that day that he had been dumping his chores for the tutering of the dark arts. They ordered that he stop at once and he went mad.

Later that night Hemeri killed Samens parents because they wouldn’t allow him to tutor there son and brought Samen to the Sourcers. He was named Samen by Hemeri as was the source custom. Hemeri was the lord of the sourcers. That put Samen for heir to the throne for the sourcers. He used a type of mind control to make Samen believe that WOLAL(magic wielders of life and light) killed his parents.

The sourcers acepted him as one of there own and he became the first apprentice of the sourcers. Later that same year an attack from WOLAL brought the sourcers to there deaths, except Samen. he escaped and killed five WOLAL during the process. He used his teleportation and teleported during an explosion to a new land. the explosion threw him off target and sent him to this world of unkown peril. While hear, he caught a native creature of smoke, and flame, from the under deapths of the mountain Kale. The creature was a Volg. this volg was not always with him. the warlock lord layed his dominion quickly over the land. he recruited forces and became enemies with Lothreian. he became determined to rule this land. Although he mostly travels alone.

Hows this?

Please don't double post. And tell me what the sword looks like, don't just say the name.

Oky, hows this?

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