My first guy Kaz

hey can someone help me i need to get my guy aproved it would help if someone can do it

hello is anyone going to help please

...huh?

Please show this character of yours.

ok here

Name: Kaomi
Gender: male
Age: 16
Race: Hylian
Height: 5.4 feet
Weight: 83 pounds


Weapon: a long poll with a circle shaped blade and a big round shield
Armor: none

Strengths: he is fast and has the power of “din” and has the power to cast solar burst to burn the enemy and can use healing flames to heal. He can also stand fire and can reflect fire powers with his staff. Because of Din’s power he can use the enemy’s fire spells that are cast on him to strengthen his spells. Weaknesses: he is very weak against water and rock powers and can not hurt water or heal water. He can be badly injured by rock powers and when damaged by water can not cast fire spells.

Spells

Flare: a big burst of flames that blows up things.

Fire Storm: fire rains from the sky and land all around me.

Fire Wall: it is a wall of flames the surrounds ether enemies or friends and hurts anyone who touches it.

White Flames: it is a white flame that surrounds friends to heal them but can’t heal water and hurts forest a little.

Bio: he is she but is nice and friendly to people him knows and are friends with. He likes to meet other people and to travel to a lot of places with a lot of people. He doesn’t like to fight other people and he is scared of danger.

The Bio is more of personality, how you have it. Change "Bio" to "Personality".

You're missing a history of the guy, though. Also, you need to add onto everything - it's much too short.

ok i will change it a lot

here it is

Name: Kaomi
Gender: male
Age: 16
Race: Hylian
Height: 5.4 feet
Weight: 83 pounds


Weapon: a long poll with a circle shaped blade and a big round shield
Armor: none

Strengths: he is fast and has the power of “Din” and has the power to cast solar burst to burn the enemy and can use healing flames to heal. He can also stand fire and can reflect fire powers with his staff. Because of Din’s power he can use the enemy’s fire spells that are cast on him to strengthen his spells. Weaknesses: he is very weak against water and rock powers and can not hurt water or heal water. He can be badly injured by rock powers and when damaged by water can not cast fire spells.

Spells

Flare: a big burst of flames that blows up things.

Fire Storm: fire rains from the sky and land all around me.

Fire Wall: it is a wall of flames the surrounds ether enemies or friends and hurts anyone who touches it.

White Flames: it is a white flame that surrounds friends to heal them but can’t heal water and hurts forest a little.

Personality: he is she but is nice and friendly to people him knows and are friends with. He likes to meet other people and to travel to a lot of places with a lot of people. He doesn’t like to fight other people and he is scared of danger. He is some sort of magic user but also fights with his weapons. He is lonely and looking for friends and is working for money.

History: he was born in a small hut outside of Hyrule in a small forest. His Dad is an alchemist and his Mom is a farmer. He is on a quest to find some friends and to get money for his family so they can by food. He is hoping he will find friends and visit lots of neat and new places. When he left he got lost in the forest and some people took him to a land far away. He escaped and found his way home. When he got home he found out that his Dad died and their family was going broke so he went to get money. And that’s how he is on a quest for money.

Eh... work on grammar a bit.

"White Flames: it is a white flame that surrounds friends to heal them but can’t heal water and hurts forest a little." <--- This makes no sense at all. Best just remove it or something...

Everything is too short as well. Make it all longer.

And a person who is 5.4 feet tall wouldn't weigh 83 pounds. They'd be much heavier O_o... over or near 100, I'd say.

Name: Kaomi
Gender: male
Age: 16
Race: Hylian
Height: 5.4 feet
Weight: 113 pounds


Weapon: a long poll with a circle shaped blade and a big round shield
Armor: none

Strengths: he is fast and has the power of “Din” and has the power to cast fire magic to burn the enemy and can use flames to heal. He can also stand fire and can reflect fire powers with his staff. Because of Din’s power he can use the enemy’s fire spells that are cast on him to strengthen his spells. Weaknesses: he is very weak against water and rock powers and can not hurt water or heal water. He can be badly injured by rock powers and when damaged by water can not cast fire spells.

Spells

Flare: a big burst of flames that blows up things.

Fire Storm: fire rains from the sky and land all around me.

Fire Wall: it is a wall of flames the surrounds ether enemies or friends and hurts anyone who touches it.

Healing Flames: it heals friends.

Ragnaroke: it deals a heavy amount of damage with massive flames

Power of the Phoenix: it fully heals a friend and can heal KO friends.

Personality: he is shy but can get along just fine. He also is friendly and likes to make lots of friends. He is lonely because his Dad died and is scared to fight and go on quests. He likes to fight when friends are close and if there are friends there to go on the quest then he is not so scared. He is not very tuff but with his fire magic he can really pack a punch.

History: he was born in a small hut outside of Hyrule in a small forest. His Dad is an alchemist and his Mom is a farmer. He is on a quest to find some friends and to get money for his family so they can by food. He is hoping he will find friends and visit lots of neat and new places. When he left he got lost in the forest and some people took him to a land far away. He escaped and found his way home. When he got home he found out that his Dad died and their family was going broke so he went to get money. And that’s how he is on a quest for money.

Hmm... I just can't find the strength to approve this character.

I'm sorry, but you just need to go out, learn for yourself instead of turning this into a grammar lesson from me - learn spelling, punctuation, grammar, detail. This character is not approved.

oh wat am i doing wrong

(SIGH) man this stinks I need help (SIGH)