Sylvana

This character isn’t a copy of Sylvana Windrunner form Wracraft III; I’m just not that good at think up names.

Name: Sylvana

Age: 33.

Race: Elves

Gender: Female.

Class: Hunter.

Hair: Long, brown hair.

Eye Colour: Green.

Weight: 11 stone 4

Height: 6 ft 3

Weapon: Two daggers, a short sword and a bow and arrows.

Armour: None.

Strength: Sylvana is very skilled with her bow and she is fairly quick when running. She also has good endurance so she can run quite far. Sylvana is also very sneaky and stealthy. She can walk practicaly right past someone and they wont know she's there.

Weakness: Sylvana sometimes underestimates her enemies. She nether admits when she is wrong and nether admits when she needs help. Also, being an elf, Sylvana is conected to nature and when nature is destroyed, Sylvana grows weaker.

Skills/Magic Ability: She is very stealthy. When she creeps up on her prey, she can’t be heard. She is also very skilled with her bow and is quite accurate when throwing her daggers. Sylvana can also create a magical barrier in front of her to protect herself. She can use elven magic to use different arrows such as fire and ice arrows. She can also heal nature by resurecting dead trees and plants.

Appearance: Sylvana wears long, black trousers and a white cloth shirt, hidden underneath a long, black cloak. She has an earing in herleft ear that resembles a cresent moon. Her face is smooth with no marks. She wears normal black shoes.

Personality: Sylvana loves to fight and goes out just to hunt. Sometimes she rushes through a battle a bit and underestimates her enemies. She says that she doesn’t any help from anyone but she knows that she is wrong, she just won’t admit it.

History: Sylvana grew up in the forest, surrounded by nature. She played in the forest with her friends just like any other girl. However, when she got to the age of 16, Sylvana decided she wanted to join the elven army. On her 18th birthday, Sylvana left her small village in the woods and set off with one of her closest friends to find a great city that lie somewhere in the forest. After many weeks of searching, Sylvana and her friend found the city and joined the army. They won many glorious battles side by side but for Sylvana it wasn’t enough to just win battles. She wanted to win great wars with her friend and when she was asked if she wanted to stay with the army and go on fighting, Sylvana said that both her and her friend would gladly stay with the army. But in the final battle of a great war, Sylvana’s friend died in her arms and Sylvana couldn’t help but feel responsible. She left the army and then, after saying goodbye to her friends and family back at her village, left the forest to travel the world. She found out that her stealth was incredible and started hunting, killing many hideous creatures and selling their hides for gold.

Ok, first off, I get the general idea of how stealthy Sylvana is, but it would be good if you put how stealthy she is and why. Others might not even understand what you mean by stealthy.

Second I think it would be good if you added a physical weakness. Underestimating an opponent really isn't a weakness, it's a habit. And never asking for help also is not a physical weakness. Try to add something that binds her through her physical being.

This isn't really needed, but you said that she is able to use fire and ice arrows, why is this. This isn't a regular ability unless she lights the arrow on fire or puts it in the freezer. You should try to explain why this happens, is it elven magic or some other talent? Does she use some magic powder on the arrows? You don't have to, but it would add to the effect if you explained why she is able to use these types of arrows.

Third, in the appearence, you gave me a description of what she wears, not how she looks. And it is for this reason that you are unable to say that her beauty can only be matched by few. You can say this, but please, give us a reason why she is beautiful. Give a description of all that makes her beautiful, and no, nice cloths do not make someone beautiful.'

Fix those things and it should be good.

I edited it. Is it Okay now?

Ok, it looks good.

*Approved*