Onoro Liring

Name: Onoro Liring (pronounced Leer-ring)

Nickname /Alias: He prefers to be called by his first name, Onoro.

Age: Unknown. He’s an elf, so they have unnatural lifespans

Apparent Age: To most people, he looks like a young adult.

Sex: Male

Race: Elf (a wood elf (i.e. lives in the forest and is close to nature) to be exact)

Height: 5’11

Weight: 100 lbs

Eye Color: Light Brown

Hair Color/Style: Silvery purple, lavender-like long hair. He has bangs that cover his right eye and go down into the hair, which reaches as far as his abdomen.

Skin Color/Complexion:Pale skin. Not ghostly white skin, but more of a less-then-tan-but-slightly-more-than-pale skin type

Appearance: He has long silvery purple, lavender like hair that travels along his back and reaches as far as his abdomen. His eyes are a light brown with a touch of gold in them. Onoro has an average elven height of 5’11 and carries a bow at all times. He wears a long sleeve brown shirt. The shirt is tight on the wrist, not loose but not quite skin tight. The whole shirt is made to stay on his torso, but as I said, not skin tight. His pants are that of trousers, the color of grey, that reach his ankle and are once again slightly tight in that area. He also wears lightweight shoes that go as high as his ankle and are a light brown. He has more of a thin figure, because he doesn't eat much. Only slightly muscular. He has both strong arms and legs because you need strength to pull back the string of a bow, depending what bow it it, and strong legs for how much he walks, runs, and climbs.

Weapon(s): Onoro carries a bow at all times. He crafted it himself, using the best materials he could find. He also created his own arrows, along with a quiver. His weapon seems to not have any special powers.

Armor: He has no armour

Carried Possessions: Currently he is not carrying anything of vital importance in his position. He prefers to have easy traveling, thus he wishes not to carry anything.


Powers/Magic/Skills: As an elf, Onoro has the ability to use magic to manipulate the forest and grow things. He can make vines appear and do as he commands or he can create a shelter using just the trees around him. Currently learning the use of water magic

Limits: N/A

Side-Effects: If fire or something of the type catches onto the vines he's controlling it will make him loose control of the vines, and it may harm him if he continued to try and keep the control

Battle Strengths: Onoro is quite lithe and light on his feet. He is fast and has a knack for climbing trees. Like all elves, he can see very far and hear things quite well.

Battle Weaknesses: As fast as he is, Onoro would not do well in a hand-to-hand combat. He knows the basics, but does not have the strength others have according to muscles. When you harm nature, whether it be in battle or not, it will harm Onoro as well. Most of the time it will cause internal bleeding, or he will feel pain in his whole body. It depends how close you are too him as well. If he is in a large forest area, everything in a 30 feet radius, as long as it's nature, would harm him if you were to destroy it. In a small forest, the whole place would harm him. If you were to simply pluck a leaf off of a bush, it would not harm him at all. Now if you were to stab the roots of the bush repeatedly, it would hurt him.

Other: Onoro is a vegetarian.

Personality: :He's quite calm. Onoro knows how to keep a level head, even when he is insulted or in a desperate situation. Onoro is also quite. He prefers to keep to himself and doesn't speak his mind most of the time. Along with those two traits, he is serious from past experience. If he isn't cautious and doesn't take things seriously, he feels that something bad might happen.

Likes: Onoro likes nature. As peaceful as he is, even Onoro enjoys the thrill of battle sometimes. He loves to practice his bow and is always living in the forest. This makes him close to animals as well.
Along with these things, he's also light-hearted and kind, like all elves. It just seems to be hidden from most. He has a soft spot for animals.

Dislikes: He can’t stand to eat meat. Onoro hates any sort of animal abuse.

Fears: Like anybody else, he’s slightly scared of death. Onoro is not afraid of battle, but it may depend who he is fighting.

Virtues: He’s lithe and quick, good at climbing. Onoro has a good nature which makes him a great friend. You don’t want to get on his bad side
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Vices: Sometimes he is too serious. Due to his past, he has learned quite a lot and is very cautious of others

History: He was born on May 5th, sometime around dawn. As a young child, Onoro didn't play with the other elves of his age, nor did he hang out with the adult elves. He preferred to be alone. Most of the time he would stay in the house and read a book or write. He kept himself isolated from the others, even his parents.
One day his parents came into his room and told Onoro to follow them. Confused, he did as told. His parents led him deep into the forest. They told him to close his eyes and then open them after 10 seconds. After the countdown, he opened them. He had been tricked. His parents were nowhere to be seen, and he was lost and alone in the forest. Onoro never saw his parents again.
He made no attempt to find them over the years. He taught himself how to survive instead. There would be no point in trying to find the people that had abandoned him in his younger years. Once he was older, he started traveling to different places. To this day he travels and survives, nothing more, nothing less.

Hello, DemonLordGhirahim. I'm going to call you Delg, for short. I hope you don't mind.

I've had a chance to look over your character, and like him. It's nice to have some simple, straightforward folks here in our Guild. I don't see any glaring problems with Onoro, but there are a couple of things that I'd like to know more about before I let you run rampant with the other writers, and a couple of things that could be polished up just a touch. Let's start from the top, shall we?

So, Name through Complexion: Fine and dandy. Next.

Appearance: Here you've re-described things we already know about Onoro, and told us about his clothing. I would like to see a little more detail here, though. Just some simple things, like the shape of his body (slim, wiry, muscular, flabby, et cetera?), how fit he is, perhaps the shape of his ears, or any unusual markings, tattoos or scars he might have. You know, just to paint a picture in your reader's head.

Weapons: Peachy. Next.

Armor: This looks like it was copied over directly from Onoro's Appearance section. Unless his clothing serves as protection from injury any more than regular clothing does, it's not necessary to repeat this information.

Carried Possessions: Also dandy.

P/M/S: I'd like to know more about his plant control ability. Does he have a maximum range, does this magic require concentration, does its use wear him out after a while or does he need to pay some other kind of cost? When you say he can make vines appear, do you mean he can cause vines to spontaneously grow out of thin air, or does he need some kind of earthen environment to make the vines? How large or long are these vines? How strong are they? Does his ability to create shelter also extend to the ability to create walls, floors or more complicated natural structures? How much time does it take him to make a structure? Does it depend on the size of the structure, and is there a maximum size or complexity he can create? These are just some questions to think about. It's not an inquisition, but it would be great if you could answer at least some of them.

Side-Effects: Is this a result of his plant control magic? If it is, and for some reason he loses his plant control, does this side-effect go with it? If it's not due to his magic, or losing his magic won't make it go away, it's probably better to put this stuff under his Battle Weaknesses.

Battle Strengths through Other: Just remember that thing I said about his Side-Effects. Otherwise we're good here.

Personality: I'm really not seeing enough detail here. Other than what you put into the subsections, I want to see at least four more full sentences about Onoro's personality. Flesh him out, because it's going to be important for others to know what he's like. Feel free to look around at some other characters to get an idea of what I mean. Shrub, Sabbo and Quark all have excellent examples of this, and all of them also have different writing styles.

History: It would be great to see this a little more thought out. I'm going to stress detail again, or at least attention. Try expanding this out to two or three paragraphs. Really try to tell us Onoro's story, instead of nothing but the raw facts.

Okay, Delg. Get those things taken care of, and we should be quite golden with Onoro. Thanks in advance!

Thanks for the nickname!

Appearance:(the add-on parts) He has more of a thin figure, because he doesn't eat much. Only slightly muscular. He has both strong arms and legs because you need strength to pull back the string of a bow, depending what bow it it, and strong legs for how much he walks, runs, and climbs.

Armour: Just put that part there just in case. It doesn't serve as any proper type of armour.

P/M/S:I would say the limit he can grow them would be around 20 feet or so. It requires concentration, but not the uttermost concentration and focus he has. It doesn't require much since he has been using this magic for quite some time. It doesn't wear him out when he's creating shelter, because after he has forged it Onoro let's the control free from his hold and it stays in place. When he is not making a shelter, it will eventually wear him out, but that depends on how many vines he's controlling (which would be about 7-10). The time limit for controlling the vines would probably be about half an hour. An earthen environment is required for this type of magic use. They can be as long as his maximum range. It does not take much time to create the structure, for the process is quite quick. He makes them shoot out of the ground and can shift them however he wants them two.

Side-Effects: The part I included earlier is not a side effect. I will add that into other. If fire catches onto the vines, it will most likely make him loose his hold on the vines, or else it will harm him.

Battle Strengths through other:I would just add the harming of nature part to other. (I'm going to re-explain it in a little more detail)When you harm nature, whether it be in battle or not, it will harm Onoro as well. Most of the time it will cause internal bleeding, or he will feel pain in his whole body. It depends how close you are too him as well. If he is in a large forest area, everything in a 30 feet radius, as long as it's nature, would harm him if you were to destroy it. In a small forest, the whole place would harm him. If you were to simply pluck a leaf off of a bush, it would not harm him at all. Now if you were to stab the roots of the bush repeatedly, it would hurt him.

Personality:He's quite calm. Onoro knows how to keep a level head, even when he is insulted or in a desperate situation. Onoro is also quite. He prefers to keep to himself and doesn't speak his mind most of the time. Along with those two traits, he is serious from past experience. If he isn't cautious and doesn't take things seriously, he feels that something bad might happen.
Along with these things, he's also light-hearted and kind, like all elves. It just seems to be hidden from most. He has a soft spot for animals.

History: He was born on May 5th, sometime around dawn. As a young child, Onoro didn't play with the other elves of his age, nor did he hang out with the adult elves. He preferred to be alone. Most of the time he would stay in the house and read a book or write. He kept himself isolated from the others, even his parents.
One day his parents came into his room and told Onoro to follow them. Confused, he did as told. His parents led him deep into the forest. They told him to close his eyes and then open them after 10 seconds. After the countdown, he opened them. He had been tricked. His parents were nowhere to be seen, and he was lost and alone in the forest. Onoro never saw his parents again.
He made no attempt to find them over the years. He taught himself how to survive instead. There would be no point in trying to find the people that had abandoned him in his younger years. Once he was older, he started traveling to different places. To this day he travels and survives, nothing more, nothing less.

There's a handy button in the lower right of all of your posts. If you're using the temple skin, that is. It's the button for editing your posts. So, if you wouldn't mind, just edit in those things you added and expounded on and make it look shiny. I'll come back once you do.

: A fellow Councilor has informed me that that button exists everywhere but on the mobile skin. You wouldn't happen to be using your mobile to post, would you?

I have edited in my add-on's. Am I approved now?

Sorry for taking so long to get back to you, Delg. You should be fine. You're approved; go and have fun with the other writers.