Irai Gates, King of Pirates

Name: Irai Gates

Nickname/Alias: Irai

Age: 24

Apparent Age: N/A

Sex: Male

Race: Human

Height: 6'2 feet

Weight: 143 pounds

Eye Color: Hazel

Hair Color/Style: Dirty Blond; Mullet

Skin Tone/Complexion: Pale

Appearance:
That of a sea-faring English pirate, with a shaddy longcoat and other grubby clothing. Irai wears a traditional dark-grey Royal Navy uniform--albeit, it has many rips and tears where the golden hems and bronze buttons once were. It is likely one of his most useful bits of clothing, and many Royal Officers have believed him to be one of them. Atop his head lies a black bicorne, which in modern times is known as the stereotypical "pirate hat."

His right arm has a black scar--getting larger each time he cheats death. His most interesting adornment is his gilded bracelet, which he wears on his left arm--he stole it from a hollowed corpse he found lieing in a back alley. Its golden glow seems to absorb the moonlight.

The curve of his large tanned nose is very Roman-esque, and he has a few freckles and other blemishes on his pale face. For such a lanky body, Irai actually sports some muscular arms, likely from carrying his massive sword.

Weapon(s):
A long, battle-worn bastard sword... with many cuts and scratches on it's long, thick blade, it has clearly been used by warriors of ancient times. The blade itself has a curved
end, as well as a thin silver edge running along the left side of it. It is remarkable how Irai manages to carry such a collossal weapon--the blade itself is 5 feet long--and yet wield it with such ease. He refers to the sword with the words inscribed on the handle, "Nyx." He must wield it with two hands.

This sword has saved his life many times--without it, his head would've met the guillotine by now. His only other weapons are a small two-shot pistol which he keeps in his boot, with copper-forged bullets and quickfire trigger; as well as a poisen-laced cutting knife, which he keeps hidden in a satchel on his belt.

The knife and the gun are both last-resorts. In fact, he often misses the intended target of his pistol. He only carries around 6 bullets hidden in his satchel, and his knife has a very weak dart frog extract.
As for the pistol, the bullets are very short-range, and can only hold two or so shots before being reloaded.

The poison extract is of the rare pink-hide dart frog, which releases this hallucinogenic venom to escape danger. Unfortunately for its victim, the toxin is almost instantenous, and requires a good two hours of sleep before wearing off.

Despite being somewhat weak and hard to wield, his knife has gotten him out of trouble several times in the past, catching his opponents off guard.

Armor:
Interestingly, Irai has little to no protective equipment--aside from a few knee pads or other cheap pieces of armor, and of course his traditional Royal Navy garb and longcoat. Any other gear would weigh his somewhat frail body down.

Carried Possessions:
Not much in terms of actual use, other than his "lucky coin." Ironically, this bit of treasure more often than not has the oppisite effect on Irai's well being--it usually gets him in trouble. He also carries a half-torn treasure map, which it is his primary goal to repair.

Powers/Magic/Skills
Not applicable.

Battle Strengths:
Irai is skilled in both hand-to-hand combat as well as using his gun and knife to stealthily kill his targets. However, his greatest strengths are his remarkable swordplay skills. He once took down an entire military platoon with nothing but a stolen rapier.

The shine of moonlight, for one reason or another, seems to mentally strengthen him, and Irai has plotted many a great escape due to this genetic phenonenom.

Battle Weaknesses:
Irai despises magic, and will often run into battle, underestimating even the most infamous of mages. He also neglects help, even going against the foresight of his own crew.

As I stated before, Irai seems to be mentally strengthened by the shine of moonlight, however, during this, his physical senses are in a daze, due to the heightened activity of his mind's subconsiousness. His sense of smell is reduced, and his feelings go numb. This effect seems to be reminescant of the sensation one feels while aware that they are dreaming.

Because of this phsycological weakness, the few enemies who catch onto this are very dangerous threats to Irai. After all, how can Irai fight them if he can barely walk straight?

Personality:
Irai is an insomniac, always distracted by the glow of treasure, a light that only he seems to notice. Although he tries not to show it, the fiery look in his eyes has been growing more and more distant since the execution of his crew members.

He is somewhat irritable, getting angry at merchants and other sources of information as he searches for the other half of his treasure map. The well-being of others isn't this pirate's primary goal in life, and he prefers stowing away in his treasure room over socialising with others.

History:
On the 23rd of June, twenty-two years ago, a ship eased in on the horizen. It was trading season; the tide was high and the prices low. But there was something different about this ship--it did not bear the proud sign of the Chisterean empire. No, this boat had its flag raised low, emblazened with something foreign. Something... sinister.

"Pirates!" screamed the guards from the lookout tower, and the citizens of the port-town panicked, closing up their shops and businesses, all fearing for their lives. This city had been overtaken by greed, and it was only time before the Laputan Pirates had caught wind of the townpeople's frivolous expenses.

As the ship docked, cannons shot off, their piercing BOOMs and loud BANGs breaking the silence. Suddenly, a gruff group of dastardly pirates rushed off of the deck of the infamous Laputan cruiser, and they began ramsacking homes and stealing loot.

The crew usually didn't take prisoners, but during this raid, one boy stood out. A small child, wrapped in nothing but ragged robes, had been abandoned in a back alley, its parents clearly not caring for it. On it was only one indicator of who it was: a single name--Irai B. Gates.

The two pirates who had found it hesitated, not sure if the rest of the crew would approve of taking in such a frail child. But knowing that it was the right thing to do, they picked it up, and ran back to the ship with the boy in hand.

This boy had a future, and a grand one indeed. For he was to become the king of all pirates.

[since Irai's crew has in fact been executed, I would like to be pointed in the direction of a place where I can recruit fellow roleplayers]

Bump.

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C'mon, Shrub, it's been a week since I posted this!

Lol, okay, here I am. I'll be your approver. Irai gets my stampy of approval once his profile is up to snuff.

Firstly:

Height: 6'8 feet

Weight: 87 pounds

Okay, if he is six feet and 8 inches, he is definitely not only 87 pounds. I would say from 175-250 depending on how much muscle he has. 175 would be on the lean and lanky side for someone that tall, 250 would be on the bigger and bulker side, maybe fat or maybe just full of muscle It could go either way. Just a tip. You can keep the number you have for weight if you really want to.

Appearance:
That of a typical pirate, with a shaddy longcoat and other grubby clothing. His most interesting adornment is his gilded bracelet, which he wears on his left arm--he stole it from a hollowed corpse he found lieing in a back alley. Its golden glow seems to absorb the moonlight.

Okay, "typical pirate" is not an adequate description. We need to know his body type and structure: fat, chubby, muscular, lean, lanky. Also need to know what his face looks like. Any grubby pirate beard, mustache, 5 o'clock shadow? Scars? A little more description on his clothes would be nice other than "longcoat and grubby clothing". Color, style, etc. Bandana? Pirate hat? Eye-patch?

Appearance doesn't have to be as super detailed as others may have theirs at, but there needs to be enough so that other people at least have an adequate idea of what the character looks like. "Typical pirate" can mean a lot of different things to a lot of different people. It's too vague.

Weapon(s):
A long, battle-worn bastard sword, similar to Cloud's blade from the "Kingdom Hearts" series. This sword has saved his life many times--without it, his head would've met the guillotine by now. His only other weapons are a small pistol which he keeps in his boot, as well as a poisen-laced cutting knife, which he keeps hidden in a satchel on his belt.

I do not recommend the use of the phrase "similar to Cloud's blade from the Kingdom Hearts series" to describe his sword. Why? Because I, like some other people, haven't played that game. I started playing it but never finished it. Some people may have never played it all. So it is not an adequate way to describe a weapon. You must use terms the most people will understand, do not basis it off a description of a video game that people may or may not have played. You can still use that particular sword for inspiration for this character's weapon, but you must use more detailed words to describe it. Do use references people might not understand.

That aside, give me a little more of the sword's dimensions, like how long it is and how heavy it is. Does it require two hands to use?

As for the pistol, how many shots can it fire before it needs to be reloaded? How much ammunition does he tend to carry on his person to reload? This helps keep a reasonable limit on how many times he can use his pistol. Include a range limit on it as well. How far can it shoot? When does its accuracy start to fail?

As for the poison on the knife, what does it do? Kill? Paralyze? Otherwise inhibit attackers?

Battle Weaknesses:
Irai despises magic, and will often run into battle, underestimating even the most infamous of mages. He also neglects help, even going against the foresight of his own crew. Irai seems to be mentally strengthened by the shine of moonlight, however, during this, his physical senses are in a daze.

The underlined part belongs in the Strengths section. Please reword it so strengths are in the Strengths section, and weaknesses stay in the Weaknesses section.

Also, need a little more detail on what you mean by his "physical senses."

Originally Posted by Shrub

Lol, okay, here I am. I'll be your approver. Irai gets my stampy of approval once his profile is up to snuff.

Firstly: Okay, if he is six feet and 8 inches, he is definitely not only 87 pounds. I would say from 175-250 depending on how much muscle he has. 175 would be on the lean and lanky side for someone that tall, 250 would be on the bigger and bulker side, maybe fat or maybe just full of muscle It could go either way. Just a tip. You can keep the number you have for weight if you really want to.Okay, "typical pirate" is not an adequate description. We need to know his body type and structure: fat, chubby, muscular, lean, lanky. Also need to know what his face looks like. Any grubby pirate beard, mustache, 5 o'clock shadow? Scars? A little more description on his clothes would be nice other than "longcoat and grubby clothing". Color, style, etc. Bandana? Pirate hat? Eye-patch?

Appearance doesn't have to be as super detailed as others may have theirs at, but there needs to be enough so that other people at least have an adequate idea of what the character looks like. "Typical pirate" can mean a lot of different things to a lot of different people. It's too vague.I do not recommend the use of the phrase "similar to Cloud's blade from the Kingdom Hearts series" to describe his sword. Why? Because I, like some other people, haven't played that game. I started playing it but never finished it. Some people may have never played it all. So it is not an adequate way to describe a weapon. You must use terms the most people will understand, do not basis it off a description of a video game that people may or may not have played. You can still use that particular sword for inspiration for this character's weapon, but you must use more detailed words to describe it. Do use references people might not understand.

That aside, give me a little more of the sword's dimensions, like how long it is and how heavy it is. Does it require two hands to use?

As for the pistol, how many shots can it fire before it needs to be reloaded? How much ammunition does he tend to carry on his person to reload? This helps keep a reasonable limit on how many times he can use his pistol. Include a range limit on it as well. How far can it shoot? When does its accuracy start to fail?

As for the poison on the knife, what does it do? Kill? Paralyze? Otherwise inhibit attackers?The underlined part belongs in the Strengths section. Please reword it so strengths are in the Strengths section, and weaknesses stay in the Weaknesses section.

Also, need a little more detail on what you mean by his "physical senses."

Okay. Editing now. (btw, I personally have never played any Kingdom Hearts games either. Too much Disney. I just always liked the characters of Cloud and Sephiroth)

Height: 6'2 feet

Weight: 124 pounds

Okay, this is better but still not realistic. Dropping 6 inches off his height doesn't make 124 a realistic weight. If he is thin and lanky, 145-160 pounds is a realistic weight. If he is thicker and muscled out, 180-200 is a realistic weight.

This is just a suggestion. You don't have to change it. I'm just giving some tips on what realistic weights are depending on height and body type.

Appearance:
That of a sea-faring English pirate, with a shaddy longcoat and other grubby clothing. Irai wears a traditional dark-grey Royal Navy uniform--albeit, it has many rips and tears where the golden hems and bronze buttons once were. It is likely one of his most useful bits of clothing, and many Royal Officers have believed him to be one of them. Atop his head lies a black bicorne, which in modern times is known as the stereotypical "pirate hat."

His right arm has a black scar--getting larger each time he cheats death. His most interesting adornment is his gilded bracelet, which he wears on his left arm--he stole it from a hollowed corpse he found lieing in a back alley. Its golden glow seems to absorb the moonlight.

Better, but you still haven't given me any description on his body type or his facial features. Need those.

This sword has saved his life many times--without it, his head would've met the guillotine by now. His only other weapons are a small two-shot pistol which he keeps in his boot, with copper-forged bullets and quickfire trigger; as well as a poisen-laced cutting knife, which he keeps hidden in a satchel on his belt.

The knife and the gun are both last-resorts. In fact, he often misses the intended target of his pistol. He only carries a few bullets, and his knife has a very weak dart frog extract. However, they have got him out of trouble several times in the past, catching his opponents off guard.

Better but you still have failed to provide the key details I was looking for:

Originally Posted by Shrub

That aside, give me a little more of the sword's dimensions, like how long it is and how heavy it is. Does it require two hands to use?

As for the pistol, how many shots can it fire before it needs to be reloaded? How much ammunition does he tend to carry on his person to reload? This helps keep a reasonable limit on how many times he can use his pistol. Include a range limit on it as well. How far can it shoot? When does its accuracy start to fail?

As for the poison on the knife, what does it do? Kill? Paralyze? Otherwise inhibit attackers?

You haven't included how many rounds the pistol can fire before it needs to be reloaded. You only said he "carries a few bullets". "A few" is too vague. Give me an actual number.

You haven't included what the poison from the dart frog does to people.

How long is the sword exactly?

Battle Weaknesses:
Irai despises magic, and will often run into battle, underestimating even the most infamous of mages. He also neglects help, even going against the foresight of his own crew.

As I stated before, Irai seems to be mentally strengthened by the shine of moonlight, however, during this, his physical senses are in a daze, due to the heightened activity of his mind's subconsiousness. His sense of smell is reduced, and his feelings go numb. This effect seems to be reminescant of the sensation one feels while aware that they are dreaming.

Good, but how does this affect his ability to fight in combat situations. Just explain that a little more and you should be good.

And boom goes the dynamite!

Done.

Okay, sorry it took me so long to respond. But you don't have to bump to get me to look at it again. I know when you post, don't worry. I have just been busy these past few days.

It all looks good, there's just one last thing I need to see before I can put the approval stamp on this profile.

The poison extract is of the rare pink-hide dart frog, which releases this hallucinogenic venom to escape danger.

Just need to include how time it takes to take effect on the person poisoned with it and how long the effects last.

Done.

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