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Old 02-20-2012, 09:27 PM
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Ivellios Nailo

Name: Ivellios Nailo
Nickname /Alias: Lenthar Al'Dresh, Alphonse Debnar
Age: 167
Apparent Age: 26
Sex: Male
Race: Elf (Vampire)
Height: 4' 9''
Weight: 110 lbs
Eye Color: Green
Hair Color/Style: Black; long and straight, usually covered partially with a bandage
Skin Color/Complexion: Pale, even for an elf. Deathly pale

Appearance: Two small puckered scars on the left side of his neck, generally looks like a poor craftsman, callouses on the hands and all. Keeps a bandage wrapped around his head to hide his ears, plays it off as a wound that never really heals. Wears a massive sword on his back, which is hidden underneath a set of carpenters' tools he carries around. Small, sharp eyes, and a hawk-like nose adorn his face, as well as a regular-sized mouth. His body is covered in a multitude of scars, and is extremely well-toned, as he is strong for an elf. His eyes are sunken into his face.

Weapon(s):
Coia Dagnir (Life's Bane) - Large, exotic greatsword, forged with a reddish metal that pulls moisture out of the air and, if not kept sheathed overnight, becomes crusted with salt. This sword, if wielded by another, is clunky and difficult to swing, as it is hollowed out at its center, and partially filled with mercury. Ivellios is often seen talking to this sword, or rather, arguing with it, and it's occasionally been known to emit bursts of sunlight or transform into mountable animals, such as a horse, giant eagle, or giant crocodile (these are the only animals it can transform into, and they have no other abilities than providing transportation in air, on land, or in water). His sword is intelligent, and it speaks telepathically in a British accent. It spends basically all of its time berating Ivellios for how little of his magnificent abilities he uses correctly, and will flat-out refuse to work if he's in a bad enough mood and Ivellios isn't at risk of dying.
Straight up, its powers are emitting sunlight to weaken vampires, absorbing vampires who are attempting to escape in gaseous form, locating vampires within a 30-foot radius (only if Ivellios decides to try and detect them), and turning into one of three mountable animals.
Exploding Shuriken - Ivellios also carries a small pouch of enchanted shuriken, which create a small fire explosion when they contact their target (about a 1-foot blast radius). He keeps 20 of these on his person at any given time.
Poisons - Here is a list of his poisons, along with their potency, how many doses he has, how they must enter the victim, and their effects.
Dark Reaver Powder - 5 doses. Black powder that is odorless and has a sour tang. Ingested, extremely potent (only the most poison-resistant beings could avoid being affected). Causes physical weakness; the enemy finds it harder to move, and has decreased physical stamina.
Drow Poison - 5 doses. Colorless liquid. Must enter through an injury, and is moderately potent. Causes unconsciousness.
Burnt Othur Fumes - 5 doses. Colorless gas. Inhaled, moderately potent. Severely drains enemy stamina; the enemy often becomes dizzy and finds it hard to stand.
Black Lotus Extract - 3 doses. Colorless liquid. Absorbed through the skin, moderately potent. Kills weaker enemies, and drains massive amounts of stamina from stronger ones.
Dragon Bile - 1 dose. Brown, translucent liquid. Absorbed through the skin, extremely potent. Severely weakens enemy physically, but does not drain stamina.
Oil of Taggit - 10 doses. Colorless, tasteless liquid. Ingested, low potency. Causes unconsciousness.

Armor: None. His skin is harder than most, however, and is able to deflect weak attacks, even if it's an edged weapon. For instance, a teenager swinging a sword would be blocked, but anyone stronger than that would pierce his hide.

Carried Possessions: Ivellios keeps a chess piece of a king with him at all times, and treats it like it were made of glass. If it is ever touched, he freaks out instantly and lashes out at the person responsible.

Powers/Magic/Skills: Ivellios is a vampire, the old-fashioned Dracula kind. He can climb up walls, he heals normal wounds fairly quickly (a moderately large gash will heal in about 30 seconds), and he can dominate weak-willed individuals if he makes eye contact (weak-willed meaning mostly insignificant NPC's, with a few exceptions if the person who is running the player/NPC allows it). When near death, he dissipates into a fine mist and coalesces in the nearest coffin he owns (he doesn't own many, no more than 10, but he creates one in every town he visits while pretending to be a carpenter). He is remarkably strong, and his skin is thicker than normal (any attack that attempts to pierce his skin gets reduced; an attack with a javelin would act like an arrow wound, a hit with an axe would hit like a hatchet, etc. This difference becomes insignificant if the opponent is more than twice as strong as an average human). Additionally, he can turn invisible briefly (5 seconds max) about ten times per day. He is incredibly deft, excellent at reconnaissance, and can see in the dark without a problem. He is also an excellent liar, and often walks around in one of his many disguises, including the carpenter, Lenthar Al'Dresh.

Limits: He becomes incredibly weak in the sunlight, basically like Superman with Kryptonite. All dexterity, strength, and extraordinary abilities vanish. He can barely pick up his sword. Additionally, if he enters running water, is stabbed in the heart with a wooden stake, has his head cut off, or has his amulet removed while in sunlight, he dies instantly. If he turns into mist and a coffin is not within a 9 mile radius, he will die then as well. If he does not drink blood in a month, he loses all of his powers during the nighttime as well, and after three months goes into tropor, which is basically a coma of blood-starvation.

Side-Effects: Besides instant death and crippling weakness in various conditions, he is instantly recognizable as a vampire by animals and other vampires.

Battle Strengths: Strong, dextrous, massive sword designed to kill vampires by emitting sunlight and absorbing the mist that vampires like Ivellios attempt to turn into to escape. Excellent eyesight, hearing, and night vision. Can turn invisible in combat, and is adept at using his shuriken while hiding.

Battle Weaknesses: All but useless in sunlight, can die very easily, can be incapacitated with very little effort. If someone is able to sneak up on him or find him in the sunlight, he's basically screwed. Running water will destroy him, and a wooden stake to the heart will temporarily kill him (he comes back to life if the stake is removed while he's still intact). Decapitating him will kill him instantly and irreversibly, as will forcing him into gaseous form with a sword made of the same metal as his own.

Other: Is being hunted by an unseen force. He likes to keep on the move, especially at night when the moon is out. Wherever he is, one can hear the eerie howling of wolves in the distance.

Personality: Bad-tempered loner. Usually opens up to one and only one person at a time. Is quick to start fights, and is massively cocky towards everyone around him. Almost always rubs people the wrong way.

Likes: Strong liquor, dark corners
Dislikes: Most people, vampires, and daytime
Fears: The distant wolves; being taken unaware; losing the chess piece
Virtues: Patience, composure
Vices: Anger, alcoholism

History: Left the elven society out of dissatisfaction with the complacency of the elves. Disguised himself as a human, and trained in the arts of subterfuge to avoid being discovered for who he was. Helped to found a small town on the border of elven territory, where he met a young lordling who hired his carpentry services and dragged him to a town deeper in human territory. In this town, he was ambushed and turned by a vampire lord named the Red Widow. She forced him to play assassin and develop his abilities until he was strong enough to kill her, at which point he promptly assassinated her and reshaped his sword into a vampire slayer. After this, he briefly met with a half-vampire paladin woman, whom he fell in love with. She just died only weeks ago, which is why he left to adventure again. The only thing he has left of her is the chesspiece he carries around with him.
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Old 03-09-2012, 05:16 PM
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Hi I'm Puck, I'll be your approver today.

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Skin Color/Complexion: Pale, even for an elf. Almost dead
Almost dead? Is the skin actually almost dead, or just look that way?

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Weapon(s): Large, exotic greatsword, forged with a reddish metal that pulls moisture out of the air and, if not kept sheathed overnight, becomes crusted with salt. This sword, if wielded by another, is clunky and difficult to swing, as it is hollowed out at its center, and partially filled with mercury. Ivellios is often seen talking to this sword, or rather, arguing with it, and it's occasionally been known to emit bursts of sunlight or transform into mountable animals, such as a horse, giant eagle, or giant crocodile. Whenever he doesn't use this, Ivellios also carries a small pouch of enchanted shuriken, which create a small fire explosion when they contact their target. He keeps 20 of these on his person at any given time. He also carries an array of poisons, all of which are meant for knocking out the drinker/inhaler.

Alright, first things first please seperate each weapon into it's own paragraph for easy reading.

Now the sword. What you have here is very vauge, and mystical, but doesn't explain the powers of the weapon. What I need is a description of all the powers the sword possess (including if it has a soul or personality or whatever) as well as a list of all the animals it can turn it. Right now you haven't really given enough information for me to make a call on if it's too powerful, and theres nothing stopping you from, say, making it turn into a dragon.

Also how large are the shuriken explosions.

Aaaand I'll need a list of posions and their effects. (Right now you could say posion his shuriken with a posion of instant death)


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Powers/Magic/Skills: Ivellios is a vampire,
Wait wait what? Why is this not in his race? This needs to go into his race.

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He can climb up walls,
Spider vampire!~ Spider vampire!~ Does what ever a spider vampire does~

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he heals normal wounds fairly quickly,
How quickly.

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and he can dominate weak-willed individuals if he makes eye contact.
Yeah, mind control is way to powerful. You can keep this but it is not to be used against another persons character, or NPC without their express written consent.

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When near death, he dissipates into a fine mist and coalesces in the nearest coffin he owns.
How many does he own?

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He is remarkably strong, and his skin is thicker than normal.
How strong, how thick.

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Battle Weaknesses: All but useless in sunlight, can die very easily, can be incapacitated with very little effort. If someone is able to sneak up on him or find him in the sunlight, he's basically screwed.
Sun is good, but we need another weakness to counteract his prowess. (If someone sneaks up on him not counting as it has been explained he has good senses)


So take a look at the things I mentioned, and PM or VM when that is done. Thanks ^_^
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Old 03-09-2012, 09:55 PM
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It'll do.

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Old 03-09-2012, 10:01 PM
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Huzzah!!
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