Grandcannon

I realize she has the same name as another character of mine as her alternate self. Thats because she was originally my UTAUloid that I modified for the novel I'm writing u v u;


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Name: UTAU Mae (Goes by Mae, UTAU is just a title)
Alias: Grandcannon (Sealed, other personality)
Age: 17
Apparent Age: 17
Sex: Female
Race: Android
Height: 5'4 ft.
Weight: 109 lbs
Eye Color: Heterochromatic Red and Blue / Golden Yellow as Grandcannon
Hair Color/Style: Short brown hair / Long Blond as Grandcannon
Skin Color/Complexion: White

Appearance:

As for Grandcannon, since I can't find an accurate picture-
Grandcannon has dirty blond long hair down to her waist with golden yellow eyes. She wears a grey shirt with a red circle on it and wears a darker grey skirt. While her human form is generally plain, her cannon form is much different.

Grandcannon's cannon form is a massive cannon that has a glowing blue interior. It is a large enough to engulf an entire planet with its main laser (which it can only fire once a century, unfortunately). Its exterior is made of black tinted metal that makes it blend in with space around it in a decent manner, but it is still noticeable with high tech software. this was the reference picture that I used for grandcannon's canon form, the inside of the canon being shown on one of the screens.

Weapon(s): Axe tail (which is not on Grandcannon), When she is Grandcannon she has her cannon form or some of the many cannons she can form from herself.

Armor: n/a

Carried Possessions: n/a


Powers/Magic/Skills:

Grandcannon
As Grandcannon only, she has the power to fire both her main cannon and smaller cannons. Main cannon can only be fired in her true form.
Limits: Grandcannon's smaller cannons can not aim properly at targets on a planet during battles, and she can only turn into and fire the main cannon once a century.
The exact cannons are as follows:
- Main Cannon: Bsically the main cannon is the entire cannon in itself. It is large enough to swallow up a planet in its laser, which is why Grandcannon gained the nickname 'World Destroyer' from Zerai, one of the only people that managed to escape her home planet before it was destroyed. The main cannon is blue tinted on the inside but black as night on the outside.
- Sub-Cannons: Smaller, less deadly cannons. Although they are small enough to summon in her human form, she can also summon a lot of them in her main cannon form. These fire mini-lasers at rapid paces, but can overheat and be destroyed. In cannon form she is quick to replace them, but in human form it takes time.
- Microcannons: Basically can form from the sides of her human form's arms and legs, as well as from the tops of her hands. They are toylike in appearance thus making it hard to tell if they are real until they start shooting. Even though they can be deadly if they hit a person, they are incredibly easy to destroy.

True Form: Grandcannon's true form is a massive spacecannon (although the picture is not an exact reference, its a base design) that is large enough to destroy a planet with its main laser. Grandcannon can only turn into this form and fire the main laser once every century. The end of the cannon's main lazer is about twice the size of the earth, and the cannon itself is equipped with an anti-gravity generator so then it wouldn't pull its target planet off of balance and damage it before hand. Grandcannon can only change into this form in space, and after she changes back if she doesn't manage to do enough damage to her target she is very vulnerable and weak due to transformation. Since her true form is so large compared to her normal self, it takes her at least 20 minute to change completely, which is an incredibly vulnerable time for her. Even though the process of transformation can not be halted, she can get severely damaged. Her true form also lacks a targeting system for the smaller cannons, which was another flaw that she couldn't fix with herself.



Battle Strengths:
As Grandcannon, she has the strength of having multiple weapons she can use to fight her enemies. Many different lasers and other cannon- or gun at that matter- based weapons are her preference. She isn't very fast, but what she lacks in speed she makes up in attack power and size for her true form.
As for Mae, she lacks any kind of battle strengths other than her axe tail. She only uses it to protect herself at that. The only time she gets to the point of wielding weapons is when she is ordered to by the Android Queen or Lyra.
Battle Weaknesses:
To say the least, for Grandcannon is very slow with her movements thus making it easier to hit her between attacks. Even though she herself is slow, the same can not be said for her attacks. Unfortunately, due to her only being able to use laser and gun based attacks, many kinds of things are immune to them, thus putting her at a complete and total disadvantage. She has NO armor, thus making her very weak to general hits unless in her true Cannon form.
Mae is pretty much weak to everything, but her clothing acts as weak armor to at least protect her slightly. She was made to be an assassin originally, using her singing voice as a distraction, but that backfired when she was revealed to be unable to gain enough skill to pull it off.

Other: She doesn't exactly have 'transformation sequences' between her forms. Mae is more of a mask to Grandcannon and is considered the one that never truthfully wants to fight. As for information on Mae's axe tail and Heterochromatic eyes, She was built with them by the Android Princess Lyra of her home world, which was destroyed by her alternate form, Grandcannon. This is actually a character for a story I am writing, But I figured I'd like to RP her here as well, If you do not mind.

Personality:
As Mae, she is a shy young girl with trust issues, but she is very loyal to the android queen and Lyra. She tries not to talk much unless spoken to, and she is a decent singer in enough of a way so she actually appreciates her own voice slightly. She is kind to those who do talk to her if they are allowed to by the queen, but that was in the past. Since Mae and Grandcannon's homeworld was destroyed, she spends a lot of time going from world to world trying to find a new home and make friends.

Grandcannon, on the other hand, isn't so nice. She is actually crazy, and she doesn't like Mae one bit. She wants to get free of Mae's body, she knows that much. Just because she grew up inside of Mae doesn't mean that she has to like her. Grandcannon, unlike Mae, does not have the ability to feel kindness for she locked her heart away and she cant feel good emotions due to a horrible past event. She doesn't like being talked to by people, and actually avoids saying her name to strangers or she just avoids talking to them in general. Those whom talk to her in general could realize that she is very full of herself as well as she is very rude, self-centered, and murderous. One wrong move, and she might attempt to kill you, and it doesn't take much to provoke her. Fortunately, Mae tries to make sure Grandcannon doesn't get free as often.


History:

Mae and Grandcannon were created by Lyra, whom was a young android princess- the daughter of the android queen. At first, Mae was unable to function on her own due to lacking a significant power core. Lyra, being childish, accidentally went through the trash piles for a power core, ending up finding a futuristic looking black-metaled core that she ended up putting within Mae's body. Unfortunately, she had no clue this was to be how Mae was to get two souls in one body, for the power core was that of one of the more dangerous cannons, Grandcannon, whom wasn't supposed to be 'brought to life' and was scrapped in the war due to lack of a body to put it in. As soon as Mae activated, Lyra taught her how to sing and fight, although Mae wasn't good at fighting. On the other hand, Grandcannon paid extra attention to the fighting sections. When Mae was first tested in a battle, it was realized that she was incredibly effective for some reason, but also that when actually battling her eyes changed colors. Disregarding it at first, the androids assumed it was just an added function and used it to their advantage, or at least until they found out that Grandcannon was one of the enemies, one of the cannons. They threw Mae out just like trash, but Lyra felt miserable for it. This was when Mae met Tobias, a cannon/human hybrid that Grandcannon ended falling in love with unaware that she was just being used. Grandcannon, being stubbornly loyal to the androids at the time even if they rejected her, was very sensitive to having any emotions. When Tobias admitted he never loved her, and was only using her in one of the final battles between the cannons and the androids, Grandcannon became devastated to the point of insanity. Sealing off her heart, she then changed to her cannon form and fired the laser to destroy her home planet, but yet this made them have nowhere to go and made Mae miserable. Everything she loved was . . . gone.

and now they needed to find a new home. . .

Alright, looking decent so far, but as you said yourself the profile is incomplete, thus I can't really approve it yet. x3

Even so, here's a few things to keep in mind when you decide to work on this profile again.

- History and Personality sections need to be completed, which you already mentioned. :>

- Her Grandcannon form needs better description, as you mentioned, but you should also describe each of her cannon abilities. Maybe even divide the weapons section into multiple subcategories so it's easier find each weapon.

- And finally, the text is really small in this profile. x3 I mean I personally don't have a problem with it, so I won't require you to change it back to normal, but it'll just make things easier for other people in my opinion.

Good luck with the creation of the rest of this character. Have fun with it and let me know when you've finished. :]

Originally Posted by Quark

Alright, looking decent so far, but as you said yourself the profile is incomplete, thus I can't really approve it yet. x3

Even so, here's a few things to keep in mind when you decide to work on this profile again.

- History and Personality sections need to be completed, which you already mentioned. :>

- Her Grandcannon form needs better description, as you mentioned, but you should also describe each of her cannon abilities. Maybe even divide the weapons section into multiple subcategories so it's easier find each weapon.

- And finally, the text is really small in this profile. x3 I mean I personally don't have a problem with it, so I won't require you to change it back to normal, but it'll just make things easier for other people in my opinion.

Good luck with the creation of the rest of this character. Have fun with it and let me know when you've finished. :]

Hello! I finally finished this up u v u;

A few things I want cleared up before I approve her. It was unclear to me that the Grandcannon and Mae were two different personalities until after a good way through her profile. This confused me because you have her name as Grandcannon and her Alias as Mae, but isn't her name Mae but she just has Grandcannon sealed away inside her (unless I misunderstood something)? I like that you described both of their personalities, though, that helps a lot.

Also, I'm having a hard time picturing her transforming her into a giant cannon. How big is this cannon? How does she move around once she becomes it? From the picture, I'm imagining her transforming into a giant spaceship with a huge gun in its hull, but this isn't quite clarified enough to satisfy my curiosity. Does just one of her arms transform into this cannon, or... what? x]

Originally Posted by Quark

A few things I want cleared up before I approve her. It was unclear to me that the Grandcannon and Mae were two different personalities until after a good way through her profile. This confused me because you have her name as Grandcannon and her Alias as Mae, but isn't her name Mae but she just has Grandcannon sealed away inside her (unless I misunderstood something)? I like that you described both of their personalities, though, that helps a lot.

Also, I'm having a hard time picturing her transforming her into a giant cannon. How big is this cannon? How does she move around once she becomes it? From the picture, I'm imagining her transforming into a giant spaceship with a huge gun in its hull, but this isn't quite clarified enough to satisfy my curiosity. Does just one of her arms transform into this cannon, or... what? x]

Ohh--
i should fix that then and have Mae be the main one and not grandcannon then? Its just I had my other character named Mae as well but she's a completely different character and I didn't really want to get them confused u v u; i guess i can make the title Mae/Grandcannon idk.

and as for the cannon thing, I guess i didn't do too good of a job explaining it since I'm really not the greatest at explaining inhuman things. Basically she changes into a warlike cannon like the ones you see here but its big enough to destroy an entire planet with its main laser which means that it has to be at least a bit bigger than said planet, so lets just say its a bit bigger than earth or something, or well- the cannon form is. The other cannons that she can also form on her normal human form are smaller however.
-- gosh. . .
i can't explain for the life of me, i'm so sorry. . .

I hope i'm not being annoying u v u; I'm just not the greatest at explaining things haha--

Oh no, you're not being annoying at all. x3 I just never imagined that her grandcannon form was as large as you say it is (or... would that be the "true cannon" form?). I was confused because grandcannon was described as being a blond haired girl, but there was also the true cannon form which fires the enormous energy beam. It was unclear to me that these were two different forms.

I think to best avoid confusion you should add another category or two to her Powers/Magic/Skills section that talks about these two different forms. It might look something like this:

Powers/Magic/Skills:

Grandcannon:
As Grandcannon only, she has the power to fire both her main cannon and smaller cannons. Main cannon can only be fired in her true form.

- Main Cannon: Bsically the main cannon is the entire cannon in itself. It is large enough to swallow up a planet in its laser, which is why Grandcannon gained the nickname 'World Destroyer' from Zerai, one of the only people that managed to escape her home planet before it was destroyed. The main cannon is blue tinted on the inside but black as night on the outside.

- Sub-Cannons: Smaller, less deadly cannons. Although they are small enough to summon in her human form, she can also summon a lot of them in her main cannon form. These fire mini-lasers at rapid paces, but can overheat and be destroyed. In cannon form she is quick to replace them, but in human form it takes time.

- Microcannons: Basically can form from the sides of her human form's arms and legs, as well as from the tops of her hands. They are toylike in appearance thus making it hard to tell if they are real until they start shooting. Even though they can be deadly if they hit a person, they are incredibly easy to destroy.

True Form:
Describe here how she transforms into this form. Talk about how big it is in comparison to earth, and also talk about how long it takes for her to transform into this form since... it's quite a big form. You can also talk about the various benefits and drawbacks of this form.

Also... I'm not entirely sure I can approve this character as she is with her true form. Most characters in the BA fight with swords and a few magic spells, but very few (if any) can hope to fight a structure larger than a planet. She'd need to have a fatal flaw or some major drawback for using this form, or maybe she can't accurately target individual people or small targets with her weapons.

The ability to destroy a planet is also very overpowered, but I'll let you have that one since the cannon can only fire once every century. I'd be fine with this form, actually, if she could only turn into this form once every century just like she can only use the main cannon once every hundred years. This, of course, would mean you'd probably only ever have her use her true form once (unless you time lapsed into the distant future), which you might not want.

There's also the matter that if she transforms into the true cannon while on earth, she wouldn't need to fire the weapon to destroy it, she'd already crush the entire world, causing irreparable damage. To me it would only make sense if she transformed into this form while in space, or that rockets come out of her that propel her into space while she's transforming or something. Even then, because this cannon is so large, it would have its own gravity field and pull Earth off its axis, causing damage that way. You could explain this away with technobable, though, and say she has a special anti-gravity generator of some kind that prevents this from happening (then again, I could just be over-complicating this issue xD).

Sorry, this might seem like a lot. I want to help you to get this character approved, though, since she seems pretty cool, but there are a few things that need tweaking.

Originally Posted by Quark

Oh no, you're not being annoying at all. x3 I just never imagined that her grandcannon form was as large as you say it is (or... would that be the "true cannon" form?). I was confused because grandcannon was described as being a blond haired girl, but there was also the true cannon form which fires the enormous energy beam. It was unclear to me that these were two different forms.

I think to best avoid confusion you should add another category or two to her Powers/Magic/Skills section that talks about these two different forms. It might look something like this:



Also... I'm not entirely sure I can approve this character as she is with her true form. Most characters in the BA fight with swords and a few magic spells, but very few (if any) can hope to fight a structure larger than a planet. She'd need to have a fatal flaw or some major drawback for using this form, or maybe she can't accurately target individual people or small targets with her weapons.

The ability to destroy a planet is also very overpowered, but I'll let you have that one since the cannon can only fire once every century. I'd be fine with this form, actually, if she could only turn into this form once every century just like she can only use the main cannon once every hundred years. This, of course, would mean you'd probably only ever have her use her true form once (unless you time lapsed into the distant future), which you might not want.

There's also the matter that if she transforms into the true cannon while on earth, she wouldn't need to fire the weapon to destroy it, she'd already crush the entire world, causing irreparable damage. To me it would only make sense if she transformed into this form while in space, or that rockets come out of her that propel her into space while she's transforming or something. Even then, because this cannon is so large, it would have its own gravity field and pull Earth off its axis, causing damage that way. You could explain this away with technobable, though, and say she has a special anti-gravity generator of some kind that prevents this from happening (then again, I could just be over-complicating this issue xD).

Sorry, this might seem like a lot. I want to help you to get this character approved, though, since she seems pretty cool, but there are a few things that need tweaking.

Yeah, i can understand why you'd say this actually u v u She was originally meant for my story but now that i think of that in BA stuff that would be incredibly unfair- so i can modify her for the BA in that way. I can actually understand the issue with firing the smaller weapons since she has no real targeting system. As for the canon form, I think its best to say that she can change to it only every century too, and that'd make sense for this, and even in the story. It'd prevent people from thinking she's mary-sueish. I must thank you for suggesting that to me too, because it will help me a lot on improving her.

I don't really mind not using the true form in real battles, since she doesn't use it for smaller battles anyways, she saves it for times that she'd really need it. As for the transformation thing, yeah, i should have said that she only transforms in space xD;
Hm, And yeah, I was pretty much assuming that it was pretty obvious she'd have a program that'd be usable as an anti-gravity generator u v u but i should have explained it anyways.

I'll add in some of the stuff, i'll probably have it in by the next time you check it u v u

I'm glad you think its cool actually, I just have a really strange imagination that i need to learn how to limit down a bit xD

Edit: Just fixed up the sections that you told me to and added alot of the flaws in her cannon form.
I hope its good! I really like your criticism by the way u v u I really needed it, thanks so much!

Although she's now approved, this section looks a little cluttered to me. It's a little hard to tell that some of the subsections are attached to the Grandcannon category since they're all underlined in the same way. One way to fix this is to add a hyphen before each of those descriptive categories, then space out the True Form category so it's not bunched in with the others.

Originally Posted by Luna Game

Powers/Magic/Skills:

Grandcannon
As Grandcannon only, she has the power to fire both her main cannon and smaller cannons. Main cannon can only be fired in her true form.
Limits: Grandcannon's smaller cannons can not aim properly at targets on a planet during battles, and she can only turn into and fire the main cannon once a century.
The exact cannons are as follows:
- Main Cannon: Bsically the main cannon is the entire cannon in itself. It is large enough to swallow up a planet in its laser, which is why Grandcannon gained the nickname 'World Destroyer' from Zerai, one of the only people that managed to escape her home planet before it was destroyed. The main cannon is blue tinted on the inside but black as night on the outside.
- Sub-Cannons: Smaller, less deadly cannons. Although they are small enough to summon in her human form, she can also summon a lot of them in her main cannon form. These fire mini-lasers at rapid paces, but can overheat and be destroyed. In cannon form she is quick to replace them, but in human form it takes time.
- Microcannons: Basically can form from the sides of her human form's arms and legs, as well as from the tops of her hands. They are toylike in appearance thus making it hard to tell if they are real until they start shooting. Even though they can be deadly if they hit a person, they are incredibly easy to destroy.

True Form: Grandcannon's true form is a massive spacecannon (although the picture is not an exact reference, its a base design) that is large enough to destroy a planet with its main laser. Grandcannon can only turn into this form and fire the main laser once every century. The end of the cannon's main lazer is about twice the size of the earth, and the cannon itself is equipped with an anti-gravity generator so then it wouldn't pull its target planet off of balance and damage it before hand. Grandcannon can only change into this form in space, and after she changes back if she doesn't manage to do enough damage to her target she is very vulnerable and weak due to transformation. Since her true form is so large compared to her normal self, it takes her at least 20 minute to change completely, which is an incredibly vulnerable time for her. Even though the process of transformation can not be halted, she can get severely damaged. Her true form also lacks a targeting system for the smaller cannons, which was another flaw that she couldn't fix with herself.

But even if you don't fix that, she's still approved. It's more of a preference thing that makes it easier to find information when skimming the profile.

Originally Posted by Quark

Although she's now approved, this section looks a little cluttered to me. It's a little hard to tell that some of the subsections are attached to the Grandcannon category since they're all underlined in the same way. One way to fix this is to add a hyphen before each of those descriptive categories, then space out the True Form category so it's not bunched in with the others.



But even if you don't fix that, she's still approved. It's more of a preference thing that makes it easier to find information when skimming the profile.

Okay, I fixed it u v u
thank you so much~