Valhelm

Name: Valhelm

Alias: N/A

Occupation: Whatever he wants to do at the time.

Age: 320

Apparent age: 27

Gender: Male

Race: Elf

Height: 6 feet, 7 inches

Weight: 180 pounds

Eye color: Half black, Half red.

Hair Color/Style: He has black hair, swept to the left with a few strands hanging over his eye.

General Appearance:

Weapons: He is a master of mixed martial arts. He also has a bow and arrows. The bow is made of black wood with a silver blade at each end that are detachable. The arrows are fletched with raven feathers and it is made of black wood.

Armor: N/A

Carried Possessions: He has a little pouch hanging on his side made of black leather. He carries a few healing herbs and basic supplies in there.

Powers/Magic/Skills:

Fist Flurry: Make his punches faster and stronger, and he is able to see where the weaknesses in his opponent are, so he can deliver them more accurately. If he hit a good place, he might be able to crack the bone.

Power Kick: He jumps up in the air and brings the heel of his foot down. If he misses, he has caused himself a lot of pain, perhaps breaking the bone. If this happens, he could very well crack the ground.

Fire/Ice/Lightning Arrow: Imbues arrow with one of the elements listed.It takes a few seconds for him to charge it up, leaving him vulnerable to attack. If the connection is interrupted, all the energy that was building up would explode outward.

Battle Strengths: He usually likes stealth, making him able to almost move silently. You would have to be listening really hard to hear his footfalls. He is skilled with his bow. He is very agile.

Battle Weaknesses: He has no defense against magic whatsoever. If he is unable to dodge the spell, he can't do anything about it. He also isn't able to take a strong melee hit, or it would knock him down, leaving him almost defenseless.

Other: His voice is silky smooth, with alto tones to it.

Personality: He is very quiet. He is always taking in information and is able to give sound advice when he does open his mouth. He is hard to get angry, but when you do, you better stay out of his path. He is usually the person leaning by the wall, listening for information. He knows how to stay out of trouble, but also knows how to get into it. He has a hard pressed aura, and it is very easy to lose track of him in a room or crowd.

Likes: Archery, Martial Arts, and quiet places.

Dislikes: Sea food, Wrestling, Loud noises.

Virtues: Easy going and quiet.

Vices: Short fuse and fiery temper.

History: Valhelm grew up in the 'suburbs' of the forest, with a lot of space and piece and quiet. His father was an old military veteran, and taught him how to use a bow effectively. When he was a young age of 125, orcs attacked his small village and burnt it to the ground. He, and his friend Zegre were the only ones to escape. They moved closer to the center of the forest, and he lived there for 75 years.

The forest of the elves was overpopulated. To much noise and people, for Valhelm. He left the forest when he was 200, and he has a lot of life to live. When he got to the outlying village, he bought himself a house on the edge of town. In the house, he found the bow with a note saying: This bow is now yours. No one had signed the note, and nobody had known the previous owners. He decided to keep the bow.

The next morning, he went into town for some food. He bought the food and went down a side street. He passed a small dojo. While watching through the window, the sensei cam out and asked, "Do you want to join, or are you going to stand out here all day?" Valhelm said yes, and he started doing the special mix of martial arts.

He excelled, and in 5 years, he had the black belt, which no one had ever gotten while the sensei had taught

*BUMP!!!* Is anyone going to check this?

His skills are too vague. Why can he only use the kick once in a battle? How powerful is it, and the punches? Can they break through rock? Or just knock a human male back? How strong are the elemental arrows and how does he imbue them with the power? How long does it take to do so? He also needs a few more weaknesses to balance out his strengths. Does he perhaps have bad stamina, and that's why he can only use his skills sparingly?

I'd also like to see the personality section fleshed out more. You haven't told us much.

After you make these first edits, let me know and I'll have another look and see what more there is to work on.

I thought I better get him done before you leave, so here he is.

How fast and strong are his fist flurry punches?

Also, you need a little more in personality.

And more in history, like how he grew up/his parents/his childhood, etc.

Done. Thanks for taking over.

Looks okay enough. Could use more personality and history, but... alright. Approved