Character: Kathis Drail

Name: Kathis Drail

Age: 17

Race: Half-Elf, Half-Human

Sex: Male

Hair: Black, Long and Messy.

Eyes: Hazel

Weight: 162 pounds

Height: 5 Feet 8 Inches

Weapon: Polished Steel Shortsword, about 3 and a Half feet long, Covered in Strange, Glowing runes in a Mysterious Language only mages can understand, but somewhat resemble Greek Writing. When he is not using it, he keeps it in a special pocket under his robe. The glyphs allow him to channel and focus his magic power, much in the same way as a wand or staff.

Armor: Armor? What Armor? All I have are Robes

Strengths: Great intelligence, affording him Great Tactics and Planning, as well as knowlege of the strengths and weaknesses of most monsters. He also posesses Large Ammounts of Skill in Combat Magic, which more or less makes up for his lack of Physical prowess

Weakness: Lack of Athletic Skill/Strength, meaning he's not that fast or resilient to damage, so magic will have to form the bulk of his defence. It also means that, even though he has a pointy sword, he can't hit you very hard with it. He's also is very impatient, wanting to do everything as quick as possible, meaning he can be very disorganized in battle, and let his enemies sneak blows in through the confusion.

Skills/Magic: Skilled in reading Aincent/Arcane Languages IE scrolls, inscriptions,tablets ETC, As well as Great skill in Arcane, Lightning and Ice Magic. He uses Ice as a Defensive magic, creating all manner of walls, shields and cages. Nothing ever stopped him from flinging the odd shard. His Arcane magic is usually a utility, conjuring Swords or Arrows out of it, temporarily increasing his speed or strength ETC. Lightning forms the basis of his offensive, either on its own or mixed with the other two magics. However, he also does use it to create Cages as an effective distraction while he catches his breath.

Appearance: Somewhat Angular face, small Nose, Medium-Large Eyes, slightly out-turned ears, Medium-Large mouth, Red Lips, Slightly Tanned skin, and Linen-Wool Robe with Red Lining, and Reddish-Brown Leather Belt.

Personality: It may be hard to tell if he has one, he very rarely shows his emotions even to friends but when he does, it's bound to be to the extremes.

Biography: He was born at the dawn of a Brutal civil war, and spent 10 long, painful years survivng in the crossfire between many tiny groups. At the age of 11, his mother sent him away to a magic Academy in the distant Kingdom of Tradhia, in an attempt to remove him from the war, mere weeks before her own life was taken. He however had no knowlege of this, and continued his life unaware. After 7 years , he retured to his homeland, or ruins of his homeland, to find that his family, his home, and all he knew, had been destroyed. With knowlege of this, he was driven to the verge of madness, kept sane only by his instruction in magic, he decided to travel the lands ,alone seeking his purpose and aincent knowlenge. Eventually, he happenned upon the Battle Arena, and decided to stay as a temporary repreive, and to learn the magic of its competiters.
I'm gonna have to finish this 2morrow, but see how it's going so far.

Greetings and good tidings to you, Jedi. I will be your Councillor for the day. You may call me Shetani. ;3

Now then, your character is temporarily DENIED. This means you're not allowed to play with him yet, but you still have the chance to rework his profile until it fits our standards and can be approved.

First thing first. I'd like you to edit your character's profile so that only the various sections are bolded. Instead of "Name: Kathis Drail" I want it to be "Name: Kathis Drail" and so on, alright? Makes it easier to read.

Let's go through the profile then

Originally Posted by Jedi Of Nayru

Name: Kathis Drail

Age: 17

Race: Half-Elf

I'm assuming the other half is human. You could specify, but it's not needed. He is a bit young, but as long as he has strengths and weaknesses matching his age, that should be fine.

Weapon: Shortsword(Covered in Magic Enhancing Glyphs)

Please leave more description of his weapon. What does it look like, what does the glyphs look like, how does he wear it, and so on? Also, since it has magical glyphs on it, I can only assume it has some sort of magic properties to it. Please describe those as well.

Strengths: Great intelligence and Magic Skill

You'll need to expand on this section. How does his great intelligence help him in battle? While the meat of his magic skills should go in the Skill section, you should mention a bit of how they help him as well. While you by no means have to stack strength after strength on your character, I'd like to see a bit more of them here as well.

Weakness: Lack of Athletic Skill/Strength

Pretty much the same as Strengths, you'll need to expand on this. Write more about the weakness you've stated here, and add a few more of them.

Skills/Magic: Skilled in reading Aincent/Arcane Languages, as well as Great skill in Arcane, Lightning and Ice Magic.

I feel I might be repeating myself a bit here, but again, expand! ^^;
You will have to describe his magic skills a bit more, I'm afraid. What kind of magic can he wield, how does it work, limits and eventual side effects. Take a look at some of the approved characters around for some inspiration on what to do.
You'll also have to expand on his skills in various languages. While there's no need for you to name every language he can read, it'd be nice if you could mention at least one or a few and how skilled he is in them. Don't overdo it with languages, though. ;3

Personality: It may be hard to tell if he has one, he very rarely shows his emotions even to friends but when he does, it's bound to be to the extremes.

Flesh this out, please. If you need ideas of what to put here, take a look at the Character guidelines thread for some questions you can answer.

Biography: He was born at the dawn of a Brutal civil war, and spent 10 long, painful years survivng in the crossfire between many tiny groups. At the age of 11, his mother sent him away to a magic Academy in the distant Kingdom of Tradhia, in an attempt to remove him from the war, mere weeks before her own life was taken. He however had no knowlege of this, and continued his life unaware. After 7 years , he retured to his homeland, or ruins of his homeland, to find that his family, his home, and all he knew, had been destroyed. With knowlege of this, he was driven to the verge of madness, kept sane only by his instruction in magic, he decided to travel the lands ,alone seeking his purpose and aincent knowlenge. Eventually, he happenned upon the Battle Arena, and decided to stay as a temporary repreive, and to learn the magic of its competiters.

Sorry if my Bio is long, i just cant find any other way to boil it down.

Hello, I'm a broken record. X3 You're very welcome to write more, here too. Compared to some of the fellows living here, your Kath has a very short bio. ;3 Don't be afraid to go crazy, very few players are told to shorten their character profiles.

Just post in this thread when you've done the changes requested and I'll take another look. :] Good luck!

Aw Damm. I'll edit it. The original Bio was REALLY long, but i was worried you(The Counciler) would find it too long and deny me.

No worries, just write as much as you want and then post in this thread so I'll know you've edited. To make it easier for the both of us, please don't reply before all the edits are done, as I assume you've changed stuff when there's a post in here. ;3