Jericho Baen

Name:Jericho Baen

Age:22

Race:Genetically Altered Human

Sex:Male

Hair:Tomato-red, spiked

Eyes:Completely green, including the whites. Pupil is black and spiral-shaped.

Weight:165 lbs

Height:6' 1"

Weapon:For use against opponents without abilities, Jericho can create a sword out of spare nanites in his armor. The sword is one-handed, with a 29" blade, and is entirely gray in color. The cross guard is straight, with no decoration. He can keep the sword for up to 15 minutes if his armor is slightly damaged, but the length of time decreases as his armor takes more damage.

Armor:Jericho wears the Adje, a suit made of nanites that can slowly repair itself, usually within thirty minutes. The nanites can "eat" materials from his surroundings to create more nanites, which replace damaged ones. When an object hits the suit, the nanites bunch together at the impact site to soften the blow. The suit is a dark grey color, and covers all but his head and hands. Being made out of trillions of tiny machines hooked together, it is only moderately heavy (20-25 lbs), and acts much like elastic.

Strengths:Jericho is especially good at inventing strategies that match his current ability. He can also combine several weaker abilities to create unique powers. His genetic engineering enables him to take more punishment than normal humans. His eyes enable him to see in the dark, to the point where dark rooms are moderately lit. He has slightly enhanced strength, being able to lift at least 400 lbs. Jericho has been trained in several styles of swordplay, and while not a master at it, he can hold his own against most opponents.

Weakness:If he is exposed to very bright light, his vision takes longer than normal to recover. His stealth is virtually nonexistent, and his multicolored skin causes him to stand out in public. His skin slows him down when he runs, because of the less-flexible scar tissue.

Skills:Jericho has the ability to copy almost any ability he sees in use. He cannot copy abilities he does not see in use, and he must know that an ability is in use. He must be within 100 feet of the original user to copy an ability. His eyes analyze the ability, and send signals to the brain, which sends the signals necessary to manipulate his body to reproduce it. This process usually takes two minutes.

Depending on the strength of the ability, he can hold on to it for longer (weak-15 minutes, strong-3 minutes). He can copy two weak abilities and hold onto them for 7 minutes. His control over the ability is limited by the original owner's control. If he tries to copy abilities that are extremely powerful, he is stunned. Additionaly, if he copies a creature whose physiology is very different from his, he experiences crippling pain.

He can copy most superpowers, such as super speed, super strength, etc. During the experiment trace amounts of magic were infused into his body. They remain dormant until he copies an ability involving magic. This enables him to use most basic forms of magic. He can also copy bodily adaptations (such as extra senses, additional body parts), as long as the original user is human.

Appearance:Jericho's hair is an odd, tomato-colored red, and is usually worn in large spikes. His eyes are completely green, the whites being a darker shade than the iris. His pupils are spiral shaped, and spin when he is copying an ability. His skin is covered with scars from stitches, and is in patches of different colors. He wears a dark green shirt, jeans, and any shoes he can find.

Personality:
Jericho is what most people would call antagonistic. He will pick a fight with anything or anyone who annoys him, and often will start fights out of boredom. However, if he sees that an opponent is too strong he will attempt to back out of the fight. He is also a bit of a show off when he is starting a battle. His showboating often gets him in trouble, though.

Jericho is not opposed to taking money for fighting people, but he will not attack those who can't defend themselves. He often will stop a crime for kicks, but he can't be relied upon to do so. Jericho does not like being called a "hero," because it is "just not my thing."

Jericho does not try to hide his strange appearance, instead flaunting it. He always makes a point of looking people in the eyes when he talks to them, since his odd eye color disturbs most people.

His family is a touchy subject for him, and he will often attack anybody who does not leave it alone. His attitude makes it hard for anyone to even want to know him, and he prefers it that way. He prefers travelling alone, and often will leave fellow travelers while they are sleeping.

Biography:
Jericho Baen was born to Amadeus Baen, owner of Baen Industries, the largest megacorporation in their universe. In order to protect his son, Amadeus sent Jericho to live with relatives who would protect him from any assasination or kidnapping attempts. Growing up in remote Northern Canada, Jericho was taught how to defend himself against attack, and learned the almost extinct art of swordplay.

At the age of fifteen, he rejoined his family, having learned all he could from his relatives. Only two weeks after returning, he foiled a kidnapping attempt on his father. Seeing how strong his son was, Amadeus did something unexpected; he made Jericho his bodyguard.

Jericho worked as his father's bodygaurd for four years, until one day when a rocket was launched into his father's office through a window. Amadeus was just leaving the room, so he escaped unscathed. Jericho was not so lucky. He had survived the explosion, but was horribly burned.

After one year of special treatment by his father's medical staff, it was determined that unless something drastic was done, Jericho would be unable to move independantly. His father's scientists had just completed a method of genetic manipulation, so Jericho underwent the treatment.
The results were perfect, the only side effect being his multicolored skin. Jericho was offered the job of bodyguard back, but declined and left his family. He travelled the world, eventually discovering his abilities.

Two years after he left, Jericho recieved word from his father. Amadeus's scientist had discovered a wrinkle in space time. Returning home, Jericho volunteered to explore it. He was outfitted with his nanite suit, and entered the ripple, sending him on a continuing journey from universe to universe.

Hello, Baen. I'm Shetani, and I'll be your councillor today. Before I go through your character I have to ask you to clean it up a little. Put it in paragraphs, and don't be afraid to have some space between one section and the next. A huge wall of text is more taxing on the eyes, you see. Post here once you've done that, and we'll get down to the approving part.

Thanks for the advice. I went back and edited. Hope that it's better this time.

Thank you muchly. :3 Now we'll get down to the fun stuff! ^-^

Originally Posted by Jericho Baen

Name:Jericho Baen

Age:22

Race:Genetically Altered Human

Sex:Male

Hair:Tomato-red, spiked

Eyes:Completely green, including the whites. Pupil is spiral-shaped.

Spiffy. What's the color of his pupils though? :3 Or are they simply black?

Weapon:For use against opponents without abilities, Jericho can create a sword out of spare nanites in his armor.

Could you describe this weapon to us? How big is it, what does it look like, stuff like that. Also, how long can he keep it shaped like a sword, if he forms it out of his armor?

Armor:Jericho wears the Adje, a suit made of nanites that can slowly repair itself, usually within thirty minutes. The suit can provide protection from extreme heat or cold, soften physical blows, and also enhance his copying ability.

I'd like some appearance description of the armor as well. :] Bit more on how it works, and also what it looks like. How much of him does it protect? How heavy is it? Is it elastic or does it hinder movement in any way?

Strengths: Jericho is especially good at inventing strategies that match his current ability. He can also combine several weaker abilities to create unique powers. His genetic engineering enables him to take more punishment than normal humans. His eyes enable him to see in the dark, and see things most others are unable to.

Please add some strengths applied to him when he hasn't copied an ability. Taking more punishment is one strength, dark vision as well. How well can he see in the darkness? Like it's the middle of a sunny day, or intra-vision? Would be nice to know.

Weakness:If he tries to copy abilities that are extremely powerful, he is stunned. Additionaly, if he copies a creature whose physiology is very different from his, he experiences crippling pain. He is unable to copy some of the more exotic forms of magic, and cannot copy abilities granted by items at all. If he is exposed to very bright light, his vision takes longer than normal to recover.His stealth is virtually nonexistent, and his multicolored skin causes him to stand out in public. His skin also makes it hard to run fast, as it is not entirely the same skin.

Most of these weaknesses should go under Skills. Try to come up with a few that doesn't relate directly to his ability as well. Also, I'm not sure I understand that last sentence, so if you could reword it a bit, that'd be great. :]

Skills:Jericho has the ability to copy almost any ability he sees in use. If he makes eye contact with a person, he can paralyze them temporarily. He has slightly enhanced strength, being able to lift at least 400 lbs.

Please describe this ability more thorougly. How does it work? How fast can he copy an ability, and for how long can he hold it? How many abilities can he copy at one time? What are the limits of his ability? Are there any side-effects of copying? Can he master the new abilities right away, or does he need to learn how to use them first? How is his vision paralyzing?

The enhanced strength should probably go under strengths, seeing how it seems like it's something he possesses at all times. :]

Appearance:Jericho has the appearance of an experienced fighter. His hair is an odd, tomato-colored red, and is usually worn in large spikes. His eyes are completely green, the whites being a darker shade than the iris. His pupils are spiral shaped, and spin when he is copying an ability. His skin is covered with scars from stitches, and is in patches of different colors. He wears a dark green shirt, jeans, and any shoes he can find.

Uhm, what does an experienced fighter look like? Please expand on this as there are many ways an "experienced fighter" could look like. :3

I really like the patchy skin. ^^ I'm gonna call him Patches.

Otherwise, things look good. It's not much you have to fix, mostly expanding on stuff, so I have no doubt in my mind that Patches will run around fighting people soon enough. :3

I've completed those revisions you suggested. Hope I did good. Thanks Shetani.

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Very good on the edits, you've improved on all the points I brought up. :3 Gold star on that. I am curious on how his ability works though. Seeing how he's a creature made from science, how does his body manage to channel magic, once the ability is copied? What, for that matter, constitutes as an ability to copy? Does he have to be within a certain range to copy, or is it enough if he sees the original user, no matter how far away?

Okay, done. I hope that it makes sense.

Yep, sounds good enough. :3