Lily

So, instead of using one of my already finished character profiles that haven't yet been posted here, I went with a new character. And yes, I got the idea from the Sober Drunk RP.


Name: Lily
Age: 22
Gender: Female
Race: Beorc (human)
Race Description: The beorc are the human race in the Fire Emblem series, whose name means “being of wisdom.” They’re a lot like Zelda’s Hylians in the fact that they can use magic and weapons that have magic or special properties to them. The only difference is that beorc have rounded ears instead of pointed.
Eye Color: Dark purple
Hair Color: Lavender
Height: 5’7”
Weight: 125 lbs

Class: Arch Sage (the highest and most skilled mage class)

Family: Raela (Sister)

Relationship Status: Lily is in love with Zarek, but he hasn’t (yet) returned her affections.

Weapon: Only magic.

Armor: None.

Strengths: Lily’s obvious biggest strength is against other magic users. She often applies the trinity of magic to her battle strategy, which is how each type of magic fairs against another. Fire is strong against wind, wind is strong against thunder, and thunder is strong against fire. Any of these types of magic are strong against light magic (or at least when Lily uses them). Lily's staves can give herself and her allies the advantage in battle as well (explained in magic/skills section). Her spells are also effective against different animals. Her fire spells work well against felines, canines, and other furry creatures of the like. The wind spells do a lot of damage to any birds while the thunder ones are strongest against dragons and other reptilian creatures. She can attack fast an accurately as well.

Weaknesses: Lily wears no armor, so she cannot take too many hits. Some of her spells also take a little while longer to activate than others, namely the Meteor spell, and that could potentially leave her wide open for a hit. Also, because she uses all three forms of magic from the trinity of magic, she is weak to all three as well. If Lily is using fire magic during one moment, thunder magic is her weakness. If she’s using thunder magic, wind magic becomes her weakness and so on. Also, because her staves are not used for attacking, she can't attack and use a staff at the same time. Her largest weakness is dark magic (this is due to the second trinity of magic that says fire, thunder, and wind are strong against light, light is strong against dark, and dark is strong against fire, thunder, and wind).

Skills/Magic: Lily, being an Arch Sage, uses three different forms of magic and can also use magic staves that aren't used for physical attacking, but are also magic. These staves are each 3 ft long with shiny orbs at the tips. Lily's types of magic include Fire, thunder, and wind. She is most proficient in fire magic, but does very well with the other two as well. Lily has at her disposal four fire magic spells, three thunder spells, and three wind spells. Normally these are all different tomes, but Lily has remembered each one by heart and usually only carries a single tome that has each spell in it in case she does forget. Some are more powerful than others. Each one can be used from up to 50 ft away from the target except for Meteor. All are ranged attacks. Only one, Tornado, can hit multiple opponents at once. All of the arc and el spells can be cast as often as Lily wants. The el spells take only a few seconds to cast while the arc spells take up to ten seconds. Each spell is cast from Lily's front. None can do a one hit knock out unless the target is just that weak as well as weak to the type of magic Lily is using (such as fire against a not so strong cat warrior).

Fire Magic

• Elfire: A basic strong blast of fire that appears in front of the target and then strikes. The blast is about the size of a van. Can deal different amounts of damage depending on the target. For furry beasts, it does major damage. For other targets, it does a fair amount of damage. For thunder magic users, it does only 3/4 of the amount it would normally do.
• Arcfire: The strongest of the three arc spells, this spell is an even stronger blast of fire than Elfire. It is basically the same thing except the fire blast is twice the size and more powerful. Can do twice the damage Elfire does with the same other damage limits on certain targets tacked on.
• Bolganone: This spell is a powerful volcanic eruption from the ground. A circle of flames bursts up around the target. It takes 15 seconds to cast, and it’s not extremely accurate. It does the same damage as Arcfire with the same damage limits on certain targets.
• Meteor: As the name suggests, Lily sends a flaming meteor down on her opponent. This is the only spell she can use from a very far distance (up to 200 ft from the target), so it is the least accurate spell she has. Takes a few seconds to cast. Damage is the same as Elfire with the same damage limits on certain targets.

Thunder Magic:

• Elthunder: A basic strong blast of lightning. The 8ft long bolt appears above the target and then strikes. Does fair damage to most targets. Wind magic users take only 3/4 the normal damage while dragons and other reptilian creatures take twice the damage.
• Arcthunder: A stronger blast of lightning with three 8ft long bolts striking the target from above. Does twice as much damage as Elthunder normally, but with the same damage limitations on certain targets.
• Thoron: This spell is the most accurate Lily has, and it is also stronger than its fire counterpart, Bolganone. Here, powerful lightning bolts appear around the target and strike. Each bolt is 5ft long. Takes 15 seconds to cast.

Wind Magic:

• Elwind: A basic strong blast of wind, about the size of a car. Appears around the target and strikes. Does a fair amount of damage. Fire magic users take 3/4 the normal damage while birds take twice as much.
• Arcwind: A stronger blast of wind that is twice the size of Elwind. Does twice the normal damage with the same damage limitations on certain targets.
• Tornado: As the name says, Lily conjures up a small tornado with this spell. It is the size of a bus. It’s not as accurate as its thunder counterpart Thoron, but more accurate than Bolganone. It’s weaker than both and does a damage level between Arcwind and Elwind. Damage limitations on certain targets are also the same.

Staves:

• Silence: This staff can prevent the opponent from using staves or magic themselves. It wears off after a little while, however. When Lily uses it, she simply holds it out in front of her and the orb on the tip glows. The target glows as well. Spell lasts half an hour.
• Physic: A long range healing staff. It also heals Lily a little bit every twenty minutes whenever she’s carrying it in her hand. She uses it the same way as the Silence staff and the effectiveness of the healing always heals the target completely. The cost of using either staff is being unable to attack. Physic staves also have the downside of only being able to heal allies. Lily can't really use it at all if she's in a one on one battle.

Other Skills:

• Flare: A spell skill that can make the opponent weaker than usual to magic attacks. It is the mastery skill of Arch Sages. It doesn't do any damage to the target. They only glow for a split second when Lily casts it. Lily only uses it when she really needs to and isn’t quite proficient with it yet.
• Adept: This spell skill allows Lily to make two consecutive attacks. Meaning, although she only does the requirement for one strike, the spell she uses will strike twice in a row instead and render the target unable to attack back between strikes. She normally uses it as a finisher.

Appearance: Lily is rather attractive. She has long lavender hair set in two thick braids trailing halfway down her back. She has medium-sized dark purple eyes and a normal-sized mouth. Her nose is small and fine. Her skin is somewhat pale. She is 5'7" tall and not very heavy. Her figure is slim, but not all of it is seen due to her long pinkish purple cloak. The cloak does not have a hood, and trailing behind it is a long, fancy sash which is worn around the neck. This sash is a lighter purple color with lines that are a darker purple. Lily’s undershirt is also a light purple. She also wears a darker purple skirt that reaches down to her ankles with lavender heeled shoes to match her hair. The skirt reveals almost all of Lily’s right leg and covers all of her left. It is attached to her body by a gold belt. On her hands are matching lavender gloves. She also has a bag hidden beneath her cloak which carries her staves, tome, and other items. Lily also wears a sapphire necklace with a silver colored chain.

Carried Items/Accessories:

• Vulnerary: A basic and common healing powder. Has limited uses (up to eight times per vulnerary). It comes in a hand-sized golden pouch. Can heal only small wounds and cuts. Has no smell.
• Elixir: A rarer healing medicine that does an even better job than vulneraries, but is even more limited (five uses per elixir). Lily has these when vulneraries aren’t enough since she’s so vulnerable to physical attacks. It is a blue potion drink in a hand-sized bottle. Can heal large wounds, but isn't quite as effective as a Physic staff. Smells sweet, but tastes like water.

Personality: Lily is very optimistic and it shows in her happy nature. She doesn’t particularly like to fight, but she is willing to when her family, friends, or home is in danger. She also loves animals and is very reluctant to battle against them. At times, Lily can also be a bit hyper since she had grown out of a truly hyper nature she had as a teenager. Overall, she can be a little stubborn and a bit too happy, as well as kind and caring. She can also be rather flirtatious, especially around Zarek, whom she loves and cares about more than anyone. Her voice is rather loud and due to this she’s been known to embarrass her friends by mistake, including Zarek. She is concise to her point whenever getting into battles and is always serious and focused on her goals. Surprisingly, even though her friends know of the slight hyperness Lily may have, she often has a mature tone when speaking to rivals and enemies.

Lily thinks of herself as the mighty Lavender Mage due to her hair and how much purple she wears. She doesn't have any particular hobbies or interests besides her magic and Zarek. She normally treats people with respect unless they become her enemy. While she doesn't think everyone will have good in them somewhere, she usually tries her best to find some in anyone she meets. Her strongest interest is magic (and men) while she loathes messy habits. She always likes to be clean.

Bio: Lily is originally from the village of Kolah, a small town in the nation of Talgria on the continent of Altarais (a place I made up myself). She is a few years younger than her sister, Raela, but has quite an opposing personality. While Raela was serious, somewhat less stubborn, and very mature, Lily was immature, more stubborn, and very cheery. She took up fire magic lessons from a local mage so she could help out Raela, who was a Cleric (female healer who can also use a sword called Florete) at the time. They were part of the village militia along with their parents.

Nothing very exciting ever happened in their village except for the occasional theft or small attack the militia had to deal with. Some even said it was quite a boring town that needed more action. Action was what they got when one day a large squad of bandits attacked the village and took it over as a headquarters since it was not very far from the Talgrian border which had been shared by the neighboring country of Eraghoa. They claimed to need the area as a head-off point for an enemy army and ran a lot of people out of their homes. Raela and Lily both fought back along with the rest of the militia, but it was no use. The bandits, who were part of an organization known as the Brigade Plague, were too strong. Raela and Lily’s mother fell to the hands of the enemy, and their father had disappeared entirely.

Having no choice but to flee their home, both sisters made their way to the Forest of Hope, which the Talgria-Eraghoa border ran right through. However, the two had gotten very lost trying to find their way across the border into the wolf laguz nation for safety and wandered for hours and hours, only surviving on the natural foods to be found there. It was a hard life, but the two were able to get in some training together with their weapons, Lily a Fire Mage while Raela was still a Cleric.

One day, while the two were nearly out of food once again and went to go hunt, they came upon a battle occurring in the middle of the forest. Bandits, easily recognizable as members of the Brigade Plague, were fighting a group of varied warriors. One of them in particular had struck a surprising reaction out of both Raela and Lily. He was a blue haired man wearing a green headband and red cape, wielding a great sword in battle against the enemy. This man could be none other than Ike, a hero they had heard stories about in their village fairly recently. The sisters watched as Ike’s group easily defeated their opponents.

When the battle was over, Raela and Lily asked Ike’s group if they were going to Eraghoa and wondered if they could help them get there as well. Accepting them in the group, Ike and his companion, a mercenary named Azura, led the sisters to Eraghoa.

The entire group had been on a mission to find a route to Aracion, the capital city of Talgria to get some information from the King about Azura and her (as well as a pendant she wore around her neck) being the main target of the Brigade Plague. The King of Eraghoa, Rothgar, had helped them to find that route, but before they could resume their journey, Ike had become severely ill due to a very deadly poison, leaving him extremely weak and bedridden. This was found to be caused by the Brigade Plague as well. A trip to the beorc nation to the north, Cilae, was necessary to save the legendary hero’s life, as the herons (a laguz tribe with the ability to sing galdrar of all kinds) lived much too far away to make it to the dying Ike in time.

Eventually, after many battles and hardships to help the mercenary Azura get to Aracion and eventually gain her title as Lady of Elhorhi (a new earldom of Talgria) and later supreme commander of a group of allied forces, Raela and Lily became part of an army that had devoted themselves to defeating the enemy nation of Melora and vanquishing a darkness they had released upon the entire continent. Along the way, they met Zarek, who was a traveling Fighter at the time looking to explore and battle.

It didn’t take long for Lily to fall for him and begin to “chase” him during the war when he joined the army. Zarek was embarrassed and some of the allied soldiers teased him about it, Lily found out, but at the time, she did little about it. After the war had finally ended and Altarais saved from Melora’s evil plot, there was a big celebration, devoted to not only Lady Azura, but Ike, his friends from his homeland of Tellius, and every soldier who played a role in saving Altarais. Lily taught Zarek how to dance to the music being played, and it was a bit of a surprise that he had agreed to be her partner. From then on, Lily believed he actually did love her back, but was never sure.

When the celebration was finally over, Lily decided to part ways with her sister and Zarek to do exactly what Zarek had inspired her to do: explore and battle. She wanted to become stronger not only for him, but for Raela and the new friends she’d made as well. Lily then received her necklace from her sister and continues her goal today, hoping to one day meet Zarek again to apologize for her previous behavior towards and about him.

Good evening, Crystal. As per request and previous dibbage, I shall be assisting you with this character's approval process. And, since you are an 8-month veteran of the EH, I'll be using the same standards I'd expect of any 8-month vet for this process. So then, let's get started, shall we?

Name: Lily
Age: 22
Gender: Female
Race: Beorc (human)
Race Description: The beorc are the human race in the Fire Emblem series, whose name means “being of wisdom.” They’re a lot like Zelda’s Hylians in the fact that they can use magic and weapons that have magic or special properties to them. The only difference is that beorc have rounded ears instead of pointed.
Eye Color: Dark purple
Hair Color: Lavender
Height: 5’7”
Weight: 125 lbs

Fancy.

Class: Arch Sage

Not quite as fancy, since real people don't have classes in the sense that you seem to be using, so it would be a good point of reference if you also happened to include what her 'class' means.

Family: Raela (Sister)

Relationship Status: Lily is in love with Zarek, but he hasn’t (yet) returned her affections.

Not my cup of tea, but fine for the course.

Weapon: Lily, being an Arch Sage, uses three different forms of magic and can also use staves. Fire, thunder, and wind. She is most proficient in fire magic, but does very well with the other two as well. Lily has at her disposal four fire magic spells, three thunder spells, and three wind spells. Normally these are all different tomes, but Lily has remembered each one by heart and usually only carries a single tome that has each spell in it in case she does forget. Some are more powerful than others.

Hmm. Okay, the stuff about magic? Leave that in her skills/magic section. If she doesn't have those other weapons, don't include them. Now, about those staves. Could you please describe them for me? Length, material, durability, things that make them special, that sort of thing.

Armor: None.

Have it your way.

Strengths: Lily’s obvious biggest strength is against other magic users. She also memorizes the trinity of magic, which is similar to the weapons triangle of swords over axes, axes over lances, lances over swords. Wind magic beats thunder magic, thunder magic beats fire magic, and fire magic beats wind magic. Light magic and dark magic don’t apply here. Lily is also strong against laguz (shape-shifting half breeds who change into different animals to fight) and other creatures of similar nature. Her fire magic works well against feline and canine beasts, her thunder magic is good against dragons and other lizards, and wind is effective against birds. She can also use one of her spells to attack from a huge distance. All her spells can be used from a distance for indirect hits. Lily is also good at attacking fast and accurately. Her movement speed is average for someone her age and height. She has the ability to heal her allies with her Physic staff as well.

There are several issues with this single paragraph, and while they don't normally begin with "this should be two paragraphs," they do include it.

The EH is not a role-playing video game. Since it isn't, it's difficult to qualify many of the inherent statements herein, without also stating how they apply to Lily, how they apply to the world around her, and so forth. If these rules apply only to her, then that's okay, but you'll need to explain how it works out that her rules apply only to her and not to the people that she's interacting with. If it doesn't, you'll probably need to reconstruct this entire set of strengths so that it can apply to other characters who do not hail from the same ruleset universe as Lily. If you'd like to go that route, I have some ideas to help you with that. The core issue here is that you would need to explain what you mean by phrases like "wind beats thunder" and "axes over lances." And what does it mean that her various magics are effective against those various types of creatures? If you want to take the time to explain all of this, then be my guest, but it will probably be easier to just rework these statements so that they work in a more world-inclusive fashion.

You said that she can use her spells from a distance. That's fine, but it would be best to put those things under your skills/magic section. You'll also need to define what those distances are, and what you mean by "indirect hit."

If she's average at something, that's not really a strength. And, her abilities (such as healing) should go in her skills/magic section. If she's particularly good at healing, then that would be something you'd want to put here, but not that she can do it.

Weaknesses: Lily wears no armor, so she is easily vulnerable to swords, axes, lances, bullets, arrows, and other weapons of the like. Her defense isn’t very good. Some of her spells also take a little while longer to activate than others, namely the Meteor spell, and that could potentially leave her wide open for a hit. Also, because she uses all three forms of magic from the trinity of magic, she is weak to all three as well. If Lily is using fire magic during one moment, thunder magic is her weakness. If she’s using thunder magic, wind magic becomes her weakness and so on. She also obviously can’t use a staff and magic spell at the same time, so if she has one of her staves handy, she can’t attack. Lily’s skill with staves isn’t as good as her magic.

Vulnerability to the things that hurt people is not a weakness. What do you mean by "her defense isn't very good"? Again, it sounds like you're trying to handle the EH like a video game, and that's not applicable here.

The parts about her spells should be listed in her skills/magic section, although it would be fine to say that some of her spells leave her less able to defend herself adequately.

It is not obvious that she cannot use a staff and a spell at the same time, but that is good to know. I thought that her staves were weapons, though? How can she not attack someone if she's using a staff?

Skills/Magic: Lily knows a total of ten spells. Four fire, three wind, and three thunder. She also has two staves.

Okay, edit in the stuff from before that I've been talking about, and that should be alright for now.

I'm afraid I haven't got the mental power to keep doing this for now. So, once you've got the stuff I've gone over taken care of, let me know and we'll move on to the other four sections of the profile.

You never just right out approve a character, do you?

Well, that's a sign of a good character approver if you ask me. ;D

Originally Posted by Drammor

And, since you are an 8-month veteran of the EH, I'll be using the same standards I'd expect of any 8-month vet for this process.

Actually, I've been in the EH for a few years. I was just never extremely active.

Originally Posted by Drammor

Not quite as fancy, since real people don't have classes in the sense that you seem to be using, so it would be a good point of reference if you also happened to include what her 'class' means.

This is a Fire Emblem fan character though and they do have classes. But I'll explain it. :]

Originally Posted by Drammor

Hmm. Okay, the stuff about magic? Leave that in her skills/magic section. If she doesn't have those other weapons, don't include them.

What other weapons? :/

Originally Posted by Drammor

Now, about those staves. Could you please describe them for me? Length, material, durability, things that make them special, that sort of thing.

Explained in magic/skills, since these staves are magic staves, not the kind used for physical attacks.

Originally Posted by Drammor

The EH is not a role-playing video game. Since it isn't, it's difficult to qualify many of the inherent statements herein, without also stating how they apply to Lily, how they apply to the world around her, and so forth. If these rules apply only to her, then that's okay, but you'll need to explain how it works out that her rules apply only to her and not to the people that she's interacting with. If it doesn't, you'll probably need to reconstruct this entire set of strengths so that it can apply to other characters who do not hail from the same ruleset universe as Lily. If you'd like to go that route, I have some ideas to help you with that. The core issue here is that you would need to explain what you mean by phrases like "wind beats thunder" and "axes over lances." And what does it mean that her various magics are effective against those various types of creatures? If you want to take the time to explain all of this, then be my guest, but it will probably be easier to just rework these statements so that they work in a more world-inclusive fashion.

Fair enough, though I never intentionally try to make the EH look like a video game...

Originally Posted by Drammor

You said that she can use her spells from a distance. That's fine, but it would be best to put those things under your skills/magic section. You'll also need to define what those distances are, and what you mean by "indirect hit."

You don't know what an indirect hit is? I thought anyone would know that it's attacking a person from a distance, not right on up close.

Originally Posted by Drammor

If she's average at something, that's not really a strength. And, her abilities (such as healing) should go in her skills/magic section. If she's particularly good at healing, then that would be something you'd want to put here, but not that she can do it.

Fair enough.

Originally Posted by Drammor

Vulnerability to the things that hurt people is not a weakness. What do you mean by "her defense isn't very good"? Again, it sounds like you're trying to handle the EH like a video game, and that's not applicable here.

Uh, she doesn't have any armor, so obviously she can't take too many hits. :/

Originally Posted by Drammor

It is not obvious that she cannot use a staff and a spell at the same time, but that is good to know. I thought that her staves were weapons, though? How can she not attack someone if she's using a staff?

Again, these are magic staves, not staves used for attacking.

Originally Posted by Drammor

Okay, edit in the stuff from before that I've been talking about, and that should be alright for now.

Alrighty then.

I am so sorry it has taken this long to get back to this character, Crystal. I never would have believed that work would have been this hard on me for the last few days. Anyway, my day off is tomorrow, so I have time to work with you again. Again, I am very sorry, I really am. I've been trying to get back to this but I haven't had more than a few minutes to sit down at a time. So please forgive me, and I'll be right to this.

You never just right out approve a character, do you?

Well, that's a sign of a good character approver if you ask me. ;D

Although it could theoretically happen, I use the same exhausting technique for every character, every time. It would have to meet up to my detail and clarity standards immediately, though. I've been practicing these approvals since several months before I became a councilor.

Actually, I've been in the EH for a few years. I was just never extremely active.

I appreciate your honesty. Like Sabbo said, I must have had a date limit when I searched your characters... or maybe I just missed something, then. In that case, though, I'll be regarding you as a 2 1/2+ year veteran, which changes a couple of things.

This is a Fire Emblem fan character though and they do have classes. But I'll explain it. :]

I'm familiar with those characters. I helped Lord Grudzinski's Sir Maxwell with some stuff, as well, and he was also an FE character. However, just because a character comes from a certain ruleset universe doesn't mean that it can't be used with malleability. If you ever feel like reading another character, he's not a bad reference.

You don't know what an indirect hit is? I thought anyone would know that it's attacking a person from a distance, not right on up close.

I've always considered this a ranged attack. Personally, I would have thought of an indirect hit as hitting someone with a splashing effect. Like tossing a lightning bolt at someone, and instead of hitting them, hitting close enough to them that they still get hurt and disoriented. Or... throwing a grenade, and instead of hitting someone with the explosion, showering them with shrapnel and debris. You know, hurting someone with the effects of an attack, rather than the attack itself.

Uh, she doesn't have any armor, so obviously she can't take too many hits. :/

I see what you mean, but if you could conjugate it like that in the first place, it would make more sense to everyone.

Again, these are magic staves, not staves used for attacking.

Again, this is really excellent information to have.

And now, on to the rest.

Fire Magic

• Elfire: A basic strong blast of fire.
• Arcfire: The strongest of the three arc spells, this spell is an even stronger blast of fire than Elfire.
• Bolganone: This spell is a powerful volcanic eruption from the ground. It takes a little more time to do this spell than the previous two, and it’s not extremely accurate.
• Meteor: As the name suggests, Lily sends a flaming meteor down on her opponent. This is the only spell she can use from a very far distance (up to 200 ft from the target), so it is the least accurate spell she has.

Thunder Magic:

• Elthunder: A basic strong blast of lightning.
• Arcthunder: A stronger blast of lightning.
• Thoron: This spell is the most accurate Lily has, and it is also stronger than its fire counterpart, Bolganone. Here, powerful lightning bolts appear around the target and strike.

Wind Magic:

• Elwind: A basic strong blast of wind.
• Arcwind: A stronger blast of wind.
• Tornado: As the name says, Lily conjures up a small tornado with this spell. It’s not as accurate as its thunder counterpart Thoron, but more accurate than Bolganone. It’s weaker than both.

Alright... I need more details on every one of these spells. What do they look like? How fast and often can Lily cast them? What are the limitations of each spell? Also, what limits all of her spells? As in, does she have a pool of mana to draw from, or is she limited to time between castings, or does she have spell components, or is it something else I haven't mentioned here? If there are no such limits, then you'll need to make some. What direction are they cast from? Since these are all damaging spells, how much damage does each spell inflict on its victims? For that matter, which spells affect multiple targets?

Staves:

• Silence: This staff can prevent the opponent from using staves or magic themselves. It wears off after a little while, however.
• Physic: A long range healing staff. It also heals Lily a little bit every now and then whenever she’s carrying it in her hand.

What does she need to do to use these staves? How long does the silence staff last? Does "now and then" mean randomly but rarely, or how often? How effective is the healing from the staff? What does it look like when she uses these staves? Can she use both of them at the same time? What does it cost her to use one of these staves?

Other Skills:

• Flare: A skill that can make the opponent weaker than usual to magic attacks. It is the mastery skill of Arch Sages. Lily only uses it when she really needs to and isn’t quite proficient with it yet.
• Adept: This skill allows Lily to make two consecutive attacks. She normally uses it as a finisher.

Is Flare a spell? I'm having a hard time understanding how a skill can make someone more susceptible to magic. Could you explain that for me, please? And where applicable, answer the same questions as for the spells and staves about Flare.

About Adept... what would stop a person from attacking something twice in a row, in the first place? From the look of it, I think this might be an excellent example of trying to use the EH like a video game.

Appearance: Lily is rather attractive. She has long lavender hair set in two thick braids trailing halfway down her back. Her figure is slim, but not all of it is seen due to her long pinkish purple cloak. The cloak does not have a hood, and trailing behind it is a long, fancy sash which is worn around the neck. This sash is a lighter purple color with lines that are a darker purple. Lily’s undershirt is also a light purple. She also wears a darker purple skirt that reaches down to her ankles with lavender heeled shoes to match her hair. The skirt reveals almost all of Lily’s right leg and covers all of her left. It is attached to her body by a gold belt. On her hands are matching lavender gloves. She also has a bag hidden beneath her cloak which carries her staves, tome, and other items.

When I try to imagine this, I see hair attached to a nondescript person, wearing well-described clothes. Could you please pretend that you did not mention anything about her appearance during the first eight entries of the profile, and then explain what she looks like from there? I'd like to know about how big she is, what kind of build she has, her complexion, her eye color, any tattoos or scars or similar marks she may have on her body, and so forth. Please and thank you

The vulneraries. What do they look like? How effective are they? What can they be used to treat? How are they used? What IS a vulnerary, anyway? It would also be very important to know why they can be used up to eight times each. How many of these does she normally carry with her?

The elixir, I assume that is a drinkable potion, right? How effective is an elixir? What color is it? If you want to go for extra points, you could even go as far as to say what it smells and tastes like. Why does using an elixir make her vulnerable to attack?

The sibling necklace, although noteworthy, is something that should be put in her appearance section. Since she probably wears it (right?) it is something that someone would notice when looking at her.

Personality: Lily is very optimistic and it shows in her cheery nature. She doesn’t particularly like to fight, but she is willing to when her family, friends, or home is in danger. She also loves animals and is very reluctant to battle against them. At times, Lily can also be a bit hyper since she had grown out of a truly hyper nature she had as a teenager. Overall, she can be a little stubborn and a bit too cheery, as well as kind and caring. Her voice is rather loud and due to this she’s been known to embarrass her friends by mistake, especially Zarek. And speaking of Zarek, she loves him more than anyone else and has had a huge crush on him for the longest time. Lily awaits the day he returns her affections and believes he may truly love her back, but not know it.

Her personality seems surprisingly young for being 22. Really, she sounds a lot more like a 15 year old girl. I'd like you to offer some insight here on why she's been unable to mature any further than that, or perhaps make some changes that would indicate she has grown up a bit.

Originally Posted by Drammor

I am so sorry it has taken this long to get back to this character, Crystal. I never would have believed that work would have been this hard on me for the last few days. Anyway, my day off is tomorrow, so I have time to work with you again. Again, I am very sorry, I really am. I've been trying to get back to this but I haven't had more than a few minutes to sit down at a time. So please forgive me, and I'll be right to this.

I was wondering what might have been keeping you, but no problem.

Originally Posted by Drammor

Although it could theoretically happen, I use the same exhausting technique for every character, every time. It would have to meet up to my detail and clarity standards immediately, though. I've been practicing these approvals since several months before I became a councilor.

I see. Sounds convenient. :]

Originally Posted by Drammor

I appreciate your honesty. Like Sabbo said, I must have had a date limit when I searched your characters... or maybe I just missed something, then. In that case, though, I'll be regarding you as a 2 1/2+ year veteran, which changes a couple of things.

Alright, no problem. At least I'm learning from all this. ;D

Originally Posted by Drammor

I'm familiar with those characters. I helped Lord Grudzinski's Sir Maxwell with some stuff, as well, and he was also an FE character. However, just because a character comes from a certain ruleset universe doesn't mean that it can't be used with malleability. If you ever feel like reading another character, he's not a bad reference.

Gotcha. Thanks for letting me know. :]

Originally Posted by Drammor

I've always considered this a ranged attack. Personally, I would have thought of an indirect hit as hitting someone with a splashing effect. Like tossing a lightning bolt at someone, and instead of hitting them, hitting close enough to them that they still get hurt and disoriented. Or... throwing a grenade, and instead of hitting someone with the explosion, showering them with shrapnel and debris. You know, hurting someone with the effects of an attack, rather than the attack itself.

Okay, I'll say ranged attack then.

Originally Posted by Drammor

I see what you mean, but if you could conjugate it like that in the first place, it would make more sense to everyone.

Done.

Originally Posted by Drammor

Again, this is really excellent information to have.

Done.

Originally Posted by Drammor

Alright... I need more details on every one of these spells. What do they look like? How fast and often can Lily cast them? What are the limitations of each spell? Also, what limits all of her spells? As in, does she have a pool of mana to draw from, or is she limited to time between castings, or does she have spell components, or is it something else I haven't mentioned here? If there are no such limits, then you'll need to make some. What direction are they cast from? Since these are all damaging spells, how much damage does each spell inflict on its victims? For that matter, which spells affect multiple targets?

What does she need to do to use these staves? How long does the silence staff last? Does "now and then" mean randomly but rarely, or how often? How effective is the healing from the staff? What does it look like when she uses these staves? Can she use both of them at the same time? What does it cost her to use one of these staves?

Is Flare a spell? I'm having a hard time understanding how a skill can make someone more susceptible to magic. Could you explain that for me, please? And where applicable, answer the same questions as for the spells and staves about Flare.

About Adept... what would stop a person from attacking something twice in a row, in the first place? From the look of it, I think this might be an excellent example of trying to use the EH like a video game.

That's a lot to answer, but I'm all up for it.

Originally Posted by Drammor

When I try to imagine this, I see hair attached to a nondescript person, wearing well-described clothes. Could you please pretend that you did not mention anything about her appearance during the first eight entries of the profile, and then explain what she looks like from there? I'd like to know about how big she is, what kind of build she has, her complexion, her eye color, any tattoos or scars or similar marks she may have on her body, and so forth. Please and thank you

Alrighty then.

The vulneraries. What do they look like? How effective are they? What can they be used to treat? How are they used? What IS a vulnerary, anyway? It would also be very important to know why they can be used up to eight times each. How many of these does she normally carry with her?

The elixir, I assume that is a drinkable potion, right? How effective is an elixir? What color is it? If you want to go for extra points, you could even go as far as to say what it smells and tastes like. Why does using an elixir make her vulnerable to attack?

The sibling necklace, although noteworthy, is something that should be put in her appearance section. Since she probably wears it (right?) it is something that someone would notice when looking at her.

A lot to answer here, but again, I'm up for it.

Originally Posted by Drammor

Her personality seems surprisingly young for being 22. Really, she sounds a lot more like a 15 year old girl. I'd like you to offer some insight here on why she's been unable to mature any further than that, or perhaps make some changes that would indicate she has grown up a bit.

Really? I didn't mean to make her sound that immature. What could I do to make her more mature?

It doesn't look like you changed a whole lot about her strengths, but you did say that these effects are only true when Lily is the caster of a spell, so I'm going to call this good.

Hmm. Her weaknesses look good. Just remember to make use of these weaknesses when you roleplay. Playing them up from time to time also creates good opportunities for character growth

Fairly powerful, twice as powerful as fairly, and so forth. These are okay qualifiers, but my main question is on what the spells can kill with a single strike. Assuming that these aren't targets that naturally take more or less damage from this spell type, what could she kill with a single casting of each spell? Comparably, what would its effect on a normal but robust human be? How many castings would it usually take to kill that same human?

Her physic staff is intensely powerful. It needs a greater limitation than just not being able to attack when she's using it. Either bring down its power, please, or add on a more restricting limitation to that ability. Ideas I have for you include a number of time per day or week that she is able to use it, adding on a fuel source cost to her staves in general (so that she'll need to pick and choose her abilities between periods of rest), making it less effective based on how far away from her target she is and, a significant chance of failure or a very extended time that it takes to use this ability. Now, I don't mean all of those, each one is just an idea.

On that adept spell, if I'm understanding you correctly... Lily attacks someone else after or as a part of casting the spell, and then the spell follows up that attack with an identical physically damaging strike? If that's true, then this is a powerful ability, but not something that quite needs to be mitigated. If this is the case, then good job. Otherwise, since you said that her weapon is her magic, could you mean that adept is effectively casting a single spell twice at the same time? Like twincasting?

I like the additions that you made to her personality, Crystal. It definitely adds depth to your character.

Now, since personalities do vary from one person to the next, these are not absolute truths. Over time, though, I've personally witnessed that folks who've made it to the grand age of twenty-two like to slow down a bit from time to time. Often, this is to reflect on themselves as they have subconsciously (at the very least) realized that now is the time for them to change and develop into the people they want to be. Folks in this small age group tend to be convicted in their beliefs and morals, but also willing to bend them here and there. Also, assuming that she has lived a normal adolescence, Lily would logically have experienced infatuation with at least four other people between the ages of eleven and twenty, and it would probably have resulted in hurt feelings each time. Due to this, her affections for another person would probably begin to be more guarded by this point in time.

Additionally, older people tend to be more dimensional than younger ones. No offense to youth, as this is only due to the time that a person has had to collect personality traits. Due to this, I'd like to see you expand her personality section a bit, as there are some things that I want to know about Lily. What kinds of things interest her? As in, what were her hobbies be, if she had any? Or has any, for that matter. What is Lily's opinion of herself? What are her first thoughts about and how does she treat other people? Does she assume that everyone has good in them somewhere, or is she perhaps cautious around others, at first? Also, I'd like to know at least one strong like, and one strong dislike that Lily has. By this age, those are all traits that most people have discovered about themselves.

About her bio, it is readable, although it has been difficult to suspend disbelief while reading it. I don't see anything in there to rule out, but it is clear to me that you could use some help with your writing style. I suggest that you enroll at the Dome, where a person who specializes in helping people develop their writing can assist you further with this. From the changes that you've made to this profile so far, it is obvious that you have great potential as a writer, but it also looks like you've been trying to make that journey without any help from other writers. Please remember, because stories are enjoyed by many kinds of people, and no single person can start off writing from more perspectives and with more skills than their own, there was never a great writer in history who did not have help when learning how to captivate others with their art.

Originally Posted by Drammor

It doesn't look like you changed a whole lot about her strengths, but you did say that these effects are only true when Lily is the caster of a spell, so I'm going to call this good.

Mkay. :]

Originally Posted by Drammor

Hmm. Her weaknesses look good. Just remember to make use of these weaknesses when you roleplay. Playing them up from time to time also creates good opportunities for character growth

Of course. ;D

Originally Posted by Drammor

Fairly powerful, twice as powerful as fairly, and so forth. These are okay qualifiers, but my main question is on what the spells can kill with a single strike. Assuming that these aren't targets that naturally take more or less damage from this spell type, what could she kill with a single casting of each spell? Comparably, what would its effect on a normal but robust human be? How many castings would it usually take to kill that same human?

It depends on the character really. Every human is different, so remember that. Every character of any race is different. I can't possibly list how much it would effect them all, especially since people make up their own races here too. xP

As for one hit knock outs, none of the spells can do that unless the target is weak enough, like a weak cat against one of Lily's fire spells. 'Tis why I didn't list it, but I will anyway.

Originally Posted by Drammor

Her physic staff is intensely powerful. It needs a greater limitation than just not being able to attack when she's using it. Either bring down its power, please, or add on a more restricting limitation to that ability. Ideas I have for you include a number of time per day or week that she is able to use it, adding on a fuel source cost to her staves in general (so that she'll need to pick and choose her abilities between periods of rest), making it less effective based on how far away from her target she is and, a significant chance of failure or a very extended time that it takes to use this ability. Now, I don't mean all of those, each one is just an idea.

Well, see, the downside is that she can't heal herself with it. She can only heal allies, so if she's in a one on one battle, she can't use it at all.

Originally Posted by Drammor

On that adept spell, if I'm understanding you correctly... Lily attacks someone else after or as a part of casting the spell, and then the spell follows up that attack with an identical physically damaging strike? If that's true, then this is a powerful ability, but not something that quite needs to be mitigated. If this is the case, then good job. Otherwise, since you said that her weapon is her magic, could you mean that adept is effectively casting a single spell twice at the same time? Like twincasting?

Yeah, basically Lily gets two of the same spell for the price of one if the first strike hits.

Originally Posted by Drammor

I like the additions that you made to her personality, Crystal. It definitely adds depth to your character.

Yayz, thanks. ^^

Originally Posted by Drammor

Now, since personalities do vary from one person to the next, these are not absolute truths. Over time, though, I've personally witnessed that folks who've made it to the grand age of twenty-two like to slow down a bit from time to time. Often, this is to reflect on themselves as they have subconsciously (at the very least) realized that now is the time for them to change and develop into the people they want to be. Folks in this small age group tend to be convicted in their beliefs and morals, but also willing to bend them here and there. Also, assuming that she has lived a normal adolescence, Lily would logically have experienced infatuation with at least four other people between the ages of eleven and twenty, and it would probably have resulted in hurt feelings each time. Due to this, her affections for another person would probably begin to be more guarded by this point in time.

Yes, logically, Lily would have had infatuations with more than just Zarek, but since she was part of a militia then got caught up in a war as a teenager, she didn't get many chances to interact with men in that way. Talks were mostly about upcoming battles, strategies, training, and the like.

Originally Posted by Drammor

Additionally, older people tend to be more dimensional than younger ones. No offense to youth, as this is only due to the time that a person has had to collect personality traits. Due to this, I'd like to see you expand her personality section a bit, as there are some things that I want to know about Lily. What kinds of things interest her? As in, what were her hobbies be, if she had any? Or has any, for that matter. What is Lily's opinion of herself? What are her first thoughts about and how does she treat other people? Does she assume that everyone has good in them somewhere, or is she perhaps cautious around others, at first? Also, I'd like to know at least one strong like, and one strong dislike that Lily has. By this age, those are all traits that most people have discovered about themselves.

Alrighty. I can manage that. :]

Originally Posted by Drammor

About her bio, it is readable, although it has been difficult to suspend disbelief while reading it. I don't see anything in there to rule out, but it is clear to me that you could use some help with your writing style. I suggest that you enroll at the Dome, where a person who specializes in helping people develop their writing can assist you further with this. From the changes that you've made to this profile so far, it is obvious that you have great potential as a writer, but it also looks like you've been trying to make that journey without any help from other writers. Please remember, because stories are enjoyed by many kinds of people, and no single person can start off writing from more perspectives and with more skills than their own, there was never a great writer in history who did not have help when learning how to captivate others with their art.

Are you calling me a bad writer? :/

Well, whether you are or not, I don't wish to use the Dome. I tried once and it didn't work out for one thing, and for another, I don't think I need it. I'm a college student who got very good marks on her English essays. I can't be THAT bad of a writer. xP

Are you calling me a bad writer? :/

No, I am not. I am calling a decent writer with great potential who can improve their style and ability. If I thought you were just a bad writer, I wouldn't bother saying anything at all. That being said, I need proof that your skills have been improving since you arrived at the EH and that you have a firm grasp of handling your characters and those of others. I therefore approve this character for use in the Dome, and will approve her for use outside the Dome once your teacher gives me the good word.

Anyway, thank you very much working with me on this character, Crystal. It's been a pleasure working with you.

Sorry, but I refuse to use the Dome. I tried it, didn't like it when I was a newbie. Since when did council members have the power to force people to use the Dome anyhow? I was told they didn't and cannot do that.

Also, look at the False Knight RP. That is proof. I started out iffy, then improved with Shrub's help. And wouldn't the fact that I've been in lots of RPs and have been here for a long time be proof enough that I probably improved?

I do not have the power to force anyone to do anything. I do, however, have the ability to approve and disapprove characters. Both have been done with this character. Whether you are willing to face up to the challenge of proving your writing skills is your own choice.

The False Knight roleplay was used extensively in this decision, and I have had some very lengthy discussion with Shrub regarding the same.

Well, the False Knight RP isn't the only RP I've been in. Check the battle I've had with Andross. Check the RPs I did with BrokenWing. Check them all.

Also, approving Lily only for the Dome is basically forcing me to use it. I wouldn't have a choice if I wanted to use her outside of the Dome.

If you are willing to wait for me to read through every one of your roleplays before coming to a more final decision on the matter, then I'd be happy to do that for you. Until that time, however, this decision stands.

Presently, if you would like to use Lily outside of them Dome, you will first need to prove that a Dome teacher that you have the skills to do so. I am certain that Puck would be willing to help you with that. If you feel that you have no other choice because you do not intend on abandoning this character, then I commend you for making that decision.

I do have the skills to do so. You're making no sense here. If I didn't have the skills, I'd have stayed in the Dome a long time ago and wouldn't have as many RPs as I do right now.

Honestly, I don't like you treating me like a newb who just got their first character approved. I know how to RP well enough, otherwise council members would have probably done the same thing you are doing.

This matter has been discussed with the council. I represented all of the Council when I made this decision. The Council feels that it has given you a disservice by not addressing this issue sooner, and I am currently rectifying that oversight by making the decision to approve this character for use only in the Dome for now.

I am not treating you as if you were new here. I have made this decision after considerable contemplation, and inspection as to the fairness of this course of action.

Honor, please stop posting in other people's character threads. There is no reason for you to respond to this request in this thread.

What issue? There was never an issue to begin with.

I refuse to use the Dome, and that's final. I gave it a chance and it didn't work for me.

Originally Posted by Crystal

What issue? There was never an issue to begin with.

You have proven to have a propensity for controlling the characters of other players without their consent.

You have also proven yourself unwilling to use the constructive criticism of the other players and councilors. To this, I appear to have been the sole exception, and then only to the point when your ability was brought into question.

Additionally, a number of legitimate complaints have been lodged against your actions in writing, in the recent past. These complaints need to be addressed for the fair treatment of the other players here in the EH, and this is the resolution that has been determined as most appropriate for that.

Originally Posted by Crystal

I refuse to use the Dome, and that's final. I gave it a chance and it didn't work for me.

And that is one of the choices available to you.

Originally Posted by Drammor

You have proven to have a propensity for controlling the characters of other players without their consent.

What are you talking about? I stopped using other people's characters "too much."

Originally Posted by Drammor

You have also proven yourself unwilling to use the constructive criticism of the other players and councilors. To this, I appear to have been the sole exception, and then only to the point when your ability was brought into question.

I actually found yours helpful, that's why. Also, I didn't want criticism from other players. If I wanted it, I would have used it. Otherwise I ignore it.

Originally Posted by Drammor

Additionally, a number of legitimate complaints have been lodged against your actions in writing, in the recent past. These complaints need to be addressed for the fair treatment of the other players here in the EH, and this is the resolution that has been determined as most appropriate for that.

Yes, pointless complaints. I've RP'd the same way for a few years, yet no one complained until the False Knight RP.

And I don't like that resolution at all. I feel it is unnecessary and very inappropriate. I feel you are trying to baby me and force me to do something I don't want to do.

Originally Posted by Drammor

And that is one of the choices available to you.

No, it is not. You and all of the council are clearly trying to force me to use the Dome. I can tell. And I don't appreciate it at all.