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His Flesh Becomes One With the Mist
OoC: Oh, yeah, and I didn't make up the poem in the titles, but it is a modified version of the poem here.
IC: “Not the best of ideas,” said the second. “Oh, please, how was he to know it was Dorfl?” said the first. *** Marcus writhed amid the wreckage of the table as he saw his adversary come to him and unsheathe a wrist-knife. He fought back a hundred questions in his mind and focused on surviving. He quickly flicked his eyes to an area behind Dorfl. He hadn’t expected much, and received little. Dorfl barely paused to process this feint. But it gave Marcus ample time. He leapt up from the splinters and drew his knife. He strafed to his left and jumped onto a sofa gaining the high ground. The would-be John Brady narrowed his eyes and evasively attacked Marcus, but only for a second. Marcus was put off by Dorfl’s sudden manoeuvre and ran to the end of the sofa. Dorfl gave it a flying kick, unbalancing Marcus, but not enough to throw him off. Marcus wobbled uneasily on the sofa arm, giving Dorfl time to jump up and onto the opposite end of the green settee, tipping it over and throwing Marcus towards him. They collided into each other, winding Dorfl but the momentum carried Marcus onto the wooden wall, snapping it. He seized his opportunity as Dorfl wheezed on the floor, and ducked out of the room. Marcus put his objections on hold for just a moment as he raced through this room and into the next. Here there was a window, offering no light, the sun having just set beyond the horizon. The darkness was perfect, and, as Dorfl’s heavy footsteps pounded outside, Marcus ducked behind an empty bookshelf. Dorfl entered, and left as soon as he had, through the next door. Odd, Marcus thought, Reason suggests he would search for me, if he so wanted me dead. Then he began to think about his whole scenario. It was clear that his client was nervous as he gave Marcus his assignment, and he gave one different to that on the paper… And he did have a gut feeling about the whole place, as if it were made for assassinating assassins. It was all a trick… He thought, And I’ve got to get out of here if I want to survive. And if they know enough to want me dead, then they could know where I live. Not safe to go back there again. But perhaps… If no-one alive knows… Marcus smiled a grim smile. He extricated himself from the cobwebs behind the wardrobe, and searched for his would-be killer. He could hear him in the room over. He was doing something loud, moving wood. But there wasn’t anything wooden in there, was there? Just green furniture… There was a ripping sound and the light rain sound of splinters falling to the ground. Marcus opened the door just a crack and saw the man ripping the wooden wall off, apparently trying to fit through. He widened his eyes and considered he was seeing a madman. Inadvertently, he had steeped onto a creaky floorboard. There was the slightest of creaks, and Dorfl paused. Suddenly, he span around, and threw his knife at Marcus. Through an impressive feat of agility, he caught it and instantly sent it flying back at Dorfl, hitting him squarely in the chest. The late Dorfl toppled backwards into the wall, finishing the job of opening it. Wait… Opening it? Marcus warily checked the hole, and to his surprise, found a dark and gloomy passageway inside. Built for assassinating assassins indeed… Marcus marvelled. He considered entering, but decided in there could only be worse than out here. Without hesitating, Marcus proudly fled the building with little difficult, out onto the foggy streets. He felt at ease as he faded into the white, and sought a room for the night. *** “The fool didn’t even check our passageways!” said the second. “I believe the proverb, “He who runs away shall live another day,” doesn’t come into it, Mr. Deors-Mäcul?” “Oh… Please, cowardice is not a trait favourable in an assassin!” “No, not cowardice, my good sir, logic.” “Logic is not needed in one who blindly takes orders, either, my good sir.” “Oh, do calm down… We need to tail him,” he finished, and tramped down the corridor. *** And our good friend Marcus walked on through the mists as the scouts for the International Guild of Assassins, Spies and Saboteurs followed on the rooftops.
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AWAY ON HOLIDAYS. Yep, that's right. Are you going to cry? No, of course not. Everyone hates me, and rightly so. In any case, I'll be back on the eleventh of July. |
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Somebody's been reading Terry Pratchett.
Great story so far. It's not often you see a character that's just packing his wits, some experience, and one knife with him...fun to read, you know? If I had to complain about one thing, it's that Marcus's personality doesn't show very well sometimes...but maybe that's just him being a cold, calculating S.O.B., haha. Everything else like description and battle scenes and whatnot are all great! Keep up the good work.
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