Quest of Curses: The Eternal Desert

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OoC: I am using Jabel, in my sig. Feel free to coment whenever you want


Quest of Curses: The Eternal Desert
Chapter 1

Bic: It was not going good good for Jabel, he was the chosen one. If he didn't fufill his duties as the chosen one to fight for justice. The only problem was, he couldn't find anywhere where there was evil about. That was because he had been searching for two weeks and had not found a town. He needed to find a town, and soon. He couldn't find his way out of this forest he had been wondering around in four eight hours. He needed water badly. He hadn't eaten for two days, things were not very bright for this swordsman. Jabel looked around, and then he saw what he needed so badly, and tree with a spring. He leaped over there with ease and drank until he was completely recovered.

He stood up. He saw a carving on the tree. It said, "Anyone who drinks from my spring will bring upon them eternal bad luck". Jabel didn't believe any part of it. Jabel walked off, but after just five steps, he saw a man who appeared to have drank from the spring with an arrow through his heart. Jabel started to believe the little markings on the tree. He wanted to get out of that forest as quickly as he was capable of. He jumped up into a tree and peared out over all of the trees to find which direction he should go. The only thing he could see besides trees was a desert, but Jabel didn't care. He ran as fast as he could to get out.

He took a big leap of faith and hit the sand. He started off to look for a town. One hour later, it started to get dark, Jabel found a cave to sleep in. He woke up and he could actually see what the inside of the cave looked like. He looked around, and he saw something terrible.

He saw a man, he was eaten alive by scorpions. Jabel thought that he was another cursed man. For the first time in his life, Jabel actually felt fear. He set off into the desert further. Jabel was walking barefoot on hot sand, he couldn't take it anymore, he took off the rag he uses for his clothes, ripped it in half, and walked around on them. Jabel was running around a dessert nude. Jabel started kept going, and the temperature wasn't going to get any cooler, so he had to find some shelter from the scortching heat, and he needed some water again. He found boulders and hid behind them, he found an opening, liek a door of some sort. Jabel's curiosity got the best of him, he couldn't help himself. He went into the boulder. It went underground. Jabel didn't know what was instore him next.

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Chapter 2

OoC:I may want to warn some readers, this is graphic

Bic: Jabel went down the stairs. Jabel was to hot to wonder why there was stairs going underground from a boulder in the middle of the desert. Jabel saw that there were two rooms. Torches that look like they have just been lit, lit the rooms. Jabel saw a scroll with some parchment, there were three drawings and some text on it. His interest was cut short when he heard another noise from the other room.

He went into the other room, it was a big room. The room was big enough to battle.
Suddenly, about twenty men came out of thin air, they were skilled samurais. Jabel got out his katana. He made a spin attack and took out two men, he impaled a man, and he slashed a guy in his eye. One man came up behind Jabel and tried to choke him out, but Jabel then took his cause and effect skills to work. He kicked down a pillar, which took out three men, and Jabel flipped the choker onto the pillar which was solid stone. Jabel saw that most of the samurais also had katanas, Jabel took one from a squashed man. He had duel katanas now. Some men weren't even dead yet, Jabel had to battle them himself. Jabel did with almost ease.
There was only three men left now, they all charged at Jabel at the same time. The first man tried to take a swing at Jabel with his sword, but Jabel ducked and tripped him with his sword, though he cut off the mans foot in the process, that man bleeded to death, the other ones had Jabel in a sandwich. One man tried to jab Jabel in his neck, but Jabel just side stepped it, which made the man stab his partner strait through his head. The last samurai was the one who just killed his last help. The swordsman looked around for Jabel, but he was nowhere to be seen.
But at that instant, the weilder of the the bloody ninjas sword looked behind him not to find Jabel, but to see another falling pillar. The man miraculously dodged it, just as Jabel wanted him to. Jabel snuck up behind him and swung as hard as he could. The Katana met his neck, beheading the man.
Jabel was exausted, but he survived with just a couple scratches. Jabel felt a little embarassed because he fought all of those men naked. Jabel put his cloth back on. He went back to the other room to look at that scroll. The scroll looked like an undiscovered prophecy.
Jabel looked at the first picture. It was a man mistaken for a deer and shot through the heart with an arrow. The next picture was of a man, who was being eaten alive by scorpions. The third picture disturbed Jabel the most, it was a young man, being mobbed and killed by many men. Jabel soon figured out what was going on, the man he found in the forest was the first picture, the man he found in the cave was the second picture. Jabel couldn't figure out who the other man was until he remember his battle just a moment ago. The third picture was of him, the chosen one. Just for drinking from someones fountain, he couldn't make out his name.

Jabel looked down and read the text: "Anyone who stops this prophecy from being fufilled, thall be punished.....

Jabel knew that was him, he slept in the that boulder, the next day he woke up. He read over the whole prophecy, and what he read had him running out of there with fear.

[Specter]

it was good. i think you have potential, and i cant wait for the next chapter. that was pretty funny, fighting naked lol. um just one thing though, when he was pushing over the pillars that seemed impossible considering you said that if he were to punch someone his own age, it wouldnt even hurt them. just try to fix that in later chapters.

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^ well, this is an old place, and I think they could be brittle pillars

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OoC: Well, here goes nothing
Chapter 3

BiC:
Jabel read over the scroll, he couldn't believe what he read:
"Anyone who shall stay in this chamber for a sunrise, shall be stay here for all eternity" Jabel slept there over night, he was scared. He went up the stairs as fast as he could, the opening was blocked off. There was no other way out. Jabel was going to die, whether it was starvation, dehydration, or suffication. Jabel then got an idea.

Jabel though to himself: "I am underground right? I can just dig my way out" Jabel didn't want to dull his sword, so he got one of the dead samurai's. He used it to dig through the old cracked wall. Jabel had no patience, he got his katana and used his magic power move, which got Jabel the rest of the way out. All Jabel needed to do was rummage through the peices of wall to get out into the desert. He was off.

He kept walking, thinking now that leaving the forest was a mistake. It was too late to turn back now, the forest was out of sight by then. Jabel had no choice but to move forward. Around 3 hours of walking later, he saw a town right on the horizon. He ran, ran, and ran some more, but the town didn't seem to get any closer. After dusk, Jabel was exausted, he collapsed and fell strait asleep.

The next morning, it was hotter than ever. Jabel needed to get to the town, he already had many brushes of death this week, and he wanted to have no more life and death situations. Still, the town wasn't getting any closer. Jabel had no idea what was going on. Jabel figured it out soon enough. Jabel had drank from the forbidden spring, stopped a prophecy from happening, and he stayed in that chamber over night. Jabel had alot of bad luck to deal with. Jabel thought that that was why the town wasn't getting any closer.

The chosen one was miserable. He was in the middle of the desert with food, water, or shelter. He soon figured that this was a curse, on him. Or was it? Jabel saw a figure in the clouds.

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Chapter 4

Jabel looked up into the sky. On the only cloud in the sky, he saw a man but he was too far up to see what he looked like. Jabel kept looking up into the sky in amazement. How can someone be standing on top of a cloud? Jabel thought. This man in the sky had to be some kind of magician or have some kind of magic power. Jabel had magic of his own, but only in his katana. Jabel had no way of getting up there, though his curiousity was killing him, and so was the heat. The only way to get to that man, was to make him come down to the ground.

Jabel thought of a way to get him down, let him know he's there. Jabel waved his sword, expecting that he would get his attention. Didn't work. He tried screaming, the man couldn't hear him. Jabel made a desperate move, he used his magic power move and hit the sand. It made large waves in the sand, and threw Jabel off his feet. That was sure to get the mans attention. The man in the sky appeared to be extending out his hand. A bridge of clouds made it's way down to the brutelly hot sand. The man came down it on what appeared to be some sort of contraption.

It took the man awhile to get down to earth, but Jabel waited. The man finally got close enough so that Jabel could see him face to face. Jabel knew that this man was not a very friendly person, and didn't look like this man was wanting to make friends. This man pased around Jabel, checking him out. Jabel looked at the misterious man's contraption. Jabel was not familiar with this form of transportation. He grew up on walking, and he had nothing else to help him get around. Yet, Jabel stared at it while the man was staring at him.

"What do you call that thing?" Jabel asked the man. "It's called a motorcycle, genius." said the man, who was wearing nothing but black clothes, and was taller than Jabel. Jabel thought that this man was looking familiar to him, but he just couldn't point it out. Jabel was thinking about for awhile, then he thought of it. This man in front of him was seen on every single 'wanted' poster in every single town he has been to. He couldn't think of this man's name.

"What is name?" asked Jabel. "That is for you to find out." said the man. Jabel didn't want to figure it out, he wanted to know now!!! Jabel thought of every time he had seen his picture on a 'wanted' poster. Jabel finally remembered. His name was:

Spoiler (Highlight to read):

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Rubin, my other character

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Jabel was ready for battle........

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OoC: Ok, this is the grand finale of my Character Fiction story, and I would deeply appreciate your comments.

BiC: Final Chapter

Were you the one who put the curse on this desert? asked Jabel. Of coarse I was. replied Rubin. "I have been watching you since you drank from my spring, I tried my best to get you dead, but you keep fighting back, plus, you stopped my prophecy I was working on from happening.""You are one sick man."Jabel said with disgust. "Thank you, and I am not going through all this trouble to kill and now just letting you pass by breaking this curse. If you want this curse to be broken, you will have to kill me, and apparently, no one has yet."

Jabel pounced, but Rubin just side stepped it. Rubin got out his boomerang daggers. As Jabel got up, he found a dagger coming his way, so he ducked, and the dagger came flying back at Rubin. Rubin got caught it. Jabel took out his katana. Jabel tried to slash Rubin’s leg, but Rubin jumped. Jabel took a swing at Rubin. Rubin ducked. Jabel stepped back. Rubin threw one of his daggers at Jabel, Jabel caught it and threw it back at Rubin, but Rubin blasted fire on the dagger and ducked. The boomerang action made the burning handle on the dagger come back to Jabel. Jabel tried to jump over it but it caught his rags on fire. Jabel didn’t get burned because he took his rags off and threw them at Rubin. It hit Rubin’s sleeveless shirt and it caught his shirt on fire. Rubin had to take his shirt off. Jabel threw the dagger by the blade and it hit Rubin’s pants, so Rubin took them off quick. The two were now both battling, naked, and in the middle of the desert near sunset. The burning dagger was on the ground, and Rubin had the smart idea of putting out the fire bu stomping on it. Jabel took advantage of this situation by getting a cheap shot on Rubin.

He slashed up Rubin’s back. Rubin screamed in pain. Jabel slashed Rubin’s ankle, but Rubin didn’t fall over. Jabel got up, and jabbed Rubin, intending to get his stomach. Rubin blocked it with his duel swords he had just made his daggers turn into. Jabel had one sword, and Rubin had two. Jabel made a desperate move and kicked Rubin in his bare groin (that hurts). Jabel jumped on top of Rubin’s shoulders and hitting him in the back of his head. Rubin was more concerned about his groin. Rubin felt onto his back, knocking the wind out of Jabel. Rubin changes one of his swords back into a dagger and threw it aside. Rubin took his sword and tried to stab Jabel in his chest, but Jabel kept rolling around in the sand while Rubin was just stabbing the sand looking stupid. Jabel got up and took a deep breath. Rubin charged at Jabel, but Jabel tripped him with his foot and Rubin’s face met the dagger’s blade that he tossed aside. Rubin got up. Now bleeding from his eyebrow, Rubin took his sword and tried to stab Jabel. Jabel kept barely dodge the blows to his chest.

Rubin had enough of Jabel’s little games. Javel blasted fire at Jabel’s face. Jabel bent back to dodge the great balls of fire. Jabel had also had enough of Rubin. Jabel jumped up and kicked Rubin right in his chest, knocking the wind out of HIM this time. Jabel got up, and walked over to Rubin who was now on the ground. But this time Rubin tripped Jabel and his shoulder hit the dagger that hadn’t been picked up yet. Rubin got up, stepped on Jabel’s chest with one foot, and put his sword to Jabel’s throat. “I could kill you now, boy” said Rubin. But what Rubin didn’t know was that Jabel had already picked up the dagger and threw it. The dagger hit Rubin in the back of the knee. Rubin fell over this time. Jabel stood up and put his katana to Rubin’s throat. “I could kill you now, boy!” Jabel said, mocking Rubin. Jabel saw that Rubin’s lips were moving unusually fast. Suddenly, the twenty men that Jabel battled in the chamber came out back out of thin air. Jabel had no other choice to battle them while Rubin sat by getting a chance to recover.

Jabel could battle them again, he was just exhausted. Jabel squatted down in a spinning motion with his sword out. Jabel had a nag for tripping everybody. Jabel saw a man get up before the rest of them and run at him. Jabel kicked him in his stomach and snapped his neck. Another man got up. Jabel took the dead man’s sword and stabbed the man right through his stomach. Another samurai got up and charged at Jabel, but Jabel through him onto the other man who had the sword sticking out of his back. Jabel through sand in three men’s eyes to stall them while he battled the other men. Jabel saw Rubin turn his sword into his other dagger and threw them both at Jabel. Jabel hit the deck and the daggers ended up taking out seven men. There were ten men left now. Jabel peered over to see Rubin’s motorcycle.

Jabel jumped onto the motorized bike and rode at the ten swordsmen and stuck out his katana. He ran over two men and beheaded three men with his katana. Five men were remaining, as Jabel jumped off the bike. The sand that flew up from the motorcycle, had blinded all of them. Jabel took all the swords of the dead warriors and stuck them up from the ground. Jabel threw one man onto the pile of blades. The other man got stabbed through the head. The three other men got the sand out of there eyes and stampeded. Jabel tripped two and their upper bodies found the erect swords. The last man standing got a special death, Jabel pushed him to the ground. Then he used his magic power move and sliced the last samurai in half. By this time, it was completely night. The only light came from the full moon.

Jabel heard the motorcycle engine. Rubin was on the motorcycle. Rubin ran over Jabel’s leg. Jabel screamed in pain. Jabel couldn’t see anything, and neither could Rubin. “I am about to do you a favor, boy. You want light? You can have it!” Rubin blasted fire to the sand. Those two were surrounded in a very large ring of fire. Jabel had two swords, and Rubin turned his daggers into duel swords as well. Jabel side swung. Rubin dodged. Jabel dropped and spun his nude body in the sand tripping Rubin on his back. Jabel did a front flip and slashed Rubin’s leg. After Jabel got up from his gymnastics, Rubin kicked Jabel in the stomach. Rubin cut up Jabel’s back just like Jabel did to him. Jabel screamed very loudly. Rubin stepped back and then ran at Jabel, Rubin jumped and dropped his knees to the back of Jabel’s head. It didn’t hurt Jabel, but he pretended to be unconscious.

Rubin made a big mistake to turn his back to Jabel to catch his breath. Jabel stood up. He snuck behind Rubin and slashed Rubin’s bare left buttock. Rubin turned around with a priceless look on his face, then Jabel kicked him right in the jaw. Rubin fell to the ground Jabel mounted himself on Rubin, choking him (it may look nasty because they are both naked). Rubin was dangerously close to the flames. Rubin changed one of his swords into a boomerang dagger and threw while Jabel was busy choking the life out of Rubin. The dagger came back to get Jabel in his right buttock. Jabel screamed. Rubin got up, stepped back the charged at Jabel. Jabel got his katana and sliced Rubin in his leg, tripping him again. Rubin went face first into the blazing sand. Jabel used his magic power move to cut off Rubin’s head. This battle was over.

The curse was broken, and the rain falling from the sky extinguished the flames. Jabel made his way to the town, and it was getting closer now. When he got to the town, he got a free hotel for killing the most wanted man in the world. Jabel got some well deserved sleep, and got free meals and water. The next week, he set off on his quest again, to do what he must.

[Specter]

i thought the story was good and bringing in your other charecter was a good movie too. just one thing that could make the story better. dont do this.

"but Rubin jumped. Jabel took a swing at Rubin. Rubin ducked. Jabel stepped back."

do this- "but Rubin jumped and Jabel took a powerful swing at Rubin but quick as a flash Rubin ducked, and Jabel stepped back to regain his wits." it sounds much better. just dont pause the whole time every few words. put in some descriptive lanuage too.

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Do you get something if you pass the game The Wind Waker 5 times i passed it only 2 times

[Gudder Snype]

^ no, and wrong place to ask

I have another story in the making, the second installment to my series. It will be great

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Update: My next story will be done within two days, and it will be based off this one, so if you plan on reading my next fic, then you might want to read this one first.

[Specter]

im really looking forward to the next story, i hope its as good as this one. check out my story though, i have a link in my sig.

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The next one will be a continuation of this story. And since I am a little more skilled, the next one will be better than this one. I will tak e a peek at your story now