[Awbri] Dashiamo Mkalos (Dash)’s Training

OOC: I hope this is alright I did use word count, its 538 words long i think...

BIC: The door to the old rusty tavern burst open…

A dark figure strode in, instantly everybody’s gaze averted to look around. The figure’s armour shone in the moonlight as the tavern door creaked closed behind him. He strode over to the bartender ignoring the tension that had entered the tavern with him, he sat down in front of the bartender and requested a drink.
“I’m looking for a way to improve my fighting…” The figure said to the bartender who was now mixing different coloured liquids into a glass.
“If that’s what you looking for… go talk to Spike over there”
The figure took a large gulp and finished his drink then moved over to a lone man sitting in the corner, the man was bald and had a skull tattoo on his arm, he sat in the darkest part of the bar, he was wearing black robes and stowed in the inside of his robes, but still visible was a flame wand.
“I hear you can teach me to fight” Said the figure
“If you’re looking for a teacher, I’m not your guy, but I think I know where you can learn.” Spike replied “Go to the centre of Juto field and mutter the words “Drewey Juto”...
“Well I guess that’s where I’m heading” Said the Figure “Oh and if you’re wondering, my name is Dashiamo Mkalos, but I usually get called Dash”
And with that Dash strode of into the night, in search of his new teacher.

A day later he arrived at Juto field, it was deserted, he had expected to see students from his new school here but it was empty…

Dash walked over to the centre of the field, but there was nothing, his first thought was that he had been tricked, he started to walk away, suddenly he remembered what he had been told... Drewey Juto echoed through his head, he slowly turned and found the centre again.
“Drewey Juto” he muttered as if he was casting a spell…
Nothing happened…
“Drewey Juto” he repeated this time louder…
Again, nothing happened…
“DREWEY JUTO” he screamed…
The ground started to shake all around him, his instinct told him to run but he was glued to the spot, a hill started to appear in the ground, it grew at an alarming rate and in a minute was a full dome.

The grass disappeared leaving a magnificent sight, Golden statues surrounding the dome, each with jets of water streaming out of the tip of their bows, swords and staffs. It was a magical sight, just outside a massive oak door stood hundreds of students all beaming at him, above the door was a gigantic sign which said “Welcome to Drewey's homeroom, Dashiamo Mkalos”. Someone walked forwards to greet him, “Hi I’m Merric Everleaf, and I’m a teacher here” He smiled “You will be taught by me or one of the other teachers. I’m sure you’ll have time for introductions later, but right now we got to get you ready, we have a big day of training ahead of us tomorrow. So follow me”
Dash paused for a minute taking in the scene. “I’m home” he said following Merric through the front door followed by the students.

Okay. Lots of your sentences are RUN ONS, meaning that they are a bunch of ideas mushed together. Many of your commas should be periods. Also, there should be an enter after every 'paragraph', if you know what I mean. I also see lots missing punctuation. Fix up as much as you can before I review it again.