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Old 03-05-2004, 07:29 PM
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Great. Although your character seems over powered that is a great post. to really gte what an assistant does. You are going to be my helping hand in when if I have a lot of students and it would take me way longer to right out their assignments. So mainly you can give any assignemtn that you please to the student's. I will deside the ending assinemtns though roughly. Great job though. If you would like, you can give Drango his first assignment. You can either use a creature I have described or make one on your own or even if felt needed ask me to come up with one. Thank you for the help.
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ok so i am excepted. Bahamut you said someone else give me an assignment...ok....but...well never mind, i'd like to be trained by you though (no offense to anyone else)!
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Thank you for the compliment on my post. As a matter of fact, Sileya is probably my second most powerful character next to my moon angel, Alys. The only reason I had to make her overly powerful in that post was so that I could finish the fight in one post. In longer, drawn out fights, she wouldn't be nearly as "kill you in one hit"-ish. Anyways, enough about my characters.

Drango, your first assignment is a fight with a creature called an Ahriman. If you've played Final Fantasy X, you'll know what I'm talking about. If not, I'll give you a description.

Ahriman: A large, leathery winged creature whose entire body is one gigantic eyeball. It has unnaturally good speed and evasion, although it is weak on the attack and defensive side. Ahriman always attack in a predictable pattern, and if you can avoid its first few attacks and figure out that pattern, you should be able to easily defeat it.

Well, I kind of added a little to my description. That last bit doesn't apply to Ahriman in FFX, but hey, creativity is always a good thing in the BA.

Alrighty, Drango. Whenever you're ready, begin.

EDIT: We must've posted at the same time, Drango. Hey, you don't have anything to worry about while you're in my hands! I don't bite.
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Finally done, it took awhile to write. ZU wasn't working this morning me and DivineDragoon couldn't get on. Hope this isn't to long. ^^

It was raining and Naki was walking down a dirt path towards his hometown. He wanted to have a fight, he was extremly disapointed that on his way back home he hadn't found anyone to fight. The rain was trickling down his face. A loud thunderbolt struck in the sky, a second one came soon after with a flash of light something caught his eye. After another bolt it moved closer and closer then, wham! It had knocked Naki over, he turned around and saw his opponent.
It was a medium sized creature, it could obviously move really fast, but he knew it had some kind of hidden weapon. He reconized the creature, it was a Kilko. This would be a tough fight, he hadn't had a fight all day and he certainly felt like having one.

Naki stood up and unsheathed his sword then pointed his sword at the Kilko. "Lets go!" he said. He took the first move, taking a slash at the Kilko, but it dodged with ease. "Huh, thats not possible. Thats to fast!" he said with his mouth slightly open.
The Kilko took it's chance while Naki just stood there figuring it out the Kilko darted infront of him and let out it's huge claws and struck at his chest. "Argh!" he said in pain. "I'll have to find a way to slow this creature down!" he said.

Naki decided to try range. He teleported quite far away from the Kilko, but he wanted it to still be in veiw. "Thundershock!" he shouted. Since it was allready raining and there were allready Thunderbolts forming in the sky, it would make the attack alot more powerful. A lightning bolt in the air shot down on the creature, it was parilized. Naki took his chance and teleported in front of the Kilko and sunk the blade into it's lower half. As he slid his sword back out of the Kilko, something happend, it disapeared. It had molded into it's surroundings. "No!" said Naki kicking a nearby tree, this tree so happend to be what the Kilko had molded into it molded back into it's self.

It then dashed towards Naki and sliced his left arm, luckily this wasn't the hand that was clutching his sword. Blood started pouring out of his arm and soon formed a little puddle on the ground, the rain was helping too.
Naki decided to go into close combat and teleported next to the Kilko. He swung his sword at its head but it blocked with its claws. While they were still pushing down on eachothers weapons, the creatures claw was breaking on its right hand. Naki noticed this and pushed down harder with his sword on its breaking claw, crack! It broke and the Kilko screeched in pain. It raised its hand still screeching, he had another idea, he swung his sword at the Kilko's hand and its hand was no twitching on the ground.

The Kilko countered with its left clawed hand and slashed his face, blood trickeled down his face. Naki let out a battle cry and lunged at the creature, jumped in the air and pushed his sword as hard as he could at the Kilko, it was now split in half. Naki fell to his knees. "Game set and match!"


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Good post. Again you are using words that you don't have to though. When you put " That is To fast" That was wrong in spelling. To as in to fast is spelled Too, not to. You use things in grammer wrong which needs practice but yet again this doesn't make you a bad RPGer. You are just learning more things. When using your name you can say like"Naki did this......" then after you can say like "Then he dashed......." and on. Same with any other matter in the post. as in your opponent. You don't have to say "Kilko" all the time, ytou can say "it" or "The Creature" or something other.

Good post though. Your next assignment will be -

You and Brigoffa8 will train Battle after his assignment is done. Once I grade him you will fight with characters. This battle will consist of many posts. Either one of you can win but each of you must first post three times bafore posting the others death.
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ooc: oooh, another fight against NaKi! The last one was great, can't wait to get started!^_^

It was getting dark. Ravel stood on the beaches of Great Bay, he headed off toward his' home, Zora Cape, feeling disappointed at his' training today. He had barely found anything to fight today, and was eager to test his' new blade of seas. A couple of pathetic skull fishes and like-likes, they were nothing to him. Ravel hung his' head in shame, and began to feel that Termina was holding back his' true potental. As Ravel continued, he picked up a racid smell. He winced in disgust. The smell became so unbearable, that Ravel could hardly breath, and had to look down at the ground to keep from gagging. Suddenly, Ravel heard footsteps, and looked up into the eyes of his' opponent. A massive dragon like beast stood in front of him, It walked on two legs and weilded a great mace. The creature's skin was slimy looking and covered in course, long hair. The creature let out a roar, it had spotted Ravel. "RRRRAAAAAAARRRRRRRRRR" it bellowed. Ravel drew his double bladed sword, and got into his' battle stance. Ravel and his' opponent ran towards each other at great speed, and mace met blade when their weapons clashed. As Ravel tried to stand up to the sheer strength of his' opponent, he picked up the same smell, coming from behind him. He felt surrounded, intoxicated by the stencth. Ravel's gaurd was let down, and his' opponent sent him sprawling into the air. Ravel hit a hairy, slimy object hard. He looked up to realize in horror that there were two of the mighty beasts. He rolled out of the way of a second mace just in time to avoid being crushed into the sandy beach. He looked at his' second opponent, and said with a smirk "Heh, looks like I got what I wanted after all!." He got up swiftly, and charged, with his' double bladed sword pointed towards the second beast's leg. It sliced into it deeply. The beast growled in pain. Ravel sliced the other end of his' blade into the creature's other leg, and it came crashing down, leaking blood onto the sands. Ravel smirked slightly, and learned a lesson from it when a mace caught him in the back. Lucky for Ravel he wore armor. The blow crushed him into the sand, but thanks to his' armor, he was only hurt minorly. He got up, and the creature he thought to be dead growled at him. He quickly jumped onto the beast's head, ready to stab it. However, it was already awake, and it rose, taking Ravel with it. The other beast saw this, and swung it's lumbering mace at Ravel. Ravel saw it coming, and dived onto the sand. The monster had hit its own kind right it the head, crushing its skull instantly. Ravel heard the beast finally fall for good with a thud. Its skull and head slipt apart, and were scatered across the beach. Ravel saw his' first opponent out of the corner of his' eye, just realizing what it had done. "RRRRRRAAAAAAARRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR" it roared at the loss of its comrade, and recklessly charged at Ravel. Ravel was startled, and yelled without thinking his' limit break "Tsunami Blade!!" suddenly, Ravel's blade glowed a blueish color, and he instinctivly jumped into the air, and met the beast's mace. His' blade sliced right through it, and his' opponent as well. The beast was frozen solid, and seconds later, it shattered into many pieces. Ravel fell to the ground. "Thats two for Ravel, none for the rancid dragon beasts!" he said cockily, and walked away laughing.
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ooc.ok i know nothing of ff10 or any ff's, but ill try the monster thing. and i dont know you but yes i do trust alot of people, just not used to alot of strangers...and one thing...i BITE.

ic.Drango was slowly walking down a s,all countryside, awaiting his opponant. Nothing had shown up for endless time, still and boring. Taking a deep breath in and out he looked behind him and saw hi opponent. Big, leathery, and...had a big eye. Wait it is an eye! And a god damn giant eyeball with wings.

Ahh, well i see ill have a hand to hand combat with you...uh...Ahriman. Drango thpught he'd have no trouble on this one, just like poking a person in their eyeball. As Drango was saying that the Ahriman flapped its mighty wings and flew twords Drango with speed, equaling his own.

Drango didn't see the initial attack it had, but he paid attention enough to see he was coming in at him. The eyeball laughed, as it took a stemm out from its insides and flung it at drango. Drango was hit in his abdomen, gushing blood where the wide gash was.

Drango yelled "Not too bad!". Then Drango took out his throwing dagger and whipped it out at him with enormous amount of strength. The Ahriman evaded it narrowly, almost ripping the tendens out of its muscles. IM not either.Drango said.

The eyeball came back in with the same attack, this time not coming close to hitting Drango. As it came in Drango thrust a quick stab and hit the pupil, partialy blinding it. Blood also spewed from the wound he had, but it kept coming in again, and agiain, and aigain. Every time it did Drango severley hut it.

Then the tables turned. The eyeball shot out a toxin, paralyzing him. Drango was stunned (literarly) and afraid. The eyeball took out another stem and repeadiatly stabbed Drango. Blood spewed snd poured from Drango. He had 20 stab wouns, all consistant with his two legs, nothing too severe, but still deadly

The eyeball sat there, in its leathery skin, laughing at Drango. Drango also laughed, how foolish of the eyeball not to kill him. The toxins wore off in a minute and Drango was angry, He crawled on the ground and spat at the eyeball. The spit was just a distraction for the eye. Drango moved over to the knife he threw that was stuck in the wall, pulled it out, and hid it behind him.

The eye came after him again, but this time Drango faught without delay. He quickly, and gracefuly, thrust the blade in the eye. He slashed downwards and then acrosss, the eye was now blind. Drango the threw the knife through the eye, imediatly killing it. Before it died it let out a blood wrenching scream, unmistakable for pain, the fight was now over, with little time to spare.
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Ok, I'm a little hazy on the image of the Farlik, but here's my post.

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Ruisu was walking along the mountain trail at night. Most of the villagers had muttered for him to be insane and wanting a death wish for climbing the mountain at night. There were rumors of such about the mountains, like a demon beast hunting on the mountains during the darkest nights. Ruisu wasn't worried much. He had encountered such monsters before. Most of them weren't killed, but Ruisu wasn't the fool to fight a monster that was tree times his size.

Clouds began to cover the night sky, blocking the moon's light. A light wind began to pick up. Ruisu only had his pack of provisions, a lantern with some extra oil packs, and his Spearblade. A sword slightly shorter than a broadsword with a circular hilt and a long handle. Ruisu raised his lantern to see more of the path ahead when heard wing beats. Immediately, he unsheathed his Spearblade, expecting an attack. The wing beats were coming closer. He could barely make out a figure in the darkness. Ruisu positioned himself. This thing was aiming for him. As it came within only a few feet away from him, Ruisu figured what it was. " A Farlik."

Ruisu jumped out of the way just as the moon drake swooped at him. The Farlik flew out and began its attack again. Ruisu jumped away a second time but this time the back part of the wing came down and cut the back of his right arm with the claw a the tip of its wing. He gasped as he was cut. Ruisu inspected the cut and found it bleeding at slow rate. He couldn't dodge it all night. He had to attack. As the Farlik swooped in for the third time, Ruisu jumped of to its back and stabbed its left wing. The creature roared and crashed into the mountain side. The impact threw Ruisu into the wall, away from the creature, and away from is sword. The Farlik kept clawing at its wing to get the sharp metal out. Ruisu observed its behavior. He needed his Spearblade if he wanted to live. Ruisu threw a large rock at the beast. The rock hit it straight in the face, which got his attention. The Farlik charged at him. The only thing Ruisu had to defend himself was his lantern, and he really didn’t want to lose that. Again Ruisu jumped on its head and ran along its body. Along the way he pulled out his sword, but it didn’t come out easy. This caused Ruisu to lose his balance and fall straight into its swishing tail, which slammed him into the rock wall.

Ruisu picked himself up. The tail had dragged him a bit against the wall which cut him in several places across his front side. Ruisu was worried now. The Farlik had a tough exterior outside which was difficult to penetrate, and attacking the wings only wasn’t going to help. The moon drake turned around and was now advancing on him. Ruisu looked at his lantern then at the Farlik. With a last hope he threw the lantern at the creature’s face. The lantern exploded in flames, engulfing its face. The moon drake roared loud enough for some rocks fall of the mountain side. It stumbled of the cliff and into the darkness below. Ruisu peered over the ledge, making sure it wasn’t coming back. After a few minutes of waiting, Ruisu continued walking up the mountain slope. He was this far in his journey, he couldn’t go back now.
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Well, Drango, there were several good things about your post as well as a few things that need working on. I'll start with the things that need working on. First, the most glaring problem I can see is your grammar. It's usually a good idea to hit the preview post button below the box where you initially type your post. Then, you can read through what you've typed, eliminating obvious typing errors. Or, if you have the time and patience, you can type your post in Microsoft Word or some other word processor. This is what I do, especially for my longer posts, because the program should pick up on any of your spelling, typing, or grammatical errors. If you don't want to do that, that's fine. I'm just suggesting it.

Okay, next. You did a good job with your writing, but I think you could do so much better. Use these fights to expand your vocabulary. I did notice a few good words you used like "initial", though. A thesaurus can really help you here. If you find yourself using the same words over and over to the point of monotony, pull out a thesaurus.

Moving on to...*checks post*...your description. This area was pretty good, but it can also be improved upon. Here's a tip: Before you even start typing, visualize in your head exactly what you want your character and your opponent to do. Think of good words that will allow you to fully portray the action taking place in your post. This next part is important: The main goal of the Battle Arena is not to always defeat evey opponent but instead to write posts that paint a picture clearly enough for your opponent to visualize what you're doing. If you opponent can pick up on what you're doing and can write a response that accurately fits what you did in your post, then you've accomplished your goal.

*whew* That was long, but as you write more and grew more experienced, my critiques will shrink considerably. Now, for your next assignment...you'll fight something a little bit more difficult.

Shien: A large, four-leggged, dog-like beast with very large and vibrantly-colored butterfly wings protruding from its back. The Shien uses these gorgeous wings to sprinkle a powder onto its opponents that can poison, paralyze, or put them to sleep. The Shien doesn't always rely on this, however, as it possess incredible reflexes and strength. The Shien only has one known weakness, but I'll leave it up to you to "figure it out".

This is your chance to get really creative. Show me what you've got!
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Umm, can NaKi and I start our fight, or are we waiting for Bahamut to grade my assignment?
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Ooc. I’ll take your advice, I know I’m not that good of a writer, but I do my best. I also took your advice and I am writing this on Microsoft word. I’ll try and use my thesaurus to.

Ic. Drango was sitting on a large plateau, staring at his opponent, the Shien. This creature, standing there, just staring for the soul he was determined on claiming. The soul tat would soon fade away like a wave retreating from the shoreline. This time, the outcome of this battle may be different.
Drango took his offensive stance, standing on edge and about to attack. He looked up at this monstrous being. What was it thinking, just staring with those piercing eyes, right at Drango? Drango attacked, with a mighty blow. As Drango came in the Shien roared and spat a powdery substance on him. The substance sank in through his flesh and entered his bloodstream.
Drango howled in pain, succumbing to his unconsciousness. Sounds and images disappeared right before him, blurring and creating distortion. The pain faded, and now Drango was unconscious, sprawled on the rocky ground. The Shien grunted and was amused at what he had done. Defeating Drango now would be no problem, none at all.
Moving in for the attack, the Shien stabbed a poisonous claw right into Drango’s heart. His heartbeat irregular and dissolving. Blood oozing from his chest second after second, dieing a little bit in each. The Shien waiting for the end of the battle. Awkward though, Drango went into battle, immaturely and overlooked what would happen. Still and steady silence came in, the end of this battle over? The odds are all against Drango, and all towards the Shien. The battle was fast, boring, and easy. Now Drango knows defeat, and will train on until his time comes.

ooc. sorry if it was dull, i spent an hour and a half with writter's cramp. O well i died :'( boohoobooohooo. ahh well i live again!!
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ooc: oooh, another fight against NaKi! The last one was great, can't wait to get started!^_^

It was getting dark. Ravel stood on the beaches of Great Bay, he headed off toward his' home, Zora Cape, feeling disappointed at his' training today. He had barely found anything to fight today, and was eager to test his' new blade of seas. A couple of pathetic skull fishes and like-likes, they were nothing to him. Ravel hung his' head in shame, and began to feel that Termina was holding back his' true potental. As Ravel continued, he picked up a racid smell. He winced in disgust. The smell became so unbearable, that Ravel could hardly breath, and had to look down at the ground to keep from gagging. Suddenly, Ravel heard footsteps, and looked up into the eyes of his' opponent. A massive dragon like beast stood in front of him, It walked on two legs and weilded a great mace. The creature's skin was slimy looking and covered in course, long hair. The creature let out a roar, it had spotted Ravel. "RRRRAAAAAAARRRRRRRRRR" it bellowed. Ravel drew his double bladed sword, and got into his' battle stance. Ravel and his' opponent ran towards each other at great speed, and mace met blade when their weapons clashed. As Ravel tried to stand up to the sheer strength of his' opponent, he picked up the same smell, coming from behind him. He felt surrounded, intoxicated by the stencth. Ravel's gaurd was let down, and his' opponent sent him sprawling into the air. Ravel hit a hairy, slimy object hard. He looked up to realize in horror that there were two of the mighty beasts. He rolled out of the way of a second mace just in time to avoid being crushed into the sandy beach. He looked at his' second opponent, and said with a smirk "Heh, looks like I got what I wanted after all!." He got up swiftly, and charged, with his' double bladed sword pointed towards the second beast's leg. It sliced into it deeply. The beast growled in pain. Ravel sliced the other end of his' blade into the creature's other leg, and it came crashing down, leaking blood onto the sands. Ravel smirked slightly, and learned a lesson from it when a mace caught him in the back. Lucky for Ravel he wore armor. The blow crushed him into the sand, but thanks to his' armor, he was only hurt minorly. He got up, and the creature he thought to be dead growled at him. He quickly jumped onto the beast's head, ready to stab it. However, it was already awake, and it rose, taking Ravel with it. The other beast saw this, and swung it's lumbering mace at Ravel. Ravel saw it coming, and dived onto the sand. The monster had hit its own kind right it the head, crushing its skull instantly. Ravel heard the beast finally fall for good with a thud. Its skull and head slipt apart, and were scatered across the beach. Ravel saw his' first opponent out of the corner of his' eye, just realizing what it had done. "RRRRRRAAAAAAARRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR" it roared at the loss of its comrade, and recklessly charged at Ravel. Ravel was startled, and yelled without thinking his' limit break "Tsunami Blade!!" suddenly, Ravel's blade glowed a blueish color, and he instinctivly jumped into the air, and met the beast's mace. His' blade sliced right through it, and his' opponent as well. The beast was frozen solid, and seconds later, it shattered into many pieces. Ravel fell to the ground. "Thats two for Ravel, none for the rancid dragon beasts!" he said cockily, and walked away laughing.

Ok, sorry for the delay. My com was down on the internet. Ok, for this assignment. Good post, good work in dividing the opposes. One or two things to work on but your getting better at the things to work on. Your grammer can be higher in spelling and your vocabulary can be extended more if you want it to be. Vocab is a big thing in RPGing. Alot of things that others do may have big words such as Cataclismic or strofic. You need to work with a thesarus of some sort.

Lengthening your descriptions of what happens to your opponent is a major thing for this main catagory. A quick death for your opponent isn't good for RPGs. Try to work on lengthening thoughs.

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Ok, I'm a little hazy on the image of the Farlik, but here's my post.

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Ruisu was walking along the mountain trail at night. Most of the villagers had muttered for him to be insane and wanting a death wish for climbing the mountain at night. There were rumors of such about the mountains, like a demon beast hunting on the mountains during the darkest nights. Ruisu wasn't worried much. He had encountered such monsters before. Most of them weren't killed, but Ruisu wasn't the fool to fight a monster that was tree times his size.

Clouds began to cover the night sky, blocking the moon's light. A light wind began to pick up. Ruisu only had his pack of provisions, a lantern with some extra oil packs, and his Spearblade. A sword slightly shorter than a broadsword with a circular hilt and a long handle. Ruisu raised his lantern to see more of the path ahead when heard wing beats. Immediately, he unsheathed his Spearblade, expecting an attack. The wing beats were coming closer. He could barely make out a figure in the darkness. Ruisu positioned himself. This thing was aiming for him. As it came within only a few feet away from him, Ruisu figured what it was. " A Farlik."

Ruisu jumped out of the way just as the moon drake swooped at him. The Farlik flew out and began its attack again. Ruisu jumped away a second time but this time the back part of the wing came down and cut the back of his right arm with the claw a the tip of its wing. He gasped as he was cut. Ruisu inspected the cut and found it bleeding at slow rate. He couldn't dodge it all night. He had to attack. As the Farlik swooped in for the third time, Ruisu jumped of to its back and stabbed its left wing. The creature roared and crashed into the mountain side. The impact threw Ruisu into the wall, away from the creature, and away from is sword. The Farlik kept clawing at its wing to get the sharp metal out. Ruisu observed its behavior. He needed his Spearblade if he wanted to live. Ruisu threw a large rock at the beast. The rock hit it straight in the face, which got his attention. The Farlik charged at him. The only thing Ruisu had to defend himself was his lantern, and he really didn’t want to lose that. Again Ruisu jumped on its head and ran along its body. Along the way he pulled out his sword, but it didn’t come out easy. This caused Ruisu to lose his balance and fall straight into its swishing tail, which slammed him into the rock wall.

Ruisu picked himself up. The tail had dragged him a bit against the wall which cut him in several places across his front side. Ruisu was worried now. The Farlik had a tough exterior outside which was difficult to penetrate, and attacking the wings only wasn’t going to help. The moon drake turned around and was now advancing on him. Ruisu looked at his lantern then at the Farlik. With a last hope he threw the lantern at the creature’s face. The lantern exploded in flames, engulfing its face. The moon drake roared loud enough for some rocks fall of the mountain side. It stumbled of the cliff and into the darkness below. Ruisu peered over the ledge, making sure it wasn’t coming back. After a few minutes of waiting, Ruisu continued walking up the mountain slope. He was this far in his journey, he couldn’t go back now.

Good job for your first RPG post. I can see that you already have some experience in this catagory. Some things to work on. Your grammer can have some work. You always want your opponent to be able to read your post or his post could be messed up to your behavior in the fight. I trust you guys in the way to pick where you guys want to train at, such as picking the place as you did a mountain. Also, everyone mainly works on their Vocab. Work on extending your words to make your opponent try to match you.

Your next assignment will also be given shortly.
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Old 03-07-2004, 06:30 PM
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so me and NaKi can start our fight now, Bahamut?
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Howdy! KC here(as if you couldn't tell that...) and I'd like to join your school to make quite certain that I do not screw up anything in the BA.

I've never "RPd" as such, but I am an "experianced" fiction writer, experiance being a relative term which is open to interpretation.

But alas, I'm rambling, my approved character > Enter Tiberius, I await your response, somewhere.....

Is it a problem that I didn't read much past the first page?
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KC, welcome. I will be putting you under the comand of LadyElvenarcher, one of our teachers here.


Brigoffa8, you and Naki can start your fight now.
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Old 03-08-2004, 10:04 AM
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what is this RPG/fight thing do we just type up a story like a fight and use our member names, i really dont under stand, and if you can explain it to me i might join, but i gotta understand it first
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Your character you make up has to be approved first, in the Character Approval forum. Then when your char is approved you put it on the Char approval list and you start the battles. Then you write down your battle assignment and post it. Quite simple....

Bahamut, Bri can start off the battle.
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thanks i just made a charictar wait for it to be approved (charictar is called: Blitz) Ok i will enroll if you give me my training assignment then i can wait for my charictar to be approved then i can do it

EDIT: its been approved now : http://www.zeldauniverse.net/forums/...&threadid=8275

ready for my first assignment
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Drango: That post was much improved in the grammar category. Snaps for Drango! *snap, snap, snap* Sorry, Legally Blonde 2 moment...yeah, anyway. I also like the fact that you went with the defeat approach. Like I said before, the BA isn't all about kill-kill-kill. At least, I don't want it to be all about that. Your character doesn't need to be invincible and impossible to hit, so good job on your post. One thing, though, description was somewhat lacking. When I posted the description of the Shien, I put an emphasis on its butterfly wings, hoping you'd write something descriptive about them. Go all out and write about the different colors, the shape of them, the way they catch and refract the sunlight...sorry got carried away. Anyway, you get the idea. Your next assignment will be as follows:

Bahnor: An average human, male warrior whose primary weapon is his longsword. His supporting weapons include his short bow and poison-tipped arrows. He has average speed, defense, evasion, attack, etc. I'll leave it up to you to describe him. Remember, picture what you want him to look like in your head before you even start typing. Good luck!

KC: Welcome to the BA and this training school! You'll be under my guidance for the duration of your stay here, so get comfortable. Before you start this assignment below, it might be a good idea to read through some of the posts and critiques you'll find here in the school. It might help you. Okay, here's what you'll be fighting. I've used this before, but I'm too pressed for time to come up with a new creature.

Ahriman: A large, leathery winged creature whose entire body is one gigantic eyeball. It has unnaturally good speed and evasion, although it is weak on the attack and defensive side. Ahriman always attack in a predictable pattern, and if you can avoid its first few attacks and figure out that pattern, you should be able to easily defeat it.
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Old 03-08-2004, 03:57 PM
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Who will be my teacher i wish to enroll i have got my charictar approved
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