The Bounty Run(Bounty hunters or help against them)

OoC: Ok This is just about someone bein after my character marce's bounty. He's in my sig. This is my first thread here so I'm probably not that good at this.

BiC: Marce walked into a town of such high quality buildings there appeared to be small chateaus. Marce was in need of some food and supplies. Marce was filing through stalls of a densely populated market looking for some supplies as he was about to trek across the sea on a job. He was hired to kill the lord of a large territory in the north east. He needed some supplies because he knew he would be at sea for a while. It was amazing for such a large area to be so crowded. This place was full of people of every variety; there were wizards common fighters rangers and many more. He was looking through some dried meats, when he felt like he was being watched. He started to walk away from the stall he caught a slight glimpse through the corner of his eye of someone on the roof of a building. He kept walking towards the edge of town. When he reached the edge of the forest he took off bolting, His cloak flowing with him.

Marce was bounding through the trees of a thick forest. He could tell someone was on his trail when he was back in the market and he did not want a conflict there if there was to be one. He was wondering as he ran how they had tracked him there; how they could have known it was him. He built up such speed running through the forest that he simply jumped through the tree tops. He finaly reached a clearing far from town when a shadowy figure came out of the brush. He knew this was his persuer so he finaly came to a stop and pulled his blade from his belt and readied himself for combat as his persuer slowly stepped towards him..........

Is that any better? can someone post if it's ok for you now?