Critique Central!

Heyhey guys,

In the past, we used to have a thread where people showcased their best new pieces into one general thread, got a wee bit of critique and such and everyone else got a "gallery" with a lot of varied work to walk by and look at.
I liked the idea for that thread because it made it so that if someone doesn't think they have enough art to show to warrant a thread, or if they feel too shy to start and maintain a thread, it can go in here and they'll still get their critique and such.

THIS IS A ZUNIVERSAL THREAD FOR SHOWING OFF NEW PIECES AND GETTING CRITIQUE ON THEM FROM OTHERS.
/purpose of thread.

however,

This time, there'll be a few rules quite like those in the signature showcase thread. In fact (LemLem- I hope you don't mind this pal, but I'm going to use your rules)

THE RULES

- Each work should be commented on twice before a new work is posted, this way each work can get it's fair share of criticism.

- Criticism more then praise is encouraged here. Just saying "Looks great!" does not do it. At least say "Looks great, but..."

- Please wait two people before posting a work again. As in: You --> Them --> Them --> You

- Post only NEW pieces for which you want feedback that you haven't yet received from ZU'ers from another thread in the section.


So.. do we all get it? are we fine?
Cool

Someone get us a pair of scissors to cut the ribbon-
Ah there we go.

Let me begin then
I was asked to draw a self portrait thingy as a cover design for a magazine that will have a feature on my work next month. However, I thought that would be boring so I tried to use the front-and-back-cover advertisement possibility to it's maximum pimpage potential and got this:




Does it work? does it not? (empty spaces are where title and text will go)

It works really well, and I do enjoy that the bubbles aren't perfectly round. >.> You promise me to send a copy of this magazine, please? Also, the yellow-haired boy's bubble looks... more violent than the other bubbles. >.< I don't know how to explain it, but his bubble stands out more. Possibly due to his colour, but... I dunno.

I personally like the entire concept except for right upper corner, which isn't filled with nothing, it's merely blanco. You could fill it more with alternate stuff, like, try to experiment with all kinds of colours insteadt of specifically only using blue. I don't have any other negative comments.

I initially must comment the bubbles' shape, they not perfectly round, that's why I like them, too. Now a question: Why did you colour the woman in the lower left corner grey? It doesn't suit the image nicely, you should give her a colour as well, Imo.

Alucard, if you notice, she says that the upper right corner will be filled with the magazine's title and text will go.

Anna - ok, I'll save and send you a copy of the magazine ^____^
Hmm.. and I see what you meant about blondie's bubble standing out- I tried playing about with it a wee bit - is it ok this way? or do I have to keep lowering eh opacity? =)
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v1...thinger1-1.jpg

Alucard - what you see are the front and back pages. The one with the self portrait thing on the left is the back page. The magazine title and titles of some of the topics inside (and pages) will go at the top. The text for my feature will go next to the lassie blowing the bubbles.
Also, I meant for the self-portrait to be in black and white because I wanted it to be seperate from her "creations", and since they're all drawn, I thought it was a good way of differentiating.. kinda. Uhm.
Thanks for the comments! ^___^

Originally Posted by Lioness

Alucard, if you notice, she says that the upper right corner will be filled with the magazine's title and text will go.

I'm very sorry, I kind of wanted to reply very fast so I quickly skipped A_Q's comment... Once again, my apologies.

Originally Posted by Anime_Queen

Alucard - what you see are the front and back pages. The one with the self portrait thing on the left is the back page. The magazine title and titles of some of the topics inside (and pages) will go at the top. The text for my feature will go next to the lassie blowing the bubbles.
Also, I meant for the self-portrait to be in black and white because I wanted it to be seperate from her "creations", and since they're all drawn, I thought it was a good way of differentiating.. kinda. Uhm.
Thanks for the comments! ^___^

Hmm, thanks for explaining that. In my opinion, It's a very exceptional magazine's cover, Rarely seen such, so I gave those (unnecassary) comments.

*stickies*

Asia, any chance you're going to reveal what magazine this is for?

Ah, wonderful idea A_Q. ^-^

And, egad! O__O Your art is always so professionally done. It simply blows me away! I love the sheen on the bubbles that really makes me just want to pop them. X3

It really looks quite natural and the lines are so sleek and awesome. Eeek! Your art makes me so happy... :3

My gosh AQ....that looks great! I just love the bubbles, maybe it's just because I love bubbles...anyway I think you did a nice job on that, AQ

Anyhoo...

I started drawing a few months ago...I'll put my best one in here...


Don't ask about the smudge on the bottom right....it involves Microsoft Paint and Photo Editor....

Thankies, Tiroth ^_____^
And I'll probably scan in the magazine front and back cover later if you want, or take a photo =D

No problem Alucard, all your comments were valid, so, thanks for writing them =D

Cio - you are always so kind and have an I-make-people's-days quality - thanks for the comment!

Chari - now, about the smudge.. *laughs*
ok, seriously now- that's quite a clean and clear piece. Did you copy from an existing image or a character? or is this your own character?

I suggest you concentrate a wee bit on the line quality- don't be afraid to make firm smooth sweeping lines. Also, you can also vary the line widths. The outlines are usually thicker than lines inside indicating creases and such.

Hmm.. I was going to say something else but it's difficult for me to convey it without *showing*..
I need to run at the moment, but later in the day, I'll show you on the image what I mean *checks her watch*
Will be back to hopefully give you better advice =)

Keep drawing!

Chari: Not bad. I like it. It's clean, like Asia said, and it just looks nice. Although your lines could be less crooked in some places, but that's not a big problem. And the way you draw hair seems similar to the way I sometimes do it.

Just, I did hair differently in this one I did of a character whom I named Kelli.



I know my coloring needs work. >.< And I left out Kelli's feet because I couldn't get them right...feet are hard. >.> This is just her in a swimsuit, though. I just think this is my best drawing.

Originally Posted by Kynnella

Chari: Not bad. I like it. It's clean, like Asia said, and it just looks nice. Although your lines could be less crooked in some places, but that's not a big problem. And the way you draw hair seems similar to the way I sometimes do it.

Just, I did hair differently in this one I did of a character whom I named Kelli.



I know my coloring needs work. >.< And I left out Kelli's feet because I couldn't get them right...feet are hard. >.> This is just her in a swimsuit, though. I just think this is my best drawing.

Well, personally I find her hawt. :3
You've got talent, Kynnella, really. Only the hairs could have been drawn better.

Well, you're the first person to say that, Alucard. :3

Kelli is supposed to be quite pretty, hehe. Thanks for the comment! ^^

SG, her hands are a tad bit small and the wink looks awkward. Like she's trying reeaaaallly hard to wink. Like, "ArRRGH!! I'M WINKING!!!" cept not really, you see?

Anyway, I have an art piece for critic!


It's evilly adorable. ^-^ This was drawn for my friend Ixchell and her teddy bear, Beary. : D