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Originally Posted by HitokiriChibi

Hoi! I haven't posted in this particular thread before but... I needs help! @_@

Zis picture is a request for Knives - and I have never drawn two people kissing. I still have trouble drawing to people on the same page !!

I know there is something wrong with the hands, the arm... basically the whole thing really >_<; And no matter how hard I try to change it... it doesn't work ;-;

Hmm. The neck on the girl seems a too stretched out. Maybe it's because her shoulders are too low? I'm not quite sure. And something about her lip doesn't look right. Wow, this is really helping you, isn't it? >.< I'll try and write some things over it with my tablet in a little...



You draw hands and fingers very well though, in their positions. That has to be one of the hardest things, and you've got good skill with it. However, I can tell it's mostly just a light sketch out, but the girl's fingers seem a little too masculine.

Since no-one's actually posting actively for this thread to permit any new entries, thus more-or-less killing the thread, I hope no-one minds if I posty something for critique.

Basically, it's the little mermaid, and how I imagine her to be in a more realistic plane.

WARNING for partial nudity.













(Bad quality as it was scanned, cropped and enlarged.
I've been told that her boobs and back need some adjustments, so extra critique on how to accomplish that would be great.
Also, since this is a quick practise sketch, I scanned it and coloured it in, similarly, for critique before doing the final piece.




To achieve the hair, for time-saving, I simply shaded the region with solid red colour, then added strands at the end to make it look realistic.
However, would it look more realistic if I drew each strand individually, like I did with my Phoenix: Endsong piece?

I'm aware that her face is very pale, and her skin is brown, but that's simply because I have only 12 basic-colour pencils, so ignore that for now, that will change once I buy some decent pencils.

Originally, I wanted a more deeper, emerald green for her fin, (but I didn't have a dark green pencil) but I also wanted to see if scales that I scratched in appeared - which they don't, so if anyone has any tips on how to create visible, authentic looking scales, please feel free to tell.
Lastly, I added a purple shell necklace on Ariel's neck, as it's simply criminal for her to not wear her signature purple chest accessory.

Originally Posted by super-fergus

You love him - It's Ganondorf!

When I was drawing this, i wanted to capture Ganondorf as if he's just been interrupted by Link, saving the day!

Who knows what Ganondorf's hands are about to lay apon.

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- Criticism more then praise is encouraged here. Just saying "Looks great!" does not do it. At least say "Looks great, but..."

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I've twisted the rule as there was zero activity here, and even then, I personally have made sure the last piece submitted was commented upon at least once.

In any case, you've submitted this piece in another art thread here, no?
In that case - you can't by right, post here.

Eyah! SD art works! Being an avid Ariel fangirl, I was all "eek! That's awesome!", and it is. :3

I absolutely love the colored version. I can barely tell you only used 12 colored pencils. It's amazing. o-o

I especially love her hair, it's so flowy. And, her tail is all shiny, you gave everything such wonderful texture! ^-^

The only thing that i see wrong with it are the hands, which aren't entirely noticeable. It's like, unlike the rest of the body, they weren't given as much detail. But, as I said, you can barely notice, seeing as you're distracted by the excellent drawing as a whole.

I love it. :3

I noticed no one was commenting on my thread, then i saw this thread, and though maybe this was the best place to post instead.

You barely posted it today. Be patient. ;3

Originally Posted by super-fergus

I'm still darn confused!
I noticed no one was commenting on my thread, then i saw this thread, and though maybe this was the best place to post instead.

So tell me please, what am i to do?!

Well, you've only just created your thread, so it's likely that few people have had the time to see it, bear in mind ZUers live all around the world in different timezones.
Be patient.
If no-one responds to your thread in a few days, then feel free to post here again, but bear in mind the rules.

Oh pish posh.
This thread seems to be fast with feedback though!
yes, I'm a impatient person - eek.

I'll try here later, okay?

I absolutely love the colored version. I can barely tell you only used 12 colored pencils. It's amazing. o-o

I only actually used five - Red, yellow, brown, purple and green.

I especially love her hair, it's so flowy. And, her tail is all shiny, you gave everything such wonderful texture! ^-^

So, should I continue drawing the hair in the same way? :3
I was worried that it'd look a little blocky. ^_^;

The only thing that i see wrong with it are the hands, which aren't entirely noticeable. It's like, unlike the rest of the body, they weren't given as much detail. But, as I said, you can barely notice, seeing as you're distracted by the excellent drawing as a whole.

That's very true - I'll take this away, make the hands and fingers more noticeable. Thanks for pointing that out.

I love it. :3

I love you. ^^

You barely posted it today. Be patient. ;3[/quote]

The colors are extremely eye catching!
And the contrast between the three primary colors make it all the more!
This would sit great with some sort of background.

overall, fab!



Two comments!...can i post now?

Originally Posted by SuperDecimal

I only actually used five - Red, yellow, brown, purple and green.

That's even more impressive! o-o

So, should I continue drawing the hair in the same way? :3
I was worried that it'd look a little blocky. ^_^;

Hm... peeeersonally, I think it looks really great the way it is, but, it's always fun to experiment... hhhm... I say go for it! Maybe it will look even more awesome! x3

That's very true - I'll take this away, make the hands and fingers more noticeable. Thanks for pointing that out.

You're welcome. :3

I love you. ^^

^-^

Where you bent her waist/hips looks like such a big angle, it makes it look really awkward I think - like she bent right at the ribcage. It also seems to extend her stomach making it look really long.

Umm.. could try by making it more sloped, make it a more gracceful curve?

I kinda drew what I meant if you didnt understand that ^^;

SD inspired me! : D

But, erm... there was a hole in the paper and I put her too far down, so her tail is all squished. Also, I don't think I should have gone over it with ink, because I made the bubbles look funky. x-x

Maybe when I color it, it will not look all "D:" and more like, ": D".

Anyway, thank you muchly for inspiring me, SD. Brought back a lot of memories from when I was little and Ariel was all I could think about. X3

EDIT: And, now that I look at it, the pen lines are all shaky. Eep, I guess I should stop drawing so late at night. I was half asleep drawing most of this. XD

Originally Posted by HitokiriChibi

Where you bent her waist/hips looks like such a big angle, it makes it look really awkward I think - like she bent right at the ribcage. It also seems to extend her stomach making it look really long.

Umm.. could try by making it more sloped, make it a more gracceful curve?

I kinda drew what I meant if you didnt understand that ^^;

Ah - yes I see.
It definately makes her look a lote more realistic.
I shall definately try making her waistline more streamlined like you've suggested in the final.
My reasoning for the super-slim, angled waist was simply because that's how she appeared in the cartoon: http://www.wallpaperspecial.com/wall...e-Mermaid9.jpg
But I agree, the sizes I've used look a little unnatural - thanks for the advice!


Cio: I'm currently printing out your pic to write on - so I shall have a critique ready as soon as possible!

Hey! My drawing only got one comment! Aren't we supposed to do two comments per drawing? ;_;

Originally Posted by Kynnella

Hey! My drawing only got one comment! Aren't we supposed to do two comments per drawing? ;_;

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