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01-27-2004, 07:13 AM
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Timeless
I have been working on this for a while, and just can't figure out how to finish it, so I am coming here for help.
Timeless Her beauty and grace are the same; Her youth has never changed. She has Wisdom beyond her age, Timeless is her name. Forever and Always she has been; one with the earth and with the wind. As she will be 'til the end, When her time shall begin. And in her time she shall be The one acknowledged, true, Queen. Her name, her reign, shall be Timeless, It shall be a time of great rest. And there is where I am stuck... please! help me!
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01-27-2004, 07:40 AM
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Re: Timeless
Maybe you need a stanza about what she DOES. Also, the closing one could be about how she will never end because she is timeless ;0) Or maybe talk about how she had no beginning?
Hope that all helps.
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01-27-2004, 11:32 AM
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Re: Timeless
Woah, Hall Mark should hire you. It's better than those "Get better. This card contains a happy bear." You could like give it to people in the hopsital, make them feel more about living or something. Oh well, one man's opinion.
5/5 on creativity -Sean
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01-27-2004, 05:23 PM
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Re: Timeless
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I would go with BBD. I think that is a good way how to close your poem.
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