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Guardian of Ice's poem: Lonely way
Lonely way
Looking back at the road behind me darkness covering the path there's no turning back no going back Gazing at the road ahead what's the point on going on? Why does only this path open? Lonely way Why should I think twice? No one back there will care they never cared for me... Lonely way I shall not turn around I shall not go back I shall not rethink my decision I shall no longer care about the rest Gazing at the road ahead what's the point of going on? Why does only this path open? Lonely way Why should I think twice? No one back there will care they never cared for me... Lonely way
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Re: Guardian of Ice's poem: Lonely way
Hmm yes very good on the poem you have a strong meaning in it. Pretty advanced for someone your age I tip my hat to you.
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Re: Guardian of Ice's poem: Lonely way
Thank you, fuzzycoat. ^^ This is an actual thing too since this is what it felt like to me when I was going from my old school (where I was picked on a lot and had no friends) to a new school. So this is like a poem about me really...
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05-12-2005, 07:08 PM
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Re: Guardian of Ice's poem: Lonely way
That was a very deep poem. I liked it. I think we all feel like that sometimes, and it's good that you know how to express your feelings through poetry.
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05-12-2005, 07:09 PM
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Re: Guardian of Ice's poem: Lonely way
I to know how it feels to move and go to a new school I have been to 7 diffrent schools and I have been pick on my whole life.
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Re: Guardian of Ice's poem: Lonely way
Thank you, you two. But I've been picked on since Preschool and it still happens today. So that's how I felt when I moved from a horrible school to the one I go to now, but soon to leave. But some people I'm sure can relate to my poem.
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05-13-2005, 08:01 PM
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Re: Guardian of Ice's poem: Lonely way
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05-13-2005, 08:51 PM
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Re: Guardian of Ice's poem: Lonely way
Thats nice and emotionaly deep sounding poem. Its really good. I think you should write more poems(even though you say you don't really like them)
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Re: Guardian of Ice's poem: Lonely way
Thankies WWD. I shall make more when I have the time. ^^ But the only poems I don't like are the ones that have to ryhme because I can't ryhme.
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05-13-2005, 09:00 PM
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Re: Guardian of Ice's poem: Lonely way
Awesome poems. Very deep. Write more! Write more! Write more! Write more! Write more! Write more! Write more! Write more! Write more! Write more! Write more! *continues chanting*!
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Re: Guardian of Ice's poem: Lonely way
Very nice poem Guardian of Ice! I can definately relate to it.
 Can't wait to see more of your stuff!
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Re: Guardian of Ice's poem: Lonely way
Thank you Essence and Southern Belle.
 I shall write more, to make all of ya happy. ^^I was bored with this one so it may not be as good was my first poem. Heart Broken Once full of life and spirit Carefree and a loner No one understood who I really was No one did There was a boy Who was the only nice person to me I never knew his heart belonged to another girl Heart Broken When I had enough courage to ask him out He turned me down in a cold mean way I never looked at him… not after what happened Heart Broken What happened on that day? What happened to me? Will I ever be the same? Will I ever find true love? Days and years pass by… After years of being alone… I finally can be myself again I found a true love… I continue on with my life Without anymore sorrow and pain For my sorrow and pain is gone I’m no longer Heart Broken….
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Re: Guardian of Ice's poem: Lonely way
Two good poems there. The first one I understand.
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05-14-2005, 10:22 PM
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Re: Guardian of Ice's poem: Lonely way
Im terrible at writing, so I guess I really enjoy seeing things that people do well at, that im not good at....if that made sense.
In other words, your poem was really good. Nice use of the repetition. But I hate analyzing poems. We do that in English all the time. Frankly, arent poems supposed to be more moving if you dont analyze them? Oh well. Keep it up!
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