the ten warriors

im makin a fan fic that isnt even close too done.... but heres a sample:





The legend of zelda

the ten warriors
there is a legend, a legend so great, it shall destroy pure evil forever. ten heroes shall rise to destroy it. now this story begins.
It is a beautiful day in the land of hyrule, everyone is outside and having a great time. At hyrule castle town, zelda walks her way out of the castel. The sun is heating the place, yet there is a nice cool breeze. Back in kokiri forest, link comes out to find the same situation, he makes his way to hyrule castle while humming and singing. He goes there to see princess zelda. that is how this quest begins.
Once link gets there, he is happy to see zelda. Zelda is glad to see him. "hello!" says zelda chuckling with laughter. "hey!" says navi. Link smiles with delight as he walks up the stairs to zelda. "nice day, isn’t it?" says link happily. "oh, yes it is." Says zelda as they look to the sky. "link, for some reason, I feel somthing bad might happen." Says zelda as they both look at each other. "wow!" says navi. "what is it?" link and zelda say at the same time. "look at that!" navi says.
They look to see a dark misty cloud covering hyrule. "it’s a cloud." Link says boringly. "that’s no cloud, i sense evil coming about." Says zelda. The cloud starts to form into a human shape, as it does, all of hyrule goes dark and every one goes into a panic. The mist quickly becomes a gerudo, but not any other gerudo. He instantly teleports infront of navi, link, and zelda. "it’s you, why have you come back!!!" link says angrily. "what?" zelda and navi say at the same time. "it is ganondorf!" says link. Zelda and navi gasp in fright. "correct boy!" says ganondorf in an evil voice. "but how did you come back?!" says zelda. "i have come back with power, and i am here for you, now for the beginning of world domination!" ganondorf says with his arms in the air. Suddenly creatures started to appear everywhere from otrocks, poes, redaeds, to gohmas. Ganondorf floats to zelda, they both start to vanish. "i shall take zelda and destroy the sages!" ganondorf says as he grabs zelda’s arm. "no, link help!!!" zelda yells in fright as she reaches for link. "yaaaa!!!" link yells as he draws his sword. "fool, you shall not win this time!" says ganondorf. "yaaaaa!!!" link yells again as he slices at ganondorf, but all ganondorf does is vanish in smoke with zelda. Link falls to the ground. "darn it!!" Link yells as he pounds the ground with his fist. "hey, what did ganondorf mean, he came back from power?" asks navi. "i think he ment the triforce, remember?!" link asks, suprised in a bad way. "yeah, i remember now!" navi says.
"i remember, he took part of the triforce and infused it within him, just like me and zelda." Link says as he looks at the triforce marking on his hand. "you there, halt!!" say the guards running towards link and navi. "oh shoot!" link says as he hops to his feet. "where is princess zelda, and the gerudo that caused all of this!" angrily a guard yells, pointing a spear at link. "hey don’t look at me, it was ganondorf!" yells link. All of the guards gasp in fright as they here that name. All of the sudden, a voice comes from nowhere. "link, can you here me?" asks zelda’s voice. "zelda, are you all right, and where are you?" asks link. "I’m all right, and I’m in the dark world in ganon’s tower, you must help." Says zelda. "all right, I’m coming." Link says. "wait, first you must have the ocarina of time, the three spiritual stones, and pull the master sword." Says zelda reminding link. "i know." Link says as he walks. "wait, I’m sensing evil in the temple of time, there is a dungeon behind the pedestal of time, ganondorf must of done something in there, be careful link." Says zelda. "all right, I’ll be careful, you be careful too." Link says.
"was that princess zelda, fine link, you may pass." Says a guard. As link walks to the temple of time with navi, he finds some redeads there, but they were focused on every one else. "hey looooosers!" link yells to get the redead’s attention. The redeads turned and screamed an ear shattering scream, but no one was there when they looked. Then some fire arrows came from above and hit all of the heads of the redaeds, Then they all dropped dead flaming into nothing. Then the people looked up and saw link standing on top of a building. "hey, you should leave this place and go somewhere else!" yells link as the people leave. Link walks in the temple of time, puts the three stones in, played the song of time to open the door of time, but something is missing, the master sword is gone! "what, this can’t be happening!" yells link in anger. "wait link, remember what zelda said. Says navi.
"oh yeah, the dungeon." Link says as he remembers. They both find a time block and link plays the song of time to lift the stone. They enter a long hallway to see a room full of nothing. "oh come on, there’s nothing here!" link says angrily. "wait, look!" says navi as they look above. They see the master sword floating in midair! "Woa ha ha ha haa!!!" laughs an evil voice. "who is that, show yourself!!" yells link. "I am the dark wizard from beyond, Arazak !!" yelled the voice as the hooded beast floated downwards, infront of the master sword. "you shall not have this sword!" yelled Arazak. "we’ll see about that!" yells link as he draws his hylian sword and his hylian sheild. First they leap at each other as navi attacks Arazak. They start to slash at each other.
"this is getting annoying kid!" says Arazak as he shoots a beam at link. "I remember this." Says link as he whacks the beam back at the beast. The beam hits Arazak. "aaaaa!!" Arazak screams and yells in pain with mouth wide open with his sharp teeth and his glowing eyes. Arazak starts to vanish into smoke. "you have won this time, but I’ll still live, I’ll be in the dark world in the six palaces." Says shadooso as he vanishes. Link grabs the master sword. "seven years to the future!" says link as a blue light surrounded him. All of the sudden, link and navi find themselves in the realm of the sages grown up.
Link and navi look around to see all of the sages except the sage of light. "what are you all doing here, and where’s rauru?" link asks confused. "we’re here because ganondorf has come again, and rauru is gone." Says saria, sage of forest. "ganondorf has a dark evil wizard working for him, we must stop them both." Says nabooru, sage of spirit. "first you must assemble ten great wariors and defeat evil together." Says ruto, sage of water. "you must also find zelda, for she is the decendent of the sage of light man." Says darunia, sage of fire. "all right, thanks for telling me what to do, I’ll get on it." Says link, as link and navi rise and vanish.
Link and navi find themselves out of the castle and in hyrule field. "all right, time to call epona." Says link as he pulls out his ocarina. He plays a country like tune called epona’s song, then there’s a loud naaaeeee. Then link and navi see a galloping rusty red colored horse, then it comes to a stop infront of link and navi. "lets go!" says link as he hops on epona’s back and rides her in incredible speeds across hyrule field.
"where are we going link?" asks navi. "where going to lake hylia." Says link. "lake hylia, why there?" asks navi. "because, i know some people there i can assemble into the group." Says link as he comes to a stop infront of the lake. "first I’ll need to go to the professor of this lake" says link as he jumps of epona and opens a door to a large house like structure. When they get in there, link and navi are shocked to see no one but a slug like creature with the head of the professor himself! "eeeeew!" says navi. "what the heck happend to you!?" asks link loudly. "well, i was working on some potion, then everything went dark!" says the professor. "and theeen." Says link as he waves his arm around and around.
"then, monsters started to appear everywhere!" the professor says as he starts to panic. "yeeeeess." Says link with a convinced looking face. "then, everything went light again, and i became a slluuuuuuuuug!!" yells the professor angrily. "okay, but how do i brake this curse on you?" asks link. "well, there is one way, it’s a potion." Says the professor. "cool, how do i make it." Asks link as he walks to the professor’s desk. "no not like that you fool! It’s in the water temple." Says the professor correcting link. "oh, i was just heading there, but i need some eye drops." Says link
"there is some on the shelf." Says the professor. "hey thanks." Says link as he puts a jar of it in his pocket and heads out the door. "wait, ten rupees." Says the professor as link tosses the two blue rupees and heads out door. "thank aaaaggghhh!!" yells the professor as the rupees fall on him and link closes the door. "hey link, is it okay if i stay here and watch epona?" asks navi. "all right, but we shouldn’t do this. I’ll see you later." Says link as he puts on his zora tunic and iron boots. Link makes his way to the temple in the water as he walks on the lake’s floor. As link walks down in the water, he takes out his hookshot and hits a blue green colored crystal on a strange
door. The door opened as link makes his way through a hall way under water.
"finally, no more water." Link says as he jumps out of the water and into a huge round room with big holes in the walls and a giant tower in the middle of it. "wow! I guess i should get in the tower, but how am i going to do that?" link asks himself with a concerned face. "of course, the hover boots!" link says as he slaps himself on his head and equips them. Link starts to walk in mid air to the top of the tower. Once link gets there he looks to see a big hole that leads a way down, but all link can see is mist. "that must be the room I’m looking for." Says link as he walks down the tube in mid air.
"finally, I’m there." Says link as he drops down into a big room. Then two figures start to appear. One, from links shadow. Another from a glowing orb at the top of the room. link’s shadow leaps out of the floor becoming no other then dark link. The light becomes another copy of link as he lands on the ground. "Who are you?" Link asked. "As Dark Link is your dark side, I am your light." The copy replied." Well you two, I'm looking for a potion that is in here. I also came to ask Dark Link something." Link replied. "You also can help.... Light Link" "We got your potion and we are ready for your question." Dark Link replied. "Ganondork is back and he's crappier than ever!" Link said. " I need to assemble a group of ten warriors to defeat him. Can you guys help?" “ Why should I help you?” Dark Link said with a snarl.. At that, Link drew his sword and placed the tip of the blade right at Dark Link’s throat. “Because I’ll slit you’re throat if you don’t!” Link said with a nasty grin. "You can count us both in.......By the way.... Here's your potion.." Light Link said as he tossed Link a small bottle. All the links left the temple and swam up to the lake's surface. They walked in the lab, tossed the professor the potion and left. Link heard a slight poof as they left the lab. When they exited, Link played Saria's song. "Hello? Saria? Can you hear me?" link asked with his mind. "Yes link, I can hear you.” Came Sairia’s voice from no where. ”Where is the next warrior found?” Link asked Saria. “Link, now is the time you must go to a different kingdom to find what you seek. Go to the top of the mountain to find the passageway to this foreign kingdom.” “ Okee dokee!” Link said. Link ran up to Epona, his horse, and pulled the others up with him. Epona did not like all this weight, but she slowly trotted in the direction of death mountain.
It was a long trip up the mountain, but after a while , they got there. At the top link noticed a tunnel that he hadn’t seen before. “Guys! I think this is the tunnel to the other kingdom!”
They walked cautiously through the tunnel looking this way and that. At long last they saw light and the end of the tunnel. But, before they took one step out, a huge rumbling noise came from around them.

Any chance I can talk you into adding a few spaces between them words o.0 oooo makes my eyes hurt -

ill consider it when im done.... but what do you guys think of it? good, bad, what?

I thought it was pretty good! But yeah you should make it eaiser too read...but keep the story going. I cant wait to see what happens at the end.