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I gonna start a new thread for my zelda story. sorry if I'm not suppose to.

Chapter 1
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Deep in a golden country called Hyrule, there lay a legend...The Legend of a Hero. It was said during times of chaos and war,an young hero would arise. Dressed in green clothing,he would slay evil and restore peace back to the land. In present times this story is thought as only mere fable.But as the people laughed and joked, a mysterious force had slowly rose..And in a small village in Hyrule a young boy's destiny would awaken.

A light rain had started up in Homestead Village. Rain had been abundant lately in the small village. It was home to a few families and a young man named Link. Link,nearing his sixteenth birthday lived with a famous swordman named Kasuto. Link had been taught many techniques from Kasuto and was showing off to the young children.

"Wow Link! Teach me!Teach me!", cried a young boy.

Another girl snickered."Yeah right, you can't do that stuff."

"Can too! Right Link?"

"Maybe another day Tanner,it's starting to rain." said Link.With that he took the kids home. Link enjoyed showing his skill to the children. There weren't many his age except Anabelle, Link's best friend. In earlier years, he would have loved showing Anabelle his moves, but she had become much more lady like. Link had also grown an new attraction toward her. The two friends were growing up.

After taking all the children back Link started home. He had grown tired from the long day he had. But as he advance toward home he heard a sharp scream. Link knew that voice from anywhere. He turned in horror to see Anabell being attacked by a gang of theives.Link quickly reacted.

"I'd leave her alone if I were you."

The leader of the gang of theives turned to Link and snickered. The others joined and laughter.

"And I'd stay out of this if I were you!", spat the leader.

He then pulled at Anabelle's body, beckoning her to follow. Anabelle had stayed quiet due to the fact her mouth had been tied closed with a cloth.

"I'll give you three seconds to let go of her..3..2...1!" Link charged a thrust and ran toward them. But he stopped quickly when one held a knife to Anabelle's throat.

"Back away kid and she won't die."

Tears ran down Anabelle's rosy cheeks. Link now froze, with the fear of losing his friend.Her life was in his hands.Link did the first thing he could think of and tried a quick attack.

"You just signed the girl's death slip!" One of the theives began to try to kill Anabelle but was stopped when a quick sword slice.The thing was it wasn't Link.

Kasuto easily took out each thief. Anabelle was freed and Link caught her in his arms.

"K..Kasuto I ...."

Kasuto kept his back turned to Link. "Take Anabelle home now!" He then walk off quietly. Link knew and sensed Kasuto's anger and knew he'd get and trouble.

"You okay?" he said to Anabelle.



"Yeah, I'll be alright."

"Look, I'm sorry about what happened. I'll take you home."

The two friends walked back to Anabelle's home. Her grandmother came to the door."Now what happened to you two?" She treated them

Later,Link prepared to return home. "Are you sure you'll be fine, Link?"
said Anabell.

"Yeah,Yeah but your the one that should be worried."

"Link, I told you. It's only afew scratches and cuts."

"Okay" Link walked home slowly. He knew Kasuto would come down on him
hard. Kasuto had a short temper during situations like this. "Might as well
get it over with."

Hey, that's pretty good. Although it was a little on the short side and it had some errors in it, but I think it'll turn out to be a good Zelda Fic. Keep it up! ^__^

You know everytime you post it, it gets a little better. Though there are a few unfinished thoughts here and there. Overall - good stuff

Thanks. I've just trying to make this thing as good as possible. I'm trying to plan the story more so it'll take awhile for more.

cont. Chapter 1
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Link walked into his home quietly, expecting Kasuto waiting in his chair. He was not there. Link then realized where he might have been. He and Kasuto had an secret wooden area in which they fenced. It was an place away from it all where Link had learned his best attacks.

Upon his arrival to the secret area, Link noticed Kasuto. He was on an aged tree stump, . Without any notices of Link’s presence he started to talk.

“Link! How could you make that kind of mistake! Anabelle’s very life was with you and you acted reckless!”

“Kasuto I was in a bad situation. Come on, you would have done the same.”

“Listen you can’t always take things with your actions. You have to take responsibility for what you do.”

“So what you’re saying is you would have left her. Those creeps would have killed her anyway and you know it Kasuto. I did what I had to do. Why are your always pushing me so hard. It’s not like the world is ending.”

“On the contrast, Link. Have you even heard of the raids in Kakariko Town? Word is that things similar to this have been happening and I plan to find out who has been causing all this. Tomorrow, You and I will go down there and I can’t have you putting innocent peoples’ lives in danger.”

Link was tired and did not want to put up with one of Kasuto’s speeches. Without much consent Link left back to his home. Night had fallen in Homestead. Omly thing on Link’s mind was sleep.

The rain had become heavier. As it pounded on the window pane, Link sat thinking in his bed. He had heard the words of his mentor, but he was unsure if he had quite understood. The sounds of the rain had put Link in a daze, but he awoken when he heard Kasuto’s voice.



“Link, wake up. Get your sword.”, said Kasuto quickly. “For what?” Kasuto put his hands to his side. “We have some visitors.” Link knew something was wrong. The look on Kasuto’s face had showed it. He gathered his father’s sword and shield and headed out the door.

Expecting the worst, Link walked out with caution. He turned to see Kasuto facing two men. One was tall with wild hair and clothing. He also had a huge sword. The other man was fairly short with a robe that almost covered his feet. He stood with a grin and began to talk. “Are you the swordsman know by many as Kasuto?”

Kasuto replied without hesitation. “Yes. What business do you have with me?”
“Heh. We’d like you to join our organization, the Hordein Army.” “Do you accept this offer?” Link wondered what this organization wanted with Kasuto. “What exactly is the Hordein Army? Why do you want me?”

“We’ve heard so much about your great skill and were eager to have you join us.” The short man turned to Link and stared at him hard. Link did not know why but he sensed a great hatred from the man. “Kasuto, I don’t trust this guy. Something about him isn’t right.” Kasuto stood quiet for a moment. “I am sorry, but I cannot accept your offer. I came to Homestead to settle down from that. I suppose I have a different life now.”

The short man‘s face became angry. “Sorry? I will not take no for an answer. Do you understand what you are giving up?!” Then I am afraid we have a problem.”
“Look maybe we can work something out. I….” You will be sorry you did not accept. Jamison, take care of this fool!”

The other man had stood quiet, but now had took out his sword and prepared to fight Kasuto. His blade was long and sharp, but this did not scare Kasuto. “This is foolish. Why must we fight? There is no reason!” Before anyone could say a word, Jamison quickly attacked. Kasuto jumped out of the way. Then he began to break down. “Kasuto! What’s wrong ?” Kasuto was on his knees trying to fight an invisible opponent. “S…something’s ….in my mind!”

Link tried to get to Kasuto but he was pushed back by several swords slices from Jamison’s mighty sword. “You will stay down…forever!” “Wait! Do not kill the boy. We only need Kasuto.” As Link’s vision faded he saw one last image: Kasuto being dragged away.


When Link awoken he found himself in Anabelle’s house. He had been treated and his wound had been bandaged. He turned to see Anabelle at the foot of the bed he was on. He then remember Kasuto.

“ A..Anabelle where is he… where’s Kasuto?”, Link spurred out.

cont. Chapter 1
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Anabelle grew seldom, but answered Link.” The villagers could not find him Link. About two or three men brought you back here. They searched around for him.They’re out in the woods searching now. It’s been awhile now since they have returned.”

Without warning Link jumped out of bed and grabbed his sword. But Anabelle blocked the doorway.

“Link, be reasonable. You’re still hurt.”

“I’m not hurt enough to go help find Kasuto. Stand back Anabelle.” But Link looked in her eyes and realized he could not bear to hurt her nor worry her more. “Look I’ll stay for awhile but I got to find Kasuto.”

“Well at least have something descent on child.” The two turned to see Anabelle’s grandmother with green clothing in her hands. “Here Link. These were your father’s own clothes.”

Link found himself wearing an dark green tunic and skirt like outfit. Anabelle giggled while Link stood red faced and embarrassed but was relived to see Anabelle happy again.

“You’re telling me my father wore this outfit, Granny”

“Yes It was one of his wishes for you to wear it. …Link I believe you are ready to start your journey. Kasuto was right. Now I might be an old woman, but the rumors of raids in Kakariko are true. I believe you are the only capable of beating what ever “force” is out there.

Link I want you to meet with a old friend of mine. He lives just east of Kakariko. He can definitely get you up to health. So Link what do you say?”

Link thought for a moment. “Yes I’ll do it but I’m going to need supplies. Food, water …And at least a horse too.” It seemed as though Link was ready to accept his duty.

Well that was different, and you, ny friend are in need of a beta reader. Is a good story but you have several words that are entirely misused. But that was only mildy distracting. If your of the mind and would like someone to do a quick read throughs for stuff like that - PM me I'm sure I can work something out.

Be back to read it again when you post it

I'll go with achitka on this. You also posted the same part twice if you haven't noticed. Also around the part with the two men, it's very hard to tell who is talking. Might be a good idea to fix that.

Sorry about the lack of posting. I'm still working on it and it should be finish by mid week.