the hero rides again

as night falles on the peaceful hyrule link lie beside epona as the sun set when the sound of hoves fades in as lnk see the on coming army, he jumps on eponas back to warn the hylians, but there wasnt enough time to fully arm themselfs so link leeds his small army to meet the enemy and link leads the charge.

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Excuse me.... if you're going to post Fan Fics than at least you should have a paragrah done than a sentence. I just giving a advice when you start any fan fics

sorry im new at this

as link leeds his army in to battle he drew the master sword and one by one the enemys fell. but he alone couldnt handle them even with the army they couldnt win so link called upon the power of the sages and he once again lead his army in to to battle.
The battle raged there was wave after wave of moblins, it raged into the early morning when link caught a glipes of ganondorf commandding his army to retreit but there was a look of not defeat on his face but a smile, link couldnt understand why, his army had lost what was he happy about.
the following night link saw his face smileing at him and he woke with a start and two thing came to mind how had he survived there last battle and why was he smileing he had lost the fight.

(hey shadow thanks for the advice)

No offense, but I had a hard time following this. As a suggestion, it would be better if you use capitalization and punctuation in your story. Editing your work and make correction to your spelling errors would be nice too, as well as adding more detail to it. We know that it's Ganon's army Link is fighting, but what kind of monsters is he fighting? (like Lizafols, Stalfos, Iron Knuckles, etc...) Telling us where the battle is would be helpful as well.

Remember, these are only suggestions, and I'm just trying to help you with your fic.

feel free to carry on the story and I'll come and see what happens.

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no one wants to carry it on then, anyone (looks around) fine.

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doesnt anyone want to please come one pppppllllllllllleeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaaasssssssssss eeeeeeeeee

dragonlord, you're not allowed to double post. Or triple post for that matter. If no one wants to reply here, you should let the thread die. If you want my advice, check other people's fan fictions and see what you have to work on. You need lots of practise as it is now.

dragonlord, if you are wanting people to continue this, then I suggest you do a few things first. One, redo your first entries. They're not very readable, and you should add more detail like I suggested the first time. Make the entries so that people can think of something to add to the story, not just Link going out out, slashing a few enemies and returns home to go to bed. You should probably post a few entries before asking someone else to put in their ideas so they can have an idea of where to start.

If you still don't have an idea of what to do, there are other interactive fics in this forum. Why not read from some of those to get an idea of how to get yours started? I'm not suggesting that you copy them, but perhaps you'll get an idea from reading them on how to go about a fic that is done by many people.

EDIT: Okay, Lioness beat me to it. You should listen to her and take her advice before you take mine since she's a mod.

I forget about douple/ triple posting