Welcome to Poetry Wonderland, NobleCucco!
Broken Tree is truly moving, flowing, and has some very beautiful imagery. In particular, these lines caught my attention:
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Originally Posted by NobleCucco
to wipe up his memorys.
one of tears and stains of grief...
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I would have expected to "wipe up his tears", have "memories of grief" and "stains of tears"; but you expressed them in different ways.
Protector is simple but sweet. I especially enjoyed these lines:
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Originally Posted by NobleCucco
I watch as the tears stream down...
falling into your hands.
Resting a finger apon your cheek...
catching the fallen dreams...
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