Okay....From what I see in the improved version....good, good. I approve you, in the name of the BA council. Go forth and prove yourself.

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Some said I was wrong to dream that way,
and some made light of death and sorrow,
but death is glory...now.
[The Lineage][The Poetry][The Reminder][The Serenity]
True revolution is in mind; remember that, and all else shines...