Agno Denstern

This is my first character. I'm sorry if something is too short (which, since it is my first character, it will be). I will fix anything wrong right away!

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Name: Agno Denstern, son of Afgro
Age: 16
Race: Colony of Highland Humans
Sex: Male
Hair: Black, short, as part of tradition
Eyes: Blue
Weight: 9 Stone
Height: 5.4 Foot

Weapon: Stone Dagger, which is pretty sharp. It is heavy though, so you can have trouble using it. He also uses the dagger as a bludgeoning device (given by the elders).
Armor: Hard Bark, stripped from nearby trees. He has no other armour because it was not permitted in the arena. He only has it because he is no longer competing for initiation. The bark is effective against things such as arrows and wooden weapons, but has no protection against swords and the like.

Strengths: Stealthy, able to hide quickly. Mainly, he's stealthy because of teh fact he is very thin for his age. His size sometimes lets him down, because he's very tall, but for the most part, he is able to hide well. He is able to talk to animals which weilds greater possibilities such as using them to help him hide. He is also able to use nearby resources effectively, such as fashioning a shield out of bark from a tree.
Weakness: Pretty weak in raw strength and speed. He has very little muscle, but it's not his own fault. It's just how he is. His temper makes it hard for him to diffrienciate between friend and foe. He can't talk back to animals, so he relies on body signals to indicate what he wants. He is still very young to be fighting.
Skills/Magic: None, and maybe never

Personality: Cautious, wary. He is quick to temper, and never far from a weapon. He’s sometimes relaxed, but always on guard in some way. If he’s in a temper, he won’t care if he’s damaged, but if he isn’t, he’ll just flee. However, in his temper, he is too vicious to define between friend and foe, so you must be cautious approaching him in battle.

Appearance: He is quite tall, but average for a 16 year old. He is very thing, so he can be stealthy. He’s strong enough to carry a pack filled with items, but not enough to be able to fight brilliantly. Blue eyes, brown hair, short nose, medium ears, and nice teeth are his facial features. He has a fine beard, and always has a dagger at his side. It never leaves him. His body looks average for a 16 year old, and he has only one long scar down his arm, which he got during initiation.

History: He was born in the Highland Human Colony. That is in the Mountains of the Elder Peaks. He grew up with his parents at first, but as with everyone at 14, he was taken away to the Elders of the Battle Guilds. In his childhood, his parents were pretty good parents. He was always fed enough, and had all he wanted. But all parents were forced to do that because of what the child would face later. Any who didn’t were thrown into prison. He had no friends at the beginning, but he made many of them at the Guild, but lost touch with them when he began his quest. I’ll get to that in a minute. He always loved animals too, and has the unnatural ability to communicate with certain ones to the extent that he can understand them in a basic way. He can’t communicate back. It’s a shame though, because children in the Colony aren’t allowed pets as it may put them in danger.
Like all in the village, he believes in the great Gods of the Canyon and Earth. There is Liyn, God of Dirt. Hund, God of Stone. Jaynu, God of Snow. And Kaln, God of the Peaks, and the most powerful of the Gods. So, when he is lost, he blames Kaln for being angry at him for some reason. On his way to the Initiation arena, he stumbled down a cliff face. He woke up later, and found a nearby village. This village was much different to his village, and none had ever heard of Highland humans.
“Who on earth are these ‘Highland Humans’ you speak of?”
He now spends all his time, searching for his home, and fighting to find clues about where his home is. On his way, he is forced to battle many people, and to kill them. He doesn’t enjoy killing, but he must do it to find out the truth. He always hopes that one day he will find his Colony, but has resigned himself to the fact that he may never find it, and he will die before he finds it. He keeps on dreaming though…

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Okay, first, I'm going to need to you to expand Weapons, Armor, Strengths, and Weaknesses. Add more description to everything. Tell more about the dagger and his armor. Why is he stealthy? Is it because he is quick? Because he is small? Maybe quiet?

If he has no magic, then leave that blank, as well. No need to add another section.

The bio is alright, but the structure would have been nicer in clear paragraphs. I like that he has a good connection with animals. I like animals, too. It's a nice way to make him feel more real.

So, just add to Weapons, Armor, Strengths, and Weaknesses.

I've added some extras to those fields.

Is that enough, or do I still need more?

Very nice. Sorry it took so long, too.

*Approved*