Welcome to Misc. Writing, Andúrhil!
Your poems are wonderful! I don't think you should doubt yourself.
"Found":
I like the way you describe the blue eyes in the first stanza, but not mention them until the sixth. It kept me wondering where the blue-ness came from.
Nice contrast on the notions of what is "lost" and what is "found".
"The End":
This is my favourite of the three. I especially enjoyed the following lines:
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Broken kingdom of dreams
Shattered illusions of peace
Crushed hopes of understanding
Endless void of confrontation
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Your combinations of adjectives and nouns are rich and masterful. They add great depths of beauty and darkness to the first four stanzas, and I like how the swelling mood of those stanzas taper towards the end.
"Hell":
The first stanza calls for a certain savageness that lingers throughout the poem. It was somewhat surprising for me to find that the poem's actually about something rather ordinary. What you describe is so true.