OoC: Sorry, about allow me to show you somethings. Due to my position as teacher I feel it would be good to inform you on proper spacing. M’kay, always put a space after any sort of punctuation. I noticed you didn’t do that all through your post. First, start a new parargraph everytime a different person speaks. Like this:

"What the h-!"

"Shut Up!!!!" he snapped. Then Kijimisu stuck the Ice Sword into the ground and froze Khaz's feet. While walking away from Khaz Kijimisu could hear Khaz in the distance screaming at him to come back."Where are you going? Get back here! Unfreeze me, you big-eared freak!!!"

Oh and you really should read Khaz’s profile before attempting to write him. That way you would have been able to write him better.

Of course, you don’t have to listen to my advice, but it is there if you need.

BiC: Let me deal with him…I’ll make it a quick death, offered Takai.

No way, I can handle this even if you started it. You knew very well that he isn’t a Dark Elf! snarled Khaz in his mind. Him and the other Half Elf had stopped for a moment, both panting for breath.

Let me finish what I started… said the other half.

No! That’s my final answer! Khaz charged the man, his two katanas held out with their sharp edges facing him. He wouldn’t kill him if he could help it, just knock him out if he could manage it. The Half Elf blocked with his icy sword causing Khaz to leap backward rapidly and rush in again. There was another clank of metal against metal as the man block his katana.

Khaz was doubling back again, but the heel of his boot got caught on a protruding root and he stumbled. The Hylian fell over onto his backside. The other warrior slashed his sword down at him. Khaz gasped and flung his blades up to caught it just in time. The Half Elf pressed down, hoping to oppress the elf. Khaz grounded his teeth together as more sweat glided down the sides of his face.

You can’t even subdue him, let me deal with him! growled Takai. Khaz felt an odd force use his hands to press harder again the warrior’s blade with more strength than Khaz knew he possessed.

No! Stop it! This is my body! cried the Hylian, trying to block away the force that was slowly absorbing his body.

Wrong! This is our body! And this time I’m using it, said the other half. Khaz tried to move his fingers but found the command was not followed. He felt Takai’s smirk cut into his lips and he knew there was nothing he could do to stop him.

Takai’s leer widened. He shoved his blades forward, knocking the Half Elf backward. The Hylian leapt up to his feet, more gracefully than Khaz could have done. His dark eyes locked upon his pray. They were empty eyes that knew not the meaning of mercy.

The other warrior had regained his balance and stood, gazing back at the changed Hylian. Takai sneered, this would be over quickly. He rushed forward, probably faster than the Half Elf could see, flipped his right katana into the air and socked the man heavily in the gut. The punch had sent him flying backward, smacking into a tree trunk with a sickening crack. The wood shattered and spilinters flew into the air. Takai’s sword tumbled back down and he caught it by the hilt with his right hand.

That’s enough! yelled Khaz. He’s probably knocked out, there’s no need to do anything else.

“I suppose you’re right,” said the Hylian, not caring that he was speaking out loud. “But where is the fun in that?”

Don’t you dare!

Takai simpered as he ignored Khaz’s nagging and strode toward the stunned man, his katanas ready in his hands.

OoC: M’kay, keep in mind Takai is a lot stronger than Khaz. This is why I was hoping your character would be strong enough to handle a god.

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