Some good poetry

Help Me
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Lost and broken
Hopeless and lonely
Smiling on the outside and
Hurt beneath my skin
My eyes is a fading
My soul is bleeding
I try to make it seem ok
But my faith is wearing
Help me fill this souls

Help me heal these wounds
My mind is an open wound
My heart is an open wound
My soul is an open wound
My life is an open wound
Help me heal these wounds

Help me

Yeah, that was a pretty good poem. The last line, broken off from the rest, was excellent because it haunted a few seconds after the poem was over. A chilling sort of call. I also liked the last line of the first stanza.

Help me fill this soul

There was one or two spelling errors, but I do that too, so its no problem.

I liked that poem of yours, it was pretty good! I especially liked how you used the various words you did in the first half, it set the sad mood real well I thought. Got a bit too repetitive though in the second half.

Try posting more soon!