KnowItAllSister's Poetry

Yes, I'm sure you all know me as having the many threads on art requests and fanfiction, well now I've started a thread on my poetry! It's not the greatest, but I do enjoy writing poetry. I hope y'all like 'em! Please feel free to give me any comments and/or criticism. Please note that my poems will be in green font so I can avoid confusion. Here are a few poems to start you off. They're a bit old, but they'll have to do for now.

Black Feathers
This bird which moves from tree to tree,
Gracefully spreads his feathers to fly,
Soars high into the heavens,
O Raven, thou art free!

This bird that sings its songs of sorrow,
No one to sing for, no one to listen,
This lonesome creature of the darkness,
Flies freely in the skies of ‘morrow.

This lonesome bird sings by day,
And hunts quietly in the night,
Seeking a friend to share his songs,
But nothing can be found today.

I can’t find a companion to listen,
Why won’t someone listen?
Listen to my songs of darkness?
Am I alone in this gruesome world?
The Raven ponders,
Am I truly alone?

“I Am”
I am hopeful and forgiving,
I wonder about ancient mysteries,
I hear music,
I see instruments,
I want to play them,
I am hopeful and forgiving.

I pretend not to know,
I feel mistaken,
I touch soft tears,
I worry I’m not good enough,
I cry when I hear him,
I am hopeful and forgiving.

I understand I don’t always win,
I say I will try harder,
I dream of being the best,
I try to win,
I hope to be better,
I am hopeful and forgiving.

'I Am' was very touching! 'I pretend not to know' was curious, I liked that line the best. I think the second stanza was great, but talking about instruments in the first stanza was also a cool read. Looking forward to more poetry!

Hey, thanks so much! I'm glad you liked them! Here's some more. I have a lot of poetry from before, so I'll be submitting quite a bit.
War
I stand-
I stand in the front line,
With my gun in my hand,
And a war on my mind.

A flash-
And then a crash,
My brothers fall down,
And blood is shed-
On the wet blades of grass.

I look around-
“Help!” shouts I.
I am answered by shouts,
Shouts of pain,
Shouts of misery.

I look farther the line,
And there! I find-
A comrade of mine.

He shouts “Come quick!”
I hold his hand-
It is cold and slick,
His head falls to the land.
My comrade is dead.
Sorry that some of my poems are sad, but I wrote a lot of sad poems at a certain time in my life. Here's a poem I just finished:

Saturday Morning
Dawn approaches,
And I open my eyes,
I open my window,
And see bright, blue skies.

I throw on some clothes,
And head down the stairs,
I sit down for breakfast,
As my Dad prepares.

I look out the window,
And see clear, blue skies.
And I see a bluebird,
As it gracefully flies.

I gulp down my breakfast,
And thank my dad,
I flash him a smile and say-
“That’s the best breakfast I’ve had!”

I run out the door,
And get on my bike,
I join my friends,
To play all the games I like!
Please submit any comments and/or criticism. Thanks for reading!

That saturday morning one was bright and peppy! I also liked your sad ones I think they are all great. I would have to say my favorite was "I Am". Keep writing!

Thanks so much! Funny story, "I Am" was a poem for school! I basically followed a format and then added the words myself! Is there anything you need me to explain?

w00t!!! That's fantastic KnowItAllSister!!!! I really them!! 'I Am' is really great one! Your a great poet! There is heaps of great poets on Zelda Universe! YAY! I love your writing it's got such awesomeness ^^

They are great KIAS. I Am reminds me of my life except placing the he with her.
War was sad yet meaningful. Saturday morning was nice too.
Personally I didn't get the first one. But overall, they are all great.

'Saterday Morning' was a great poem! I really loved the stanza:

I look out the window,
And see clear, blue skies.
And I see a bluebird,
As it gracefully flies.

There is a lot of fluidity to it, in my opinion, and a good image of happiness!

Thanks so much everyone! It makes me feel great when I get compliments on my writing, because I really love to write! In my opinion, a bluebird symbolizes happiness. It makes sense. Also, I see a bird flying in the skies represents freedom. Okay, here’s another poem! Thanks for being patient, everyone! Oh, and I got the inspiration from this poem by listening to the WW soundtrack. I thought of the Hylian King and got this poem!
Royal Procession
Trumpets flare,
As velvet carpet unrolls,
Off in the distance,
A golden bell tolls.

The carriage doors open,
And two feet step down,
People bow,
To see that his boots are brown.

As the King proceeds,
A proud wind roars,
Making the King’s cape-
Appear to soar.

The King turns ‘round,
And raises his arms,
To ensure the crowd,
He will live long and proud.
Any comments and/or criticism will be most appreciated! Thanks for visiting my thread!

That was good, KIAS! The things that were kind of weird was the "To see that his boots are brown" and the last stanza didn't rhyme in the same places as the rest. Great, concept though! The hardest thing is to just find what to write about.

Well, I changed the rhyming in the last stanza to:
1
2
3
3
instead of:
1
2
3
2. Anyway, thanks for reading and commenting!!! I'll have another poem up soon!

"Royal Procession" is grand! It's simple, but majestically powerful. I like the atmosphere. It makes me feel proud and free.

Well thanks a lot, Szerenade! I'm glad you like my poetry! I'll be writing more soon. In the meantime, you can try reading my two fanfictions if you like. The links are in my siggy if you're interested. Thanks for reading! ^-^