Pretty interesting. Reminds me of the intro to Harry Potter and the Goblet of Fire. That guy died too.
A few grammatical errors here and there (wrong: it's dog. right: its dog. wrong: its raining. right: it's raining.) and the word he was used a little too much to start off sentences, but other than that it was written pretty well.
I do have to point out that the cities can not be in the clouds, thousands of miles over the Earth's surface. If I remember correctly, the Earth's atmosphere ends at mile 6.
