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The rape was hardly even detailed
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A story involving Japanese people from the dark ages and there
isn't a detailed rape scene? Jeez, what has the world come to! (jk)
Mate, you have real writing talent. I am envious ~_~
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I wrote this very spasmodically during math class today
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Spasmodically. Best word ever. You're already off to a good start, and its not even begun yet! ^^
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At the gate of the large home, two guards were stationed, seemingly motionless. One of the guards shivered slightly, before coughing and cursing the cold weather under his breath. They were guards to their lord and his family, an extremely well known family who had their fair share of enemies; they were the Seigi family and had just bore their first heir. The Seigi family were the last remaining members of the Heiwa clan, whose members had all been killed in the ongoing wars amongst rival clans. The guards too, were just as oblivious to what was about to happen right under their noses.
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After watching so many episodes of Naruto recently its still in my mind and this paragraph reminds me of it strongly.
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His hair was jet black, of fairly reasonable length, with a long fringe, which covered his right eye, crossing over his metal forehead protector.
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Forehead protector? Okay, now I know its got to be a Naruto fanfic.
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There was a second of splitting plain and a helpless cry as the guard slumped to the ground in a fountain of crimson blood
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In typical anime style the blood contained in the body is always far more than the actual body-size of the person. How a tiny Japanese man could erupt into an entire fountain of blood is beyond me - unless its in anime ;-). A third thing that reminds me of Naruto.
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The kunai reached its target
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If you didn't know, 'kunai' is widely regarded by most scholars as a synonym for "Naruto".
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The dark haired man approached his target before him; a young man with long black hair and a kind, gentle face. The intruder thrust his sword into the man
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Is this the rape scene?
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his eyes were bright red.
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In the words of Kakashi-sensei: SHARINGAN!
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“Beautiful…” he smiled as he brushed back her soft, black hair with his hand and began to trace along her pale skin with his fingers. He moved his fingers to her mouth and caressed her lips, which quivered beneath his fingertips, before moving down her neck and to her shoulders; he slipped off her nightgown and forced himself upon her.
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Does anyone remember Eijiro's other fics? One was about a Japanese prostitute and I think the other one involved something to do with Japanese rape as well.
...anyone seeing a pattern here? :-P
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A tall and lanky man stood above the baby’s crib, he had a warm and gentle face, and also wore a forehead protector, with a different insignia on it.
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YEAH! Gai-sensei saves the day!!!
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stood above the baby’s crib, he had a warm and gentle face, and also wore a forehead protector, with a different insignia on it. He quickly grabbed the baby and took him into his warm arms, before darting off into the cold night of the forest, his silver hair shining in the moonlight.
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So maybe its not Gai-sensei... is this turning into one of those crossover fanfics? 'Cause that guy sounds suspiciously like Sephiroth. >_>
For the record my (relatively) serious comments were all said over IM.
Oh, and even better then this entire story: Eijiro's custom rank. Coupled with the father's (presumed) rape, the mother's rape, the baby-snatcher and Eijiro's past history with fics it is, umm, kinda disturbing.