
07-10-2005, 02:43 PM
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Re: (Zgen) The Dawn of Dissaster (T Light Vilolence)
It has a pretty okay, if a little generic plot. Try to imrpove the spacing though, it's pretty hard to read like that. You should learn the standard dialogue template and stuff like that. Be a little more descriptive rather than just having Link go places and such. Write about how feels and thinks about everything. And maybe inquire about words with a handy theasurarus(sp?). That's about it.
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