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Old 08-12-2012, 08:47 PM
MorbidDelight United States MorbidDelight is offline
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Re: A couple poems/lyrics from this year

Ah, okay. Definitely not! More overt lyrics definitely go well with music, especially if the lyrics have meaning (which they do here).

Out of the one you just posted, I liked the last verse the best by far. Definitely delivered on what the first two were promising. One thing:

Quote:
At last it is found in the self that all is holographic
I think it might work better with make "it is" "it's." But I would need to know the flow of the song, really.
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