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Old 04-11-2012, 10:47 PM
Pseud O Nym United States Pseud O Nym is offline
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Re: Spirit Blades

Good job! The guy who read the note before the captain did sounds like a horrid character! I like Kaizar's attitude! “But I was here first.”

Just one little thing:
“Long may the prophet of darknesssss live and breath.”
You need an e on the end of breath to make it breathe.

Good job!
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