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Old 01-30-2011, 06:07 AM
Ymirida Ymirida is offline
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Re: Gamzee's Corner

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Originally Posted by The Unknown Soldier View Post
Recently I've wanted to write more, so here's two more poems. Nameless as of now.



Don't you gaze into the sky?
Answer now do not be shy
The stars and bodies create a maze
Stare at it your mind's amazed

What is it of the black abyss
that we find so amiss?
Does something lurk beyond the sphere
that perhaps would bring to life our fears?

Do cities of evil plot our demise
Or do places of peace now reside?
Is the universe full of nothing
Or is existence empty of everything?

Believe me, don't believe me
Fear me, don't fear me
Heed me, don't heed me
But however you choose
I take my leave
Either way you're all fools


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Oh, what can it mean
I cannot forsee
You always see
What's best for me

So cloud my vision
begin incision
That beaming light is the...
End scene
I just want to say that I really liked your first poem. It has a really nice rhythm going due to the choice of words used. As for your second poem, I really like how mysterious and vague it is.
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