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11-21-2009, 07:45 PM
Burning hooves means Littlepip is watching...
Join Date: Jan 2006
Re: Amberstone's Training
As we talked about before I find that's a great way to describe a one-time NPC. I notice often in the EH many people try to describe everything in perfect detail even when they don't matter; when it's easier and quicker to leave some details out. Such as the appearance of a NPC who doesn't really matter. The trick to writing, I find, is to be clear without killing the reader with superfluous information. That's your lesson today~
"Sir," The Gardner said, walking into his supervisors office, "I found this...err...thing tearing up my garden," With a wave of his hand the gargoyle floated into the room. The supervisor walked towards the struggling beast, only to have it snap at his outstretched hand.
"I've never seen one of these before..." He stopped for a second to gather his thoughts, "Take it to the research laboratory for testing, they like playing with mythological creatures,"
"But sir, that's inhumane."
"Just do it,"
Well, unless Amberstone likes getting dissected I would suggest she get's out of there. Have her escape into the halls of the dome with the two of them giving chase. End it...Lets say whenever you would like.
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