Okay, this is better, but there's still some work to do here.
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Weakness-Deit does not have much stamina, and tires after approximately 30 min of intense battle. If the enemy is able to hold him off for a long amount of time, then Deit will be defeated.
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The thing about this weakness is that it doesn't really seem like a weakness. If Deit doesn't tire after 30 minutes of intense battle, I'd say his stamina is actually really good for his level and age. You even say "a long amount of time." So I think you should edit this to say he does have a lot of stamina and move it to his strengths section.
Also, I think you could have more strengths and weaknesses if you really think about it. That's also where we come to his bio. You need to consider how he got his skills in combat in the first place. You don't mention anything about that, but you need to. Since you don't say how he learned it looks as if he taught himself his own skills. But you also have things to work out that you've left unnoticed. Like killing everyone in his orphanage. Perhaps he has a natural talent for stealth and assassination, which you could add to his strengths and skills. But if he taught himself all he knows, then he's bound to have weaknesses of a somewhat novice fighter. You should also explain where he got his weapons and how he survived after he left the orphanage.